At first sight

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You sprung in me like chrysanthemums pearly,
with an unexpected sense of calm,
rounded petals blushing, inculcating into blood
reciting a prayer of psalm.

Would that the sky lend me its grey,
in exchange for velvet emotions that pourโ€”
I feel you despite the distance, ย the rest assured
peculiar this world at four o clock in the morn.

With a desire to serve, to belong and adore,
I can imagine no other throatโ€”
such is my state, heaven and torture, one and the same
dare I venture here and quote.

I knew long before you did of longing,
like darkness both intimate and frightening
Care to explore? And want completely,
as season grows with eager boughs ripening.

 

 

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Lucy is our guest host today and wishes us to pen
a ballad. (I hope I got it right!) ๐Ÿ™‚

Posted for Poetics: You Want It Darker @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Lucy says:

    You got it more than right, Sanaa. You knocked it out of the park. ๐Ÿ˜‰

    This ballad is amazing, especially as it hints an exploration to the darkness. It’s an embrace of darkness, I think, and the imagery is stunning too, like in these lines:

    “rounded petals blushing, inculcating into blood
    reciting a prayer of psalm.”

    Excellent poem! <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Oh oh! Thank you so much, Lucy ๐Ÿ˜€ I am so pleased you enjoyed it. I am relieved as I almost couldn’t muster to share this poem for fear that it might not fit the prompt. ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  2. calmkate says:

    this is stunning, love the blend of romance, distance and temptation … a great mix with a dark edge!

    PS did you get my email?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kate ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

      Yes, I did. Just replied to it.

  3. msjadeli says:

    Your line:
    “such is my state, heaven and torture, one and the same”
    resonated with me. The tentativeness in hoping the other feels the same is agony!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa ๐Ÿ˜€ so good to see you ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  4. Grace says:

    This reads so sweetly to me, reluctantly at first but with great abandon. I specially like this part:

    With a desire to serve, to belong and adore,
    I can imagine no other throatโ€”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh! Thank you so much, Grace ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  5. Ingrid says:

    This is a beautiful love-ballad, with a hint of the occult. I really enjoyed it, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  6. A romantic ballad, Sanaa, especially โ€˜You sprung in me like chrysanthemums pearlyโ€™, a beautiful simile, and the hint at darkness in โ€˜I can imagine no other throatโ€” / such is my state, heaven and torture, one and the sameโ€™.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  7. Dora says:

    This chimed with me: “peculiar this world at four o clock in the morn” – describes the torment of love and insomnia, “heaven and torture”! Wonderful love ballad, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dora ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  8. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Darkly romantic you did really well on this Sanaa.
    Especially this:
    With a desire to serve, to belong and adore,
    I can imagine no other throatโ€”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  9. “I knew long before you did of longing,”

    a few short words that describe how lovers grow apart

    1. Sanaa says:

      Or do they? ๐Ÿ˜‰ Thanks for stopping by, Alexandra ๐Ÿ’„โค๏ธ

  10. Vandana Sharma says:

    “I knew long before you did of longing”
    This did the trick for me!!!
    It says it all and speaks to me .
    Love this ๐Ÿ™‚

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