Between the strokes of dawn
October sighs,
graceful boughs with prettiest of charcoal sketches
as feeling grows—
I would open a vein for you;
if it meant to shield you from the hypocrisies of the world,
fidelity dark amber is a blanket of sorts.
Photo credits: Heartache by Jen Duran
Merril is our hostess today at dVerse and the word is “Blanket.” Come join us! ❤️
Posted for Quadrille #113 @ dVerse Poets Pub
visceral and very powerful last line Sanaa
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Oh, what a strong poem… showing how passion is very close to death… the dark theme of love is often forgotten for the more flowery parts.
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I love the dark passion in this poem, Sanaa! October does sigh, and what a lovely image of ‘graceful boughs with prettiest of charcoal sketches’.
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This sounds very dramatic and romantic.
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Lot’s of interesting contrasts here – ‘prettiest skies’ with ‘I’d open a vein for you’ – fidelity / hypocrisy – 44 words is so short – but packed with ideas here.
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Sanaa really love those first two lines and the emotional intensity of your poem <3
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Such powerful words Sanaa.
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Love as a blanket and shield. Beautiful and intense!
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(and thank you for the glorious prompt)
There’s a sad energy to this love affair, Sanaa.
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Creatively dark. wow
Happy Monday Sanaa
Much💖love
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Happy Monday to you too!
Much love ..
Very passionate. I would have opened a vein for Brad. That is true love.
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Such a lovely sketch of charcoal specially with the ending line. Love can move us to the deep edges of life.
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“as feeling grows—
I would open a vein for you;”
God, do I feel those lines. Excellent.
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This line:
“if it meant to shield you from the hypocrisies of the world”
So intimate.
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Powerful, powerful piece, Sanaa. Not a wasted breath here (you know I admire brevity, right?) nor a less-than-stellar image. And all of that excellence accompanied by some outstanding artwork. My evening is complete. Thanks.
That is such high praise! Thank you so much, Ron 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it. 💄❤️
The words are as visceral as the painting, more so as they offer comfort and protection from the world.
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to shield you from the hypocrisies of the world,
fidelity dark amber is a blanket of sorts.
The rights of darkness to protect unwanted hues that may be embarrassing to be revealed. It works that way, yes and a great poem, Sanaa!
Hank
Thank you so much, Hank 🙂 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Beautiful poem. Is that your drawing?
No, it’s by Jen Duran. Thanks for stopping by 💄❤️
Nicely done.
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so intriguing. you would open your vein. nicely paired with this exquisite art.
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I love your words and the striking image you’ve used. You’ve obviously written this for someone you care deeply about. Fidelity is certainly a blanket of sorts and I love the words you’ve chosen to describe it: ‘dark amber.’
Thank you so much, Ingrid 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Dark and yet comforting.
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A powerful poem, and illustration, Sanaa..
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“I would open a vein for you” such is th epower of your love and compassion, something very deep.
Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
love the imagery in this, we often put blankets or layers on those we love for protection … you captured this well!
Pulsing with passion. Love the artwork as well.