Hear the heart – its pounding high
Whispering low a ceaseless sigh.
The words you spoke used to melt;
Surrendered to urges which we felt.
His eyes of crystal seldom pass;
Piercing through the heart like glass.
Blessings which our wants demand;
Like lanterns through the darkest land.
Catch me into these arms and kiss;
And save me from this cold abyss.
Your presence tastes – violaceous bait
Passion flowers of heaven’s gate.
We lie upon love’s tender porch
Sheltered from the world – its scorch
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Passionate poem. The first verse is my favourite. It sets the tone really well.
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I had to look up violaceous to be sure–very sensuous images, both photo and words.
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A romantic title and passionate poem ~ I specially like:
Your presence tastes β violaceous bait
Passion flowers of heavenβs gate.
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So wonderfully romantic, 7 rhyming couplets that work in some subtle synesthesia; nice work. The poetic voice is perfectly matched to the sultry image.
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Very romantic and sensuous. I love the last couplet where you’re sheltered from the scorch of the world…nice.
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I can’t add much to the earlier comments. A very romantic poem.
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Passionate. The last couplet really strikes a chord – how wonderful that would be!
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So romantic and passionate…beautiful Sanaa…
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Violaceous – so tempting in a senseous poem. Very nice flow.
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Smoking hot!
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A sweet and tender piece.
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A lovely gentle sonnet that flows smoothly towards its passionate ending.
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LOVE-ly poem, Sanaa! Purple is a passionate hue and i like the thought of “love’s tender porch”…
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Ooh, I like this:
“Your presence tastes β violaceous bait
Passion flowers of heavenβs gate.”
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violaceous – such a wonderful word…it is wonderful to feel safe and loved by another…but i wonder if come the time loving ‘yourself’ is what counts and nourishes…another beautiful poem π
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I like your use of two voices, you are narrating in one voice. Then transporting us to the moments in another. Slipping in and out of stances. For a very interesting reading. Thanks for linking in at my Sunday Lime today
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I really like the ambiguity of the last line…
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passionate and sensuous poem. lovely use of rhymes.
the ending couplet is perfect, and i liked it a lot. π
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Wonderful! Passionate! And what a lovely word is violaceous! Is it by chance that i read of violets in another context today? At Daily Good:
“Forgiveness is the fragrance that the violet sheds on the heel that has crushed it.” – Mark Twain –
May your violets be whole and well.
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Such a passionate love song…the rhyme carried me through the burning love of this verse!
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I especially like “like lanterns through the darkest land” and “this cold abyss”……..
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Ah…I enjoyed the revisit to this one, Sanaa.
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Love that you wrote about love in spite of the scorch.
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I agree with the others this word is amazing violaceous sounds delicious to say. Your poem is filled with passion.
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What a great poem to read. I’d like to think that there was some personal experience to express yourself in this way as my own mind thought of such feelings of so many years ago.
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You are getting so good – really skilled – with rhyme … perhaps, that is at least partially due, to your wonderful choice of words. A lovely piece, Sanaa.
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Passionate and romantic. I loved the first two lines.
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There is something daring about your explorations of lush words and interesting rhymes. You are developing so fast as a poet, I am fascinated to anticipate what you will become. π
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There’s a very refined sensuality here…filled with wonderful imagery and detail. I most admire the way so much was said and implied in so few verses. Very nice work.
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Some clever rhymes here but underneath it all is the great use of synesthesia to add passion to the poem- especially love “your presence tastes”
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Beautiful flow of sensual imagery…
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This is luscious with passion. I like the sophisticated rhythm. Lovely.
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