“Rescue my Castle, before the hot day brightens to blue from its silvery grey” – Boot and Saddle by Robert Browning
Let them gaze while I most heartily pray;
They don’t understand how love’s like energy.
The sky brightens to blue from silvery grey.
Watch me swerve oh watch me sway;
Like fire that spins from within a spark.
Let them gaze while I most heartily pray.
Never felt the need to wander or stray;
Love is the path whose thoughts liberate.
The sky brightens to blue from silvery grey.
Give me grace so as to write and say;
The energy of mind – the essence of life.
Let them gaze while I most heartily pray.
Let not this love oh wither – decay
For in love’s limbs our vigor remains.
The sky brightens to blue from silvery grey.
I thank the lord above for him each day;
Our love’s a rhyme that feels complete.
Let them gaze while I most heartily pray;
The sky brightens to blue from silvery grey.
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Form: Villanelle
Posted on ‘Midweek Motif’ @ Poets United
Posted on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads
58 Responses
OOOOO, that first stanza is divine! And the entire villanelle is vibrant with the love and prayer it describes.
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This is full of positivity, Sanaa. I felt like in barefoot giving praise. 🙂
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‘For in love’s limbs our vigor remains’ is my favourite line in this vibrant poem…love is indeed an energy..it may fade but still it is there…and hopefully we are reminded so…another passionate and joyful poem 🙂
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May the sky brighten to blue for everyone…a most beautiful, prayerful villanelle…
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Such a wonderful villanelle! I love the repeated lines, and love that the silvery grey line was the closing one. Perfect!
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I am totally absorbed in the ode to true love; thanks for sharing this lovely poem. I do agree love is energizing
and thank you for dropping by my blog to read mine
much love…
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Your words and the image dance a very harmonic energetic dance. 🙂
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Oh this is so beautiful, Sanaa. I loved the optimism and faith reflecting in the poem.
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Sanaa, I do hope this is describing YOUR love. Love definitely is an energizing thing in one’s life….and is a wonderful path to be on!
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PS: Right you are 🙂
Nicely done!
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What an uplifting poem this is Sanaa. May you feel like this all your life.
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The joy of love nothing like it to keep that energy level riding high, wonderful…
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The words give color and energy to your Villanelle. You give the reader a bouquet of beauty in this poem.
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What a beautiful villanelle! And love can be such a happy energy. I hope this is a true poem for it is wonderful.
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Your loving, lilting rhythm is pure joy for this theme.
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Love suits you !:)
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This brought a huge smile to my face. Loved your use of repetition. Thanks for the read!
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Love is truly a free-flowing energy … Great job, Sanaa!!
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Boldly spiritual and that’s what our world needs most!
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The energy of mind….love’s a rhyme…
Beautiful lines Sanaa! Loved this!
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The villanelle form suits the ideas of the poem so well!
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Love is indeed a brightening energy!
Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Rajani ❤️
This is a perfect form for your talents and reads very much like a love song to me.
Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
A villanelle full of love, Sanaa. I love the echo of ‘The sky brightens to blue from silvery grey’ throughout the poem and love the line ‘Like fire that spins from within a spark’.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
There is so much joy in this piece. It makes me want to twirl and dance.
Aww! ❤️ Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! ❤️
What a joyous poem, so full of hope and faith.
Thank you so much, Toni 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Love can be (and is) everything, isn’t it? This is lovely…
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What a delicious Villanelle.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Good job on a very difficult form. I have tried to write them and failed miserably.
Thank you so much, Shay 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️