Until the last moment

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A lifetime of chipped mugs ago,
I held onto hope rising through
the snow, which had fallen like
swan feathers.

I knew not that sleep descends
with the promise of you waiting
as a poem dipped into darkest
sighs while time and world slip
away into abyss of desire.

 

Poem credits: ‘Somewhere Down‘ by runaway sentence.

Posted for Poems in April @ Real Toads

Comments

  1. Cressida says:

    Absolutely loved this wistful engimatic poem. A mood spinner evoked by the music and pic. A lifetime of chipped coffee mugs ago is an inspired phrase. A keeper. The pic? UK?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Cressida 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

      PS: It’s Utrecht! ❤️

  2. Ah yes, I recall that line. I like what you’ve done with it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  3. Paul Scribbles says:

    A powerful vignette Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  4. erbiage says:

    “A lifetime of chipped mugs ago”

    that is pure gold.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Eric 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  5. Locomente says:

    What a beginning! Too good… I am gonna take it with me 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️❤️❤️

  6. Margaret says:

    chipped mugs and swan feathers like snow…. magnificent

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. Anna :o] says:

    A wonderful wistful write Sanaa, dreamlike its quality.
    Chipped mugs and swan feathers – magnificent indeed.
    Anna :o]

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anna 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  8. The snow falling like swan feathers is so beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  9. Amrit Sinha says:

    This is a metaphorical beauty. Just loved it 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Amrit 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. Very clever, “A lifetime of chipped mugs.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      😀

  11. Ellecee says:

    To me, poignant, and as others have quoted, so many beautiful phrases. As Anna said, there is a dreamlike quality to the whole. 🙂 Love it,,

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ellecee 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  12. A wonderful beginning and the end is breathtaking! I love this Sanaa!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  13. kanzensakura says:

    A lifetime of chipped mugs ago…I love this line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  14. The longing rips like claws in this one. And the imagery of the first stanza, starting with Marian’s lines, and ending with yours, are heartbreaking.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  15. Jim says:

    Desire raises through the snow but fulfilment is lagging behind. Nice, Sanaa, it reminds me of the Rolling Stones song “You can’t always get what you want but if you try sometime you find you get what you need.” ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  16. gillena says:

    “a poem dipped into darkest sighs”

    WOW!!!

    Much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️❤️❤️

  17. Loved it. The longing for someone and sleep with a promise that one day it will manifest, is simply amazing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Neeraj 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. A short poem for you, Sanaa, but full of memorable lines. I love:
    ‘A lifetime of chipped mugs ago’
    and
    ‘with the promise of you waiting
    as a poem dipped into darkest
    sighs’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  19. Sara McNulty says:

    ‘a lifetime of chipped mugs’. That sticks in my mind. I love it. Great poem, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  20. Thotpurge says:

    A lifetime of chipped mugs ago… like that!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. Rommy says:

    I love that “lifetime of chipped mugs ago”. That’s terrific.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  22. Kerry says:

    This is a stunning poem, Sanaa. The sense of longing permeates every line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

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