November Sky
Sanaa -
April 11, 2018
Earlier PoemsPoetry

November with drooping russet leaves,
where whispers tousle their essence
remind of long-ago rooms.
Sweet is ache evermore
I reach for the sky
insert soft sigh
everything
was once
you.

 

Photo credits: Pixabay

Form: Nonet

Posted for Poems in April @ Real Toads

30 Responses

  1. Brendan says:
    April 11, 2018 at 8:05 pm

    Very nice. Plush and as sharply bitter as gently sweet.

    Reply
  2. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:
    April 11, 2018 at 8:20 pm

    Every line / word is beautiful, and I especially love “everything was once you”.

    Reply
  3. Kerry says:
    April 11, 2018 at 9:45 pm

    This is just perfect, Sanaa! I love the use of long ago rooms as a metaphor and the shape of the poem adds to the sense of something lost or left behind.

    Reply
    • Sanaa says:
      April 11, 2018 at 9:47 pm

      Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

      Reply
  4. Ellecee says:
    April 11, 2018 at 9:51 pm

    Isn’t it strange how the smallest of things can bring back the largest memory. I, too, like the shape of your poem, I think of it as drifting in thought. 🙂

    Reply
  5. Margaret says:
    April 12, 2018 at 12:46 am

    Oh – this narrowed down in to something very special!

    Reply
  6. othermary says:
    April 12, 2018 at 1:02 am

    Lovely, just lovely.

    Reply
  7. Annell Livingston says:
    April 12, 2018 at 1:31 am

    You take my breath away!!

    Reply
  8. Laura Bloomsbury says:
    April 12, 2018 at 1:57 am

    all drawn down to the point – lovely shape poem “tousle their essence”❤️

    Reply
  9. Mama Zen says:
    April 12, 2018 at 2:37 am

    Beautiful!

    Reply
  10. Sherry Blue Sky says:
    April 12, 2018 at 3:16 am

    “Everything was once you.” How beautiful and sad.

    Reply
  11. Kim M. Russell says:
    April 12, 2018 at 4:16 am

    I like the shape of your nonet, Sanaa, and especially love the wistfulness evoked by ‘November with drooping russet leaves’.

    Reply
  12. gillena says:
    April 12, 2018 at 5:14 am

    Very romantic setting Sanaa

    Much🌼love

    Reply
  13. kanzensakura says:
    April 12, 2018 at 12:17 pm

    I love the look of this poem and the drooping russet leaves.

    Reply
  14. lynn says:
    April 12, 2018 at 11:06 pm

    This one mists the eyes and pauses the heart, Sanaa!

    Reply
  15. Frank J. Tassone says:
    April 14, 2018 at 9:18 pm

    Radiantly done, Sanaa! Love the blend of your concrete design with the extended metaphor!

    Reply

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *