The problem with desire that’s inconceivable
Sanaa -
October 8, 2018
Earlier PoemsPoetry

Luscious
these thoughts
that seem to swallow
on October day,
as I sliced an avocado
then sought to peel off the skin.
Are you ever tempted
to begin again
where nobody knows your name
speak of desires decadent
‘yuck,’ he smirked behind the tent.

 

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Posted for ‘Quadrille #66’ @dVerse Pub

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58 Responses

  1. Frank Hubeny says:
    October 9, 2018 at 4:41 am

    Nice rhyme between “skin” and “again”.

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  2. De Miller Jackson says:
    October 9, 2018 at 4:44 am

    Love the subtle rhyme with skin/again.
    That last line is just killer.

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  3. Toni Spencer says:
    October 9, 2018 at 5:18 am

    Love the line…begin again where nobody knows your name. Fun write Sanaa

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  4. Linda Lee Lyberg says:
    October 9, 2018 at 5:47 am

    You have such a talent- beautiful Sanaa!

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  5. V.J. Knutson says:
    October 9, 2018 at 5:53 am

    Love this pondering aloud and the slamming comment – typical day in the life of our household.

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  6. Beverly Crawford says:
    October 9, 2018 at 5:57 am

    This one ends with a bit of a mystery for me. Mastering the art of “harvesting” avocado can be a task, for sure. I’m smiling … and wondering.

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  7. Jill Lyman says:
    October 9, 2018 at 6:25 am

    Your whole post is put together so well! Nicely written poem 🙂

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  8. Glenn Buttkus says:
    October 9, 2018 at 6:38 am

    You gave us a whole poem without all the fooling around some of us did; kudos to you for that-[-reminded me of TV series CHEERS–where everybody knows your name; smile.

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  9. Just Barry says:
    October 9, 2018 at 6:48 am

    The rhyming is tight and the message resonates with me in a way that’s not yucky. Well crafted.

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  10. Arcadia Maria says:
    October 9, 2018 at 6:55 am

    I really like the imagery and meaning behind this piece. Nicely done.

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  11. gina says:
    October 9, 2018 at 7:56 am

    the lusciousness of your words Sanaa, just divine, love how avocado flowed with swallow

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  12. Ali says:
    October 9, 2018 at 9:37 am

    I can’t think of anything I want and lust after more than an avocado. 🙂

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  13. Dwight L. Roth says:
    October 9, 2018 at 9:47 am

    I liked the way you used the avocado to illustrate the pealing away of your desires! Men never seem to understand “what a woman wants?” Great poem.

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  14. Mish says:
    October 9, 2018 at 10:30 am

    I feel a very interesting story lies behind the poem, eluded to in the last line. Very intriguing. I like the casual inclusion of the avocado. Nice work, Sanaa.

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  15. gillena says:
    October 9, 2018 at 12:27 pm

    Avocados need to be skillfully handled or else Yuck!!!

    much love…

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  16. Kim M. Russell says:
    October 9, 2018 at 2:30 pm

    I love the beautiful way you convey the difficulty of peeling an avocado, Sanaa, the slant rhyme ‘skin/again’.and the killer couplet with the prompt word! What was he doing smirking behind the tent?

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    • Sanaa says:
      October 9, 2018 at 6:47 pm

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

      PS: I put him there in the closing line deliberately to add to the story 😉

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  17. ...erbiage... says:
    October 9, 2018 at 4:14 pm

    very tempted.

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  18. Thotpurge says:
    October 9, 2018 at 5:21 pm

    Are you ever tempted
    to begin again
    where nobody knows your name… like that!

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  19. kaykuala h says:
    October 9, 2018 at 7:03 pm

    Those unfamiliar and uninterested best be ignored. Need not have to waste one’s bother. Best to concentrate on those nicer people around and they are aplenty once they know our name!

    Hank

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  20. Old Egg says:
    October 9, 2018 at 7:18 pm

    I hate the word “Yuck” you can cross him off the list! Luscious thoughts require sensitive responses.

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  21. Sreeja Harikrishnan says:
    October 9, 2018 at 9:17 pm

    so rhyming…love how you use the avocado here!!

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  22. Sherry Blue Sky says:
    October 10, 2018 at 12:07 am

    I enjoyed the struggle with the avocado as counterpoint to the pondering in the poem.

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  23. HA says:
    October 10, 2018 at 12:41 am

    Ooh, interesting — I liked how you used this particular action to denote the temptation of doing it all over again. That ‘yuck’ makes me wonder though and acts as a good contrast to the decadent feel of the previous lines.
    A clever write, Sanaa! 🙂

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  24. Bjorn Rudberg says:
    October 10, 2018 at 2:42 am

    That new beginning… I wonder if anybody can overcome those desires.

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  25. Carrie Van Horn says:
    October 10, 2018 at 2:58 am

    I love your poetry Sanaa. It is always so soothing and beautiful!!

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  26. Frank J. Tassone says:
    October 10, 2018 at 7:13 am

    Love the turn-about in the last line, Sanaa! Great write!

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  27. Jim says:
    October 10, 2018 at 8:12 am

    HE has his. I was thinking avacado before I got to the word. Good write. Sanaa. Thank you for hosting today.
    ..

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  28. annell4 says:
    October 11, 2018 at 3:26 am

    The answer is” yes,” and I did it myself. Find a new place, find a new you.

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  29. Marian says:
    October 14, 2018 at 9:41 pm

    Love this, Sanaa! A snapshot. Yes, I’m often tempted. Or not tempted, but wishful. I like eavesdropping on these two and learning how they both lean, on escape and avocados both. 🙂

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