
Luscious
these thoughts
that seem to swallow
on October day,
as I sliced an avocado
then sought to peel off the skin.
Are you ever tempted
to begin again
where nobody knows your name
speak of desires decadent
βyuck,β he smirked behind the tent.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Nice rhyme between “skin” and “again”.
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Love the subtle rhyme with skin/again.
That last line is just killer.
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(and thank you for the lovely prompt)
Love the line…begin again where nobody knows your name. Fun write Sanaa
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You have such a talent- beautiful Sanaa!
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Love this pondering aloud and the slamming comment – typical day in the life of our household.
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This one ends with a bit of a mystery for me. Mastering the art of “harvesting” avocado can be a task, for sure. I’m smiling β¦ and wondering.
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Your whole post is put together so well! Nicely written poem π
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You gave us a whole poem without all the fooling around some of us did; kudos to you for that-[-reminded me of TV series CHEERS–where everybody knows your name; smile.
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The rhyming is tight and the message resonates with me in a way that’s not yucky. Well crafted.
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I really like the imagery and meaning behind this piece. Nicely done.
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the lusciousness of your words Sanaa, just divine, love how avocado flowed with swallow
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I can’t think of anything I want and lust after more than an avocado. π
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I liked the way you used the avocado to illustrate the pealing away of your desires! Men never seem to understand “what a woman wants?” Great poem.
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I feel a very interesting story lies behind the poem, eluded to in the last line. Very intriguing. I like the casual inclusion of the avocado. Nice work, Sanaa.
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Avocados need to be skillfully handled or else Yuck!!!
much love…
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Muchππβ€love
I love the beautiful way you convey the difficulty of peeling an avocado, Sanaa, the slant rhyme ‘skin/again’.and the killer couplet with the prompt word! What was he doing smirking behind the tent?
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PS: I put him there in the closing line deliberately to add to the story π
very tempted.
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Are you ever tempted
to begin again
where nobody knows your name… like that!
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Those unfamiliar and uninterested best be ignored. Need not have to waste one’s bother. Best to concentrate on those nicer people around and they are aplenty once they know our name!
Hank
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I hate the word “Yuck” you can cross him off the list! Luscious thoughts require sensitive responses.
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so rhyming…love how you use the avocado here!!
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I enjoyed the struggle with the avocado as counterpoint to the pondering in the poem.
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Ooh, interesting β I liked how you used this particular action to denote the temptation of doing it all over again. That ‘yuck’ makes me wonder though and acts as a good contrast to the decadent feel of the previous lines.
A clever write, Sanaa! π
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That new beginning… I wonder if anybody can overcome those desires.
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I love your poetry Sanaa. It is always so soothing and beautiful!!
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Love the turn-about in the last line, Sanaa! Great write!
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HE has his. I was thinking avacado before I got to the word. Good write. Sanaa. Thank you for hosting today.
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The answer is” yes,” and I did it myself. Find a new place, find a new you.
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Love this, Sanaa! A snapshot. Yes, I’m often tempted. Or not tempted, but wishful. I like eavesdropping on these two and learning how they both lean, on escape and avocados both. π
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