Since Flower, Nor Stone, Nor Depth of the Raging Sea

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Poem inspired by the title of Sonnet 65: Since brass, nor stone, nor earth, nor boundless sea.

I wrote your name on another horizon today;
watched as the clouds moved in greyscale
and illusion,
outwitted below the hills in shades of green.

I want you,
even when I am on the very edge of sleep–
when trees are stripped of their leaves by the storm,
there is an art
to walking on a trail you are uncertain of
and I hope

your skin remembers me, my lips, my voice and my touch–
the air is lambent with desire,
perhaps it too is aware and has managed to forsake
false doors,

what is poetry without love, without a little ache?
You call me to rise with the prayer of your body,
luminous and roseateβ€”unaware of emotion
behind my words.

Smudge me with ink stains, stick a needle in my eye,
sometimes we come close enough
to believe in; I have this feeling I will do it until the day,
the moment I die–

I wrote your name on another horizon today.

 

 

 

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Comments

  1. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    This is so strong with longing… of course the most arresting and painful is that needle through the eye.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. robtkistner says:

    Just exquisite Sanaa. Delicately sensuous, and marvelous imagery. Loved the full circle between first snd last line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rob πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. A romantic circular poem, Sanaa, and so full of longing, especially in the lines:
    β€˜I want you,
    even when I am on the very edge of sleep–
    when trees are stripped of their leaves by the storm’.
    I love the sensuality of the lines:
    β€˜β€¦I hope
    your skin remembers me, my lips, my voice and my touch–
    the air is lambent with desire’;
    and the excellent question: β€˜what is poetry without love, without a little ache?’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Yes, the refrain and emotion gave this piece wings. I liked “what is poetry without love, without a little ache” Another winner.

    1. Sanaa says:

      That is such high praise! Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ™‚ as ever for your kind and warm words. πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. Ron. says:

    I immediately shared this with My Beloved Sandra, who was clearly as favorably impressed as I.

    Nice work, Sanaa, esp the cyclic open/closer lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! Thank you so much, Ron πŸ˜€ so glad you both enjoyed the poem! πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. calmkate says:

    sensual longing so vibrantly expressed

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  7. msjadeli says:

    The central line for me in this is:
    “what is poetry without love, without a little ache?”
    Art is probably the closest we can come to making the intangible visible.
    Such a beautiful rendering of art, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. So beautiful and full of longing. Too many lovely phrases to pull out just one.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Merril πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. Mish says:

    So much to love about this….the voice, the longing, self reflection and the repeat of the first line is so effective, circling back again, like the emotions will repeat…..as we know they will do. Just beautiful, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! Thank you so much, Mish πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Vicki Stuart says:

    Such a gorgeous, touching poem. I love the end, “sometimes we come close enough
    to believe in; I have this feeling I will do it until the day,
    the moment I die–” that clear connection so palpable. Beautiful verse.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vicki πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. Grace says:

    Sensous and passionate with: the air is lambent with desire. The longing for the loved one is strong !

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Eugenia says:

    Beautifully romantic with stunning imagery.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  13. Kerfe says:

    A distillation of deep desire.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerfe πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. Pain and love stand side by side in your words. I really liked the opening line and how you returned to it at the end. Beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Alicia πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  15. Peter says:

    Like others, picked out ‘lambent with desire’ as lovely phrase – and the whole poem hinges around that – longing, hope, sensuality and optimism – and circles around with the repetition of the first hopeful line, with the last hopeful line. (Is the title a reworking of Shakespeare’s Sonnet 65 – “Since brass, nor stone nor earth nor boundless sea.” ? )

    1. Sanaa says:

      Now that you mention it, the title is somehow loosely inspired by the sonnet yes. I must have been thinking of it subconsciously πŸ™‚ thank you for pointing it out, so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  16. Old Egg says:

    You really know how to express emotive feelings Sanaa. When I read your work I am there I am there as a witness almost embarassed as that I have stumbled on the scene!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  17. Ingrid says:

    This is heart-achingly beautiful, Sanaa ‘what is poetry without love, without a little ache?’ – you’re absolutely right. And this is true poetry!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ingrid πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  18. Vandana says:

    Love makes us to yearn so much, seeing our lover and hisV name everywhere.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vandana πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  19. ayala says:

    The longing is palpable. Beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  20. I could feel the loss in your poem as you spoke…
    Write him on another horizon… and cover him with grayscale clouds. What a great idea!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  21. Jim Feeney says:

    LOvely poem, Sanaa
    In particular “watched as the clouds moved in greyscale” and “luminous and roseate”…very accomplished writing..JIM

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  22. I love this poem, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  23. Ken Gierke says:

    There is a desire in this so deep that it resonates.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ken πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

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