November Dawn: Of ripeness, and colour and time of propinquity

Spread the love

Morning thickens around us, like verses, full of meaning
as clouds
consumed with thought are kissed a brilliant white,
and I, in deepening admiration surrender
to conversation
rapt in the poesy of your philosophical being,
perhaps I belong to you
to what seems lost but is a gentle remnant unfound–
I listen to your words,
to change in breathing pattern, your chest rising
and falling
until my ribs are filled with your beauty, your curves,
your scent, your skin —
I have instructed the heart to become accustomed
to lesser than rosy-eyed slumber.
Perhaps this is a failing of mine,
these silent reveries that seep from a corner in my mind,
as if ripe berries
weeping complaisance when plucked by hand–
let the breeze amble by
touching us and drifting over soft air
so quiet,
you just might be every kind of worthwhile
I have ever known.

 

Photo credits: Immerse by Karina llergo

Posted on Bits of Inspiration ~ My story @ Real Toads

& Posted on the Open Link Night @ dVerse Poets Pub

& Posted on Monday Writes @ My Blog – Verses

verses

Comments

  1. Jim says:

    I feel the closeness of one yearning to know me, one you’ve not physically met, better. And hoping that your feeling will become mutual for consummation. Beautiful write from a beautiful inspiration piece of art.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  2. Jae Rose says:

    Such a passionate poem – i loved every word

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  3. Callie says:

    “you just might be every kind of worthwhile
    I have ever known”

    That is gorgeous!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Callie 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  4. Debi Swim says:

    “rapt in the poesy of your philosophical being”… your way with words is amazing. You speak so elegantly of love – I must be somewhat repressed -love poems do not come easily for me.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️

  5. “I listen to your words,
    to change in breathing pattern, your chest rising
    and falling
    until my ribs are filled with your beauty, your curves,
    your scent, your skin —”

    Goodness that is so beautiful, as is the entire poem. Thank you so much for taking part in the prompt.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  6. I LOVE your two closing lines. Very cool.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. Old Egg says:

    There is always that beautiful yearning and nostalgia in your romantic poetry Sanaa; so it is a treat to visit you.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  8. You have a gentle way of weaving passion into words. I couldn’t write close to this which is why I like to visit your words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Stranded Tree 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  9. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I love the closeness of seeing someone breathing like that… wonderful

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. Vivian Zems says:

    I have instructed the heart to become accustomed
    to lesser than rosy-eyed slumber……… beautiful ❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  11. Grace says:

    This a beautiful share specially this part:

    as if ripe berries
    weeping complaisance when plucked by hand–

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  12. Another romantic triumph for you, rife with clever wordsmithing. I liked the first line /Morning thickens around jus, like verses, full of meaning/. Your smoothness and gentle passion always amaze me.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  13. Xenia Tran says:

    This is so beautifully penned Sanaa and I especially love ‘you just might be every kind of worthwhile I have ever known’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Xenia 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  14. Laura Granby says:

    Just gorgeous! ” I, in deepening admiration surrender
    to conversation
    rapt in the poesy of your philosophical being,
    perhaps I belong to you”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Laura 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  15. Morning thickens around us, like verses, full of meaning…
    What a great opening line! Very well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. Jade Li says:

    Sanaa, I really love the many different ways you’ve used air/breathe here, almost as a metaphor for life/love. Your poetry is a fresh breath of air to me <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwwww gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Jade 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! ❤️

  17. Barry says:

    You do the image justice. Such vivid images.

    “you just might be every kind of worthwhile
    I have ever known.”

    I won’t lie; I wish I had come up with that. Brilliant.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. Your poem shimmers, Sanaa, from the title to the final line, and is so full of romance and textures. I especially enjoyed the richness of the lines:
    ‘I listen to your words,
    to change in breathing pattern, your chest rising
    and falling
    until my ribs are filled with your beauty, your curves,
    your scent, your skin’
    and
    ‘these silent reveries that seep from a corner in my mind,
    as if ripe berries
    weeping complaisance when plucked by hand–
    let the breeze amble by’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️

  19. JIm Feeney says:

    Beautiful poem Sanaa…those last two lines would be great in the chorus of a country song and I mean that in the best possible way…JIM

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  20. Pratibha says:

    This is such a special dedication! Beautful 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Pratibha 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. Sara McNulty says:

    Passionate, loving poem. I adore, ‘you just might be every kind of worthwhile I have ever known’.
    Wonderful work, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *