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My love for you is a rose almond. Luscious and creamier than milk, itself.
Sliding into sleep, I search for you. Am I deluded? Do you feel the same?

A luscious rose almond. I search for love that is creamier than milk, itself.
Sleep, itself is deluded. Do you feel I am sliding? The same? And into you?

Do you feel sleep is a search for you, itself? And love a rose almond?
Am I sliding into the same? Luscious and creamier than milk, do you
feel deluded?

Sliding as a rose almond into luscious milk, am I creamier than love, itself?
I am deluded. And I search for you. My love, do you feel the same? Sleep.

My love is sliding into sleep. I search for rose almonds and creamier milk.
I am the same. Love, itself is deluded. Luscious than you? You feel?

Deluded, I am sliding into rose almond sleep. And you feel the same.
You search for love, luscious and creamier than milk, itself. My love.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Kim invites us to write inspired byΒ  Wendy Cope’s poem “The Uncertainty of the Poet.”

Posted for Weekend Mini-Challenge: The Uncertainty of the Poet @ Real Toads

Posted on Pantry of Poetry and Prose @
Poets United

Comments

  1. Marian says:

    Awwwww. What a treat to be asking these kinds of questions! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it 🌰❀️

  2. I was so glad to see Marian’s “Awwwww” because I, too, did a ridiculous amount of cooing while reading this one. This is lovely, Sanaa, especially the ending. Also, all those questions–their tone, their hint of happy madness–sings of love that is fresh and deep.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you 🌰❀️

  3. Wonderfully luscious lines, rose almond, creamier than milk…..wow.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it 🌰❀️

  4. Toni Spencer says:

    Such a sweet poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni πŸ™‚ so good to see you 🌰❀️

  5. I describe your writing as “gentle sensuality” and have shared your poems as the way to write love poems the right way (because I can’t do it well.) Thank you again for another “sighing” moment.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! 🌰❀️ Thank you so much, Joel πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it! 🌰❀️

  6. This really showcases your talent, Sanaa. You did an impressive job with this circular style, and so many words repeating.

    1. Sanaa says:

      You are so very kind! 🌰❀️ Thank you so much, Jenna πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it! 🌰❀️

  7. oldegg says:

    This is so beautifully written Sanaa and such a delight to read.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ˜€ so good to see you 🌰❀️

  8. How wonderfully you mastered this prompt! Such a gorgeous poem, moving from lovers’ eternal questions into assurance … with your trademark beautifully original, sensual language.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! 🌰❀️ Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it! 🌰❀️

  9. Helen L Dehner says:

    Luscious is what your poem is …..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it 🌰❀️

  10. Kerry says:

    You went the extra mile with this prompt, Sanaa. I admire your success with so many words and phrases to repeat to describe such a fresh and creamy passion!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! 🌰❀️ Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it. You inspired me to attempt the form! 🌰❀️

  11. I enjoyed the complexity and romantic beauty of your love poem, Sanaa, and the way you have played with so many permutations, almost like a prayer, a fantastic feat! I can smell the scent and taste the sweetness of rose almond throughout. I especially love ’I search for love that is creamier than milk, itself’ and β€˜Sliding as a rose almond into luscious milk, am I creamier than love, itself?’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awwww gosh! 🌰❀️ Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it. I wouldn’t have missed your last prompt at Toads for the world! 🌰❀️

  12. Jim says:

    Hey Sanaa, you took a hard route with so many words. I’m especially amazed how you fit the right sounding words in, both in the start and in your progression. My best like is, “Am I deluded? Do you feel the same?”
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it 🌰❀️

  13. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I really love the progression of this… just like when you fall in love with all the questions to the fulfillment and trust in the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it 🌰❀️

  14. Barry says:

    Everything about this is amazing. Moving from uncertainty to assurance within a framework that should be unwieldy, yet in your hands, is mastered as an extension of yourself.

    I get lost in your words, and that’s just fine with me. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it 🌰❀️

  15. Jae Rose says:

    Sweet and intoxicating imagery

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae πŸ˜€ so good to see you 🌰❀️

  16. Thotpurge says:

    Great choice of words and phrases for the prompt!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it 🌰❀️

  17. Vivian Zems says:

    Sigh! Such searching questions. Beautifully done πŸ‘πŸ½

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it 🌰❀️

  18. Mmm…sensual! Your piece oozes delicious things; sweet nothings and knowing questions. Beautiful write Sanaa, as always.

    p.s. Each time I read one of your poems, I keep checking if there’s an announcement for a volume of your verses. No pressure. πŸ˜€ But it’s one of the poetry books, I’m looking forward to hold in my hands and read one day. <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you 🌰❀️

      ( I believe there is a little time before the volume of verses comes out. I really appreciate your fervour and support)

  19. gillena says:

    Luv the questions, the circular motion of your words id like a stirring of milk so gently so sensuous.

    Thank you for dropping by my sumie Sunday today Sanaa

    MuchπŸ‘ΌπŸ½love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it 🌰❀️

      Much🌹🌷🌻love

  20. Creamy and dreamy. I love all that sensuous sliding.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it 🌰❀️

  21. I have to say that delusion often comes too easily into a love relationship.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, MMT πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you 🌰❀️

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