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In the rich, warm and velvet abundant
night, I sought to reach out and touch
droplets of rain which hung from your
lashes. Believe fervor is thorn as virtue
is roses red dripping upon the floor as
your voice burns into a restless mind.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted for ‘Quadrille #57′ @ dVerse Pub

and on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

Comments

  1. Beautifully done! The metaphorical play was a joy to read… and see.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Charley πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  2. Jilly says:

    Abundant night! Great descriptor. Love this poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jilly πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  3. Romantic rain! Beautiful, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  4. Frank says:

    Nice idea of the burning voice in a restless mind.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  5. Vivian Zems says:

    This is very rich…from the words to the image. I love this ‘…droplets of rain which hung from your
    lashes…”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  6. Jo says:

    ‘velvet abundant night” – great phrase!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jo πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  7. Grace says:

    I thought the ending: your voice burns into a restless mind- begs for a passionate response ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  8. Walter Marks says:

    Wonderful picture of raindrops hanging from lashes

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Walter πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  9. Mary Hood says:

    Rich, warm, velvet abundant night….I felt wrapped in it as I read this. Beautiful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  10. Dwight says:

    Great Poem… Rain comes in many forms!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Dwight ❀️

  11. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    The rain from the lashes looks so much like tears.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn ❀️

  12. Thotpurge says:

    velvet abundant night is a vivid image!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  13. gillena says:

    WOW!!! clever write and the team up image; a perfect package.

    ***
    Sanaa; thanks for your continued support, linking to Monday WRites

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

      Much🌹love

  14. lynn says:

    Love the emotion of your quadrille, conveyed in gorgeous imagery!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lynn πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  15. De Jackson says:

    This line is so rich in both language and imagery:
    Believe fervor is thorn as virtue
    is roses red dripping upon the floor

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  16. Robert says:

    lovely romantic write…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robert πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  17. This is packed with beautiful imagery Sanaa! Simply amazing!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  18. kanzensakura says:

    The restless mind, the tears hung from lashes… beautifully rich images.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  19. Sameera Chaudhary says:

    ‘Believe fervor is thorn as virtue is roses red’.. oh my this is gorgeous! πŸ’™

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sameera πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  20. Chris Evans says:

    This is rich in tone and lush in its original imagery, Sanaa! The image of virtue dripping as red roses is particularly striking πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chris πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  21. D.Avery says:

    Roses red dripping; the syntax throughout conveys the tone.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, D.Avery πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  22. Daniella Moyles says:

    This is so unbelievably romantic, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      β€οΈπŸ’›πŸ’œ

  23. Cara O' Donoghue says:

    Love the image of virtue dripping as red roses! πŸ˜€

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Cara πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  24. Mish says:

    Love the visual of rain dangling from eyelashes. Beautiful, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mish πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  25. Colin Lee says:

    Sumptuous portrayal of an intense longing. Such poetic calibre.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colin πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  26. Jim says:

    Virtue to savor but be slow with the ferver. A wise choice though hard to be in a hot romance.
    I didn’t fall and wasn’t in an accident, I just have brittle bones. Thanks, Sanaa, for your cheerful words.
    ..

    .

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  27. Sara McNulty says:

    The art posted here matches the fervor of your words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

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