Fidus achates

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99. Compassion

Brimming – his eyes welled with innocence and fire
had pierced through heart as ripples of sterling sea.
‘Fidus achates’ he whispered soft into the throbbing
ear. “Though distance be a trifle queer; love not less
though less it might appear.”

In the hush that followed I breathed a silent prayer;
‘that we would never change although we live apart.’
His warm and kind demeanor thawed sadness from
the heart; Lo! restored thus sunken spirit with most
beguiling art.

As such the angels witnessed and cite;
Dawn bent down low to kiss the night.

 

 

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Comments

  1. Nailed last lines, always, always. And great tone, throughout.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello De Jackson,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
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  2. Superb Sanaa. A character in the throes of a love poem are rather vulnerable, but written here with such passion. We’ve all felt these things!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Walter,

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  3. therisa says:

    Sigh. Sanaa, but this how I feel, upon rereading this several times, to be, so lucky, to have someone, like this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Therisa,

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  4. Perhaps a lover, yes, perhaps a divorced father, or dear older sibling; lots of subtle room for various scenarios & identities to rise up from what was not said/written; kicked butt on the prompt for sure.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Glenn,

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  5. Really liked how this was conversational, between two lovers. Very nice.

    1. Sanaa says:

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  6. Grace says:

    Love the cadence and that ending couplet is sweet Sanaa ~ Thanks for joining us ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Grace,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  7. Bjorn says:

    I see both closeness and separations, there is a want for more closeness maybe? Love the closing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

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  8. A superb rhyming couplet, Sanaa! And I love these lines:
    In the hush that followed I breathed a silent prayer;
    β€˜that we would never change although we live apart.’ They touched a chord.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kim,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  9. Lovely way of showing how true friendship transcends all things. And as it happens so often, I completely love your closing line. Such powerful image. ❀

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Magaly,

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  10. Ah Dear..
    i Love poeTry
    that SinGs a Song
    from beginning to
    end.. alWays a joy
    here to come
    and join
    in..
    a gift you
    have obviously
    perhaps an Angel
    in disguise as
    poeTry
    does
    in hUman
    touch unrivaled
    by words
    of
    science..:)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Katie,

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  11. debi says:

    β€œThough distance be a trifle queer; love not less
    though less it might appear.”
    If a dear friend whispered that to me I’d have a heck of a time leaving. You are master of this form.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Debi,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  12. Kerry O'Connor says:

    This is very bitter sweet, Sanaa. The final couplet is perfection.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kerry,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  13. Thotpurge says:

    Love the image of the last line…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Thotpurge,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  14. Jae Rose says:

    Those parting lies truly shine – how painful love can be..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
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  15. Mary says:

    Beautiful lines, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  16. Vagrant Rhodia says:

    Your words echo across my heart, past the yellow construction tape. A soft cool breeze.

    Thank you for gracing my prompt with your own music.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
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  17. Truedessa says:

    Lovely poem – It seems this is your signature style. well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Truedessa,

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  18. gillena says:

    A lovely compelling piece, the whispered words so sparked my interest, i had to go read up a bit on Achates in the Aeneid

    Im happy you dropped in at my Sunday Lime today Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  19. Steve King says:

    For me, your words and voice bring a sense of understatement to the tension and emotion that are contained in them…it makes the reality of the situation all the more powerful. Nicely done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Steve,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  20. Sumana Roy says:

    soft, subtle, sweet and beautiful….specially the couplet…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sumana,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  21. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    Living apart is hard on lovers…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello MMT,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  22. dsnake1 says:

    very elegant poem. and an awesome couplet to end it! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Dsnake,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  23. Sherry Marr says:

    “Love not less, though less it would appear.” I cant get over how well you write like the classical poets of old. It is a gift.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  24. Wendy Bourke says:

    Wonderful juxtapositions in this piece. A cascade of emotions, beautifully rendered.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Wendy,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  25. Uma Venkatraman says:

    Beautiful.. like a tune rising to a crescendo… the last couplet is exquisite

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Uma,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  26. Elizabeth says:

    Really like your closing lines,

    Elizabeth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Elizabeth,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
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  27. Faithful friendship is indeed a great treasure.

    PS: I am always struck by what wonderful pictures you find to illustrate your poems so perfectly, in both subject and mood.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
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  28. Myrna says:

    This is tender, sad and provokes a strong feeling (in me) of hoping love does survive the distance. Lovely writing Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Myrna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  29. ZQ says:

    Intriguing… never a disappointment reading on your site.
    ZQ

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello ZQ,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  30. Bekkie says:

    Love that last line “Dawn bent down low to kiss the night.” Lovely piece!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bekkie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

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