The time of autumn not long ago;
Boarded a train and saw sunset glow.
Round every branch the songbirds flew;
Those pensive features so well I knew.
I remember the train entered a tunnel;
Like a diamond pin to burst your bubble.
The words he spoke were oh so subtle.
Passing cities and country sides;
I once caught a train that changed my life.
Although he was – a mere stranger
Emotions brought of different nature.
Distinctive sounds of the train;
Felt the drops of morning rain.
The heart pierced with fierce delight;
I once caught a train that changed my life.
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Form: Rondeau
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There is a definitely a romanticism with trains – and if you met him on a train, surely it changed your life. And when the light dips low in the tunnel – well that opens the door to intimacy.
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What a romantic poem! The rhythm and rhyme of this is most enjoyable as well. We can all take train rides but it is rare we take one that changes our life. I liked the visuals in this and the story.
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Light and ephemeral, like the things pass by but reach out and touch us.
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A very romantic train ride but I have heard of relationships starting with train rides ~ That is definitely life changing as well ~
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Very pensive write, Sanaa.
When we look back, there are so many little things that have changed our lives!
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A good story
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Aww, great ending:
“The heart pierced with fierce delight;
I once caught a train that changed my life.”
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A powerful romantic vision, mixing the magic of classic train rides with a Kismet experience, synchronicity & such.
Light rails & commuter trains today cannot compete with the two-level super express flyers of yesterday.
I wonder if Love would have blossomed at 240 mph on a bullet train?
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I enjoyed this one. Indeed there are trains that change a person’s life. I have been on one or two of those! How about you? Have you?
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Such a wistfulness to this poem….”I once caught a train that changed my life” accomplishes that beautifully!!
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that made me smile… trains indeed are so romantic – and the most wonderful things can happen so quickly…smiles
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Ah, the rondeau suits the romantic mood you set in this poem so well! Autumn colours, train sounds in the background – and suddenly stillness, that look of complicity…. brought a perfectly formed image to my mind.
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The male train.. no male..
just train.. one destination
straight ahead.. no goal
but to get there..
a whistle.. a device..
to sound an
alarm of
male..:)
trains..:)
coming..:)
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Thats so nice…
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I love the refrain, “I once caught a train that changed my life.” Meeting people on a train can be serendipitous. The transitory nature of being in limbo while traveling through time and space has a certain mystique to it that comes across very well in your poem.
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Oh, I like this so much Sanaa. You’re a true romantic and your poem touches my romantic side. Lovely!
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Beautiful Rondeau Sanaa! It could have developed into a great relationship perhaps!
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Train rides always full of anticipation and mystery. I like the way that you used the Rondeau to keep the verse moving (like a train)
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“I remember the train entered a tunnel;
Like a diamond pin to burst your bubble.”
“a diamond pin” surely a right one metaphor
all the scenery rushing in through the swiftly moving train, happy your trip ends on a happy note
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The train is an effective metaphor for progression in life, and how nice to meet a person who will change one’s life for the better.
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Journeys sometimes do change one’s life… that’s perhaps why we crave them so much.
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I love “I once caught a train that changed my life.” I think I missed that train, LOL.
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aah…love that romantic touch Sanaa 🙂
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Really great use of imagery. As so many have said above, trains really do feel romantic and mysterious.
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“I once caught a train that changed my life.”
sigh – so romantic
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Love the rondeau! Think I might need to catch me a train.
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Just lovely, form follows the rhythm of a train.
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