Gravitational Force

62 Responses

1. Susan says:

   October 21, 2015 at 5:55 pm

   That is faith–to be caught in the downfalls of existence and stick to what we know. I return to God over and over. Not so sure I could hold so tight in the human realm. It reads like a kind of masochism. But “Pull–Rivulets–Break” makes me think of waterfalls pooling on impact below, and the shape of your poem highlights that impression of depth and ultimate refreshment. SO I have second thoughts. Rather brilliant–risky and scary and amazing.

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 21, 2015 at 6:10 pm

     Hello Susan,

     Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
     Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
     xoxo

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2. Thotpurge says:

   October 21, 2015 at 5:55 pm

   Shape poetry seems interesting… Would be quite a challenge!

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 21, 2015 at 6:11 pm

     Hello Thotpurge,

     Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
     Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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3. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

   October 21, 2015 at 6:02 pm

   Down, down, down … love the shape of your gravity poem.

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 21, 2015 at 6:12 pm

     Hello Rosemary,

     Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
     Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
     xoxo

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4. Sherry Blue Sky says:

   October 21, 2015 at 8:35 pm

   The shape of this poem, along with the cascading words, really works with the theme of gravity. Well done, Sanaa.

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 21, 2015 at 8:52 pm

     Hello Sherry,

     Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
     Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
     xoxo

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5. kaykuala h says:

   October 21, 2015 at 9:21 pm

   Beautifully done with all the designated rhymings – perfect! Great play of poetic lingo, Sanaa!

   Hank

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 21, 2015 at 9:46 pm

     Hello Hank,

     Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
     Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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6. Rob says:

   October 22, 2015 at 1:23 am

   I agree, an interesting way to graphically show gravity in the poem. It works. I usually don’t have the guts to try these types of things.

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 22, 2015 at 1:36 am

     Hello Rob,

     Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
     Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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7. kanzensakura says:

   October 22, 2015 at 2:24 am

   The shape of this poem coupled with the flowing words – marvelous!

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 22, 2015 at 3:59 am

     Hello Toni,

     Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
     Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
     xoxo

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8. Audrey Howitt says:

   October 22, 2015 at 2:51 am

   Ah the shape here works so well with the piece–just really well done!

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 22, 2015 at 4:00 am

     Hello Audrey,

     Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
     Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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9. vanessa anthony says:

   October 22, 2015 at 3:14 am

   Wow! I love how you incorporated the theme in the acting of your word. Truly amazing creativity

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   • Sanaa says:

     October 22, 2015 at 4:01 am

     Hello Vanessa,

     Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
     Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
     xoxo

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10. Old Egg says:

    October 22, 2015 at 3:57 am

    Making mistakes is common but making amends and helping others is praiseworthy. We should all aspire to be phoenixes and rise from the ashes of our faults. Great presentation.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 22, 2015 at 4:02 am

      Hello Old Egg,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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11. Myrna says:

    October 22, 2015 at 5:56 am

    Nice the way you composed this, the gravitational love pull, the shape downward. I like this so much, Also love the picture.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 22, 2015 at 6:16 am

      Hello Myrna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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12. blogoratti says:

    October 22, 2015 at 5:58 am

    Really wonderful piece and that image is apt.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 22, 2015 at 6:16 am

      Hello Blogoratti,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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13. Truedessa says:

    October 22, 2015 at 6:04 am

    I found the shape of the poem intriguing as your words gently fell on the page – beautiful..

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 22, 2015 at 6:17 am

      Hello Truedessa,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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14. Claire says:

    October 22, 2015 at 3:58 pm

    Oh your form is just perfect here ~ great lines!

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 22, 2015 at 6:31 pm

      Hello Claire,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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15. Jae Rose says:

    October 22, 2015 at 5:26 pm

    I love the shape of this – pulling down in words and thoughts..which hopefully will be uplifted..

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 22, 2015 at 6:32 pm

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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16. Hannah Gosselin says:

    October 22, 2015 at 10:44 pm

    I love the way the words cascade down in a waterfall staircase fashion. Passion flows from this piece. 🙂

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 23, 2015 at 12:35 am

      Hello Hannah,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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17. annell4 says:

    October 22, 2015 at 11:16 pm

    Nicely done….since love poetry is so common, I like the way you changed the ‘look’ of it! Maybe is special!

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 23, 2015 at 12:53 am

      Hello Annell,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

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18. G L Meisner says:

    October 23, 2015 at 12:15 am

    Bound to another by attraction is a beautiful image.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 23, 2015 at 12:54 am

      Hello Mr Meisner,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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19. Rall says:

    October 23, 2015 at 1:51 pm

    Shape poem was a good choice for the prompt. Well done !

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 23, 2015 at 3:33 pm

      Hello Rall,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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20. Mary says:

    October 24, 2015 at 4:41 pm

    Sanaa, I don’t know how I missed this one when I went through the gravity poems. Glad I checked back. Really a creative presentation…I like how your mind works!

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 24, 2015 at 9:25 pm

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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21. jammy7000; Nicholas V. says:

    October 28, 2015 at 9:05 am

    A great optical device for your gravity poem, Sanaa. I enjoyed reading it.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 28, 2015 at 4:09 pm

      Hello Nicholas,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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22. Mary says:

    October 30, 2015 at 12:31 am

    Ah, not only does this poem DESCRIBE gravity (and well), it illustrates it too. You definitely were inspired.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 30, 2015 at 12:48 am

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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23. Bjorn says:

    October 30, 2015 at 2:32 am

    Oh I love how you have used that gravitational pull so creatively.. 🙂

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 30, 2015 at 2:45 am

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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24. Grace says:

    October 30, 2015 at 2:40 am

    I love the shape, and pull of this force ~ Very interesting format on the page Sanaa ~

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 30, 2015 at 2:46 am

      Hello Grace,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

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25. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    October 30, 2015 at 3:32 am

    I agree, the form you chose goes very well with the topic of your poem, Sanaa. I’ve come across several very sensual poems during this OLN. Must be something in the air. :~)

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 30, 2015 at 3:41 am

      Hello Gayle,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

      PS: Yes perhaps 😉

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26. Ayala says:

    October 30, 2015 at 6:35 am

    Nicely done !

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 30, 2015 at 11:15 am

      Hello Ayala,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

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27. katiemiafrederick says:

    October 30, 2015 at 7:41 am

    When Love is real it flies it sings..
    When flies it sings as Love is real..
    Real it sings when love it flies..
    flies alone flies
    together
    never
    alone..
    allWays
    ALLone..
    Real Love SinGs..:)
    Flies…

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 30, 2015 at 11:16 am

      Hello Katie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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28. Marina Sofia says:

    October 31, 2015 at 5:49 pm

    I like the gravitational pull of both meaning and shape of your poem. Very clever use of the space – and well done for being able to do it online! I always have trouble with poems looking the way I meant them to when posting in electronic format.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 31, 2015 at 9:30 pm

      Hello Marina,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

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29. Other Mary says:

    October 31, 2015 at 8:19 pm

    Like everyone else, I find the form of your poem visually striking. It is also interesting that your words “pull” and “break” in this form make the reader (or me at least) think of ‘pull down’ and ‘break down.’ Lots to think about in this.

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    • Sanaa says:

      October 31, 2015 at 9:31 pm

      Hello Mary,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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30. Lupita Eyde-Tucker says:

    November 1, 2015 at 3:56 am

    The downward pull of your words combines with the visual very nicely, Sanaa.

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    • Sanaa says:

      November 1, 2015 at 3:58 am

      Hello Lupita,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

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31. gillena says:

    November 17, 2015 at 1:09 am

    Enjoyed this shape poem Sanaa. Thank you for linking up at Monday WRites

    Much love…

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    • Sanaa says:

      November 17, 2015 at 1:36 am

      Hello Gillena,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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