Vampire

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Her spirit boreal, as though blue ice;
Echo: Dice
The piteous men who paid the price.
Echo: Vice

She haunted with allure and charm;
Echo: Arm
Aghast they stood in strange alarm.
Echo: Harm

Encompassed in hues of velvet black;
Echo: Clack
Who shall now lead – afar from track
Echo: Shack

Oh penetrating, cold predator’s eyes;
Echo: Cries
Upon life that fades, flickers and dies.
Echo: Rise

She stole a kiss – blood stained lips
Echo: Grips
Beneath a penumbral lunar eclipse.
Echo: Snips

Atlast the dead awake – arise
Echo: Prize
Terror wears a thin disguise.
Echo: Guise

 

Photo Credits:Β fullhdpictures.com

Form: Echo Verse

Posted for Poetics @ dVerse Poets Pub

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Posted on Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

also posted on Music Prompt 65 @ MLMM

70 thoughts on “Vampire

  1. kanzensakura says:

    Excellent use of the echo device! Most effective in this chilling poem. Good job!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Toni,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  2. Mary says:

    Oh, echo verse worked so very effectively to convey a frightening mood. And, yes, terror does wear a thin disguise. It is closer to us than we know! Boo!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, Lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

      PS: Boo πŸ˜›

  3. Grace says:

    I specially like the ending verses:

    At last the dead awake – arise
    Echo: Prize
    Terror wears a thin disguise.
    Echo: Guise

    Love the echo form and picture Sanaa ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Grace,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  4. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    This is really good, Sanaa. I’ve not heard of the echo verse so will have to look into that. I found it very effective in adding to the tone of your Vampire poem. Frighteningly good!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gayle,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  5. The painting is extra chilling of itself; been awhile since I used echo verse; I agree it is extra effective in this piece. Something about how the echo changes the word that really is a statement on communicative exchanges.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Glenn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  6. Candy says:

    Wow! Fantastically macabre – and the form works so well

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Candy,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  7. BjΓΆrn says:

    The echo was so effective in creating terror.. The short echoes turn it manacing and dark, the terror laces with lust is so very effective

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  8. Myths mirror culture realities now
    still.. and interestingly still now.. now..
    enough.. the rising fascination with
    vampires in heart of art
    mirrors science studies
    almost perfect in
    practice.. of declining
    yes empirically declining
    measurable empathy
    among college age
    young adults.. around
    30 percent in the last
    several decades.. a cold
    heart is the myth for
    vampires.. zombies..
    and werewolves..
    who deal
    in fear..
    pain.. and
    hate.. instead
    of all creativity
    associated with
    human LOVE..
    so in other
    words.. ‘Leave
    it to Beaver’
    dies a cold
    death Alive..;)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Katie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  9. Victoria says:

    What a great use of the form. It works so well to lend that spooky effect to your very well-written poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  10. The echo form enhanced the already chilling mood of your poem. Great job!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mishunderstood,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  11. Old Egg says:

    This is really quite creepily different. You continue to amaze me Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Old Egg,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  12. Thotpurge says:

    Would be nice to hear it read aloud by two people! Like the idea of terror in a thin disguise….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Thotpurge,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  13. Jae Rose says:

    A cleverly written poem which reads so fluidly – I love how you are experimenting with styles and subjects…it works every time!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  14. gillena says:

    Another great echo piece from you Sanaa, this one is spine chilling, in keeping with the upcoming Hallowween

    have a nice Sunday

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  15. Mary says:

    I really love the ‘echo poetry form,’ and really this is the perfect poem for the Halloween season here. Vampires scare me, real or not! Smiles.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  16. humbird says:

    Wow! It’s spooky haunting words and photo…though in the spirit of Halloween…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Humbird,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  17. Kerry O'Connor says:

    Wow! This is a powerful portrait. I love the echo effect. I also like the new look of your blog. It is very dramatic.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kerry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  18. Excellently done. You are a wizard at forms. Your word choices here really bear out the feeling of the poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  19. What an intriguing form. So well done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello De Jackson,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sir,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  20. Absolutely loved the use of Echo here…perfect, and I too would love to hear this read out loud.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Donna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  21. Wendy Bourke says:

    An eerie, haunting piece – beautifully rendered … the echo device being invoked to great advantage, here.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Wendy,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  22. kaykuala h says:

    It does look cool, Sanaa! A slow and steady form Reminds me of the song ‘ killing me softly…’

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hank,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  23. Susan says:

    I enjoyed the echoes which finally provided commentary on her victory. Great illustration.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  24. dsnake1 says:

    Good use of the form. I think it’s highly effective for this theme πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Dsnake,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  25. Annell says:

    I like your echo poem…echo says it all!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Annell,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  26. Elizabeth says:

    The echo is strong here, without distortion. I’ve never been into vampires and your poem definitely tells me why,

    Elizabeth

    https://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2015/10/25/at-end-of-the-day/

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Elizabeth,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  27. Priya Lund says:

    Wonderful Sanaa! I felt goosebumps while reading it! I loved this poetic form πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Priya,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  28. G L Meisner says:

    Great poem for the season.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mr Meisner,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  29. Sara McNulty says:

    Brilliantly evil. Love the echoes.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sara,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  30. Michael says:

    Loved your take Sanaa, repetition always works for me…..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Michael πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  31. I really like the haunting use of the echo, Sanaa, it gives the whole poem a feeling of intensity. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

  32. ladyleemanila says:

    scary!!! but a lovely echo πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, Ladylee πŸ™‚ good to see you.

  33. Yves says:

    Wow I love the echo! I have never seen this done before, very cool. You have created such a strong atmosphere with your poem, wonderful dark vibe.

    mindlovemisery

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Yves ❀️ so glad you liked it πŸ˜€

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