62 thoughts on “Gravitational Force

  1. Susan says:

    That is faith–to be caught in the downfalls of existence and stick to what we know. I return to God over and over. Not so sure I could hold so tight in the human realm. It reads like a kind of masochism. But “Pull–Rivulets–Break” makes me think of waterfalls pooling on impact below, and the shape of your poem highlights that impression of depth and ultimate refreshment. SO I have second thoughts. Rather brilliant–risky and scary and amazing.

  2. Rob says:

    I agree, an interesting way to graphically show gravity in the poem. It works. I usually don’t have the guts to try these types of things.

  3. Old Egg says:

    Making mistakes is common but making amends and helping others is praiseworthy. We should all aspire to be phoenixes and rise from the ashes of our faults. Great presentation.

  4. Mary says:

    Sanaa, I don’t know how I missed this one when I went through the gravity poems. Glad I checked back. Really a creative presentation…I like how your mind works!

  5. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    I agree, the form you chose goes very well with the topic of your poem, Sanaa. I’ve come across several very sensual poems during this OLN. Must be something in the air. :~)

    • Sanaa says:

      Hello Gayle,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

      PS: Yes perhaps 😉

  6. katiemiafrederick says:

    When Love is real it flies it sings..
    When flies it sings as Love is real..
    Real it sings when love it flies..
    flies alone flies
    together
    never
    alone..
    allWays
    ALLone..
    Real Love SinGs..:)
    Flies…

  7. Marina Sofia says:

    I like the gravitational pull of both meaning and shape of your poem. Very clever use of the space – and well done for being able to do it online! I always have trouble with poems looking the way I meant them to when posting in electronic format.

  8. Other Mary says:

    Like everyone else, I find the form of your poem visually striking. It is also interesting that your words “pull” and “break” in this form make the reader (or me at least) think of ‘pull down’ and ‘break down.’ Lots to think about in this.

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