That is faith–to be caught in the downfalls of existence and stick to what we know. I return to God over and over. Not so sure I could hold so tight in the human realm. It reads like a kind of masochism. But “Pull–Rivulets–Break” makes me think of waterfalls pooling on impact below, and the shape of your poem highlights that impression of depth and ultimate refreshment. SO I have second thoughts. Rather brilliant–risky and scary and amazing.
Making mistakes is common but making amends and helping others is praiseworthy. We should all aspire to be phoenixes and rise from the ashes of our faults. Great presentation.
Sanaa, I don’t know how I missed this one when I went through the gravity poems. Glad I checked back. Really a creative presentation…I like how your mind works!
I agree, the form you chose goes very well with the topic of your poem, Sanaa. I’ve come across several very sensual poems during this OLN. Must be something in the air. :~)
When Love is real it flies it sings..
When flies it sings as Love is real..
Real it sings when love it flies..
flies alone flies
together
never
alone..
allWays
ALLone..
Real Love SinGs..:)
Flies…
I like the gravitational pull of both meaning and shape of your poem. Very clever use of the space – and well done for being able to do it online! I always have trouble with poems looking the way I meant them to when posting in electronic format.
Like everyone else, I find the form of your poem visually striking. It is also interesting that your words “pull” and “break” in this form make the reader (or me at least) think of ‘pull down’ and ‘break down.’ Lots to think about in this.
That is faith–to be caught in the downfalls of existence and stick to what we know. I return to God over and over. Not so sure I could hold so tight in the human realm. It reads like a kind of masochism. But “Pull–Rivulets–Break” makes me think of waterfalls pooling on impact below, and the shape of your poem highlights that impression of depth and ultimate refreshment. SO I have second thoughts. Rather brilliant–risky and scary and amazing.
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Shape poetry seems interesting… Would be quite a challenge!
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Down, down, down … love the shape of your gravity poem.
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The shape of this poem, along with the cascading words, really works with the theme of gravity. Well done, Sanaa.
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Beautifully done with all the designated rhymings – perfect! Great play of poetic lingo, Sanaa!
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I agree, an interesting way to graphically show gravity in the poem. It works. I usually don’t have the guts to try these types of things.
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The shape of this poem coupled with the flowing words – marvelous!
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Ah the shape here works so well with the piece–just really well done!
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Wow! I love how you incorporated the theme in the acting of your word. Truly amazing creativity
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Making mistakes is common but making amends and helping others is praiseworthy. We should all aspire to be phoenixes and rise from the ashes of our faults. Great presentation.
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Nice the way you composed this, the gravitational love pull, the shape downward. I like this so much, Also love the picture.
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Really wonderful piece and that image is apt.
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I found the shape of the poem intriguing as your words gently fell on the page – beautiful..
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Oh your form is just perfect here ~ great lines!
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I love the shape of this – pulling down in words and thoughts..which hopefully will be uplifted..
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I love the way the words cascade down in a waterfall staircase fashion. Passion flows from this piece. 🙂
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Nicely done….since love poetry is so common, I like the way you changed the ‘look’ of it! Maybe is special!
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Bound to another by attraction is a beautiful image.
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Shape poem was a good choice for the prompt. Well done !
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Sanaa, I don’t know how I missed this one when I went through the gravity poems. Glad I checked back. Really a creative presentation…I like how your mind works!
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A great optical device for your gravity poem, Sanaa. I enjoyed reading it.
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Ah, not only does this poem DESCRIBE gravity (and well), it illustrates it too. You definitely were inspired.
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Oh I love how you have used that gravitational pull so creatively.. 🙂
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I love the shape, and pull of this force ~ Very interesting format on the page Sanaa ~
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I agree, the form you chose goes very well with the topic of your poem, Sanaa. I’ve come across several very sensual poems during this OLN. Must be something in the air. :~)
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Nicely done !
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When Love is real it flies it sings..
When flies it sings as Love is real..
Real it sings when love it flies..
flies alone flies
together
never
alone..
allWays
ALLone..
Real Love SinGs..:)
Flies…
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I like the gravitational pull of both meaning and shape of your poem. Very clever use of the space – and well done for being able to do it online! I always have trouble with poems looking the way I meant them to when posting in electronic format.
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Like everyone else, I find the form of your poem visually striking. It is also interesting that your words “pull” and “break” in this form make the reader (or me at least) think of ‘pull down’ and ‘break down.’ Lots to think about in this.
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The downward pull of your words combines with the visual very nicely, Sanaa.
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Enjoyed this shape poem Sanaa. Thank you for linking up at Monday WRites
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