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  1. Susan says:

    That is faith–to be caught in the downfalls of existence and stick to what we know. I return to God over and over. Not so sure I could hold so tight in the human realm. It reads like a kind of masochism. But “Pull–Rivulets–Break” makes me think of waterfalls pooling on impact below, and the shape of your poem highlights that impression of depth and ultimate refreshment. SO I have second thoughts. Rather brilliant–risky and scary and amazing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  2. Thotpurge says:

    Shape poetry seems interesting… Would be quite a challenge!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Thotpurge,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  3. Down, down, down … love the shape of your gravity poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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  4. The shape of this poem, along with the cascading words, really works with the theme of gravity. Well done, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  5. kaykuala h says:

    Beautifully done with all the designated rhymings – perfect! Great play of poetic lingo, Sanaa!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hank,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
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  6. Rob says:

    I agree, an interesting way to graphically show gravity in the poem. It works. I usually don’t have the guts to try these types of things.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rob,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  7. kanzensakura says:

    The shape of this poem coupled with the flowing words – marvelous!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Toni,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  8. Ah the shape here works so well with the piece–just really well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Audrey,

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  9. Wow! I love how you incorporated the theme in the acting of your word. Truly amazing creativity

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Vanessa,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  10. Old Egg says:

    Making mistakes is common but making amends and helping others is praiseworthy. We should all aspire to be phoenixes and rise from the ashes of our faults. Great presentation.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Old Egg,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  11. Myrna says:

    Nice the way you composed this, the gravitational love pull, the shape downward. I like this so much, Also love the picture.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Myrna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  12. blogoratti says:

    Really wonderful piece and that image is apt.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Blogoratti,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  13. Truedessa says:

    I found the shape of the poem intriguing as your words gently fell on the page – beautiful..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Truedessa,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  14. Claire says:

    Oh your form is just perfect here ~ great lines!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Claire,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  15. Jae Rose says:

    I love the shape of this – pulling down in words and thoughts..which hopefully will be uplifted..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  16. I love the way the words cascade down in a waterfall staircase fashion. Passion flows from this piece. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hannah,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  17. annell4 says:

    Nicely done….since love poetry is so common, I like the way you changed the ‘look’ of it! Maybe is special!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Annell,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  18. G L Meisner says:

    Bound to another by attraction is a beautiful image.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mr Meisner,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  19. Rall says:

    Shape poem was a good choice for the prompt. Well done !

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rall,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  20. Mary says:

    Sanaa, I don’t know how I missed this one when I went through the gravity poems. Glad I checked back. Really a creative presentation…I like how your mind works!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  21. A great optical device for your gravity poem, Sanaa. I enjoyed reading it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Nicholas,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  22. Mary says:

    Ah, not only does this poem DESCRIBE gravity (and well), it illustrates it too. You definitely were inspired.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  23. Bjorn says:

    Oh I love how you have used that gravitational pull so creatively.. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  24. Grace says:

    I love the shape, and pull of this force ~ Very interesting format on the page Sanaa ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Grace,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  25. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    I agree, the form you chose goes very well with the topic of your poem, Sanaa. I’ve come across several very sensual poems during this OLN. Must be something in the air. :~)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gayle,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

      PS: Yes perhaps 😉

  26. Ayala says:

    Nicely done !

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Ayala,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  27. When Love is real it flies it sings..
    When flies it sings as Love is real..
    Real it sings when love it flies..
    flies alone flies
    together
    never
    alone..
    allWays
    ALLone..
    Real Love SinGs..:)
    Flies…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Katie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  28. Marina Sofia says:

    I like the gravitational pull of both meaning and shape of your poem. Very clever use of the space – and well done for being able to do it online! I always have trouble with poems looking the way I meant them to when posting in electronic format.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Marina,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  29. Other Mary says:

    Like everyone else, I find the form of your poem visually striking. It is also interesting that your words “pull” and “break” in this form make the reader (or me at least) think of ‘pull down’ and ‘break down.’ Lots to think about in this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  30. The downward pull of your words combines with the visual very nicely, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Lupita,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  31. gillena says:

    Enjoyed this shape poem Sanaa. Thank you for linking up at Monday WRites

    Much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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