With the silent melody of the wind

Let me through               the wall you have secured
                                           around your fragile heart

the bolted door               where you hide from the
                                           world outside

let me reach out              share your deepest woes,
                                            that pierce your soul

into cold abyss                as arms of angst hold you      
                                           without acquiescence

feel the warmth               of your lips, those haunting
                                            dark, half closed eyes

radiating from the          and your face, so obvious in
cantaloupe sun                its portrayal of feeling

let me offer you                the world, with its joy, its
                                             hidden trail to heaven

my entire self,                  because nothing else can
                                            satiate this ache and thirst

to love, to cherish            until the hour of end, until
                                             you laugh and say yes   

forevermore.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Form: Contrapuntal Poetry

Posted on ‘Meeting the Bar’ @ dVerse Pub

posted on ‘Poetry Pantry’ @ Poets United

& on Monday Writes @ My Blog – Verses

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62 thoughts on “With the silent melody of the wind

  1. Jilly says:

    cantaloupe sun ! This is wonderfully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jilly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  2. Frank says:

    Nice ending with saying yes forevermore.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  3. kaykuala says:

    Nicely and smoothly done! It flowed naturally Sanaa!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  4. Debi says:

    No one does love poems like you. This is soooo good.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️

  5. I love the contrast of solid wall and bolted door and the fragile heart; the repetition of ‘Let me’, which builds up and combines with the words ‘arms of angst’ to convey a tone of despair’ which is melted by the warmth of lips and the ‘cantaloupe sun’ – a beautiful image, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  6. Jane Dougherty says:

    I think you really nailed the intention of the contrapuntal idea, Sanaa. Well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Cantaloupe sun… love that.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  8. Paul Scribbles says:

    A wonderful interpretation. Two become one become three 😉

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  9. Amaya says:

    Saying “yes”, an act of bravery. It has a lot to do with discovering that “hidden trail to heaven.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 😉 thanks for stopping by, Amaya ❤️

  10. lillian says:

    Oh my…..as always, you have such an amazing way with the romantic! All three….luscious!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lillian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  11. Vivian Zems says:

    This is so endearing…….all 3 of them!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  12. A little Poe, in the ending,….”forevermore, forevermore.” Great job!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  13. Old Egg says:

    I loved the way you have writtentwo separate poems that both stand alone or can be read together. Brilliantlly done Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  14. Mary says:

    I really like the form of this poem…and its passion!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  15. gillena says:

    Your “forevermore” quest is spoken in exqusite terms
    Happy Sunday Sanaa. Thanks for dropping by my Sunday Standard today

    Much❤️love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so good to see you ❤️

      Happy Sunday 🙂
      Much🌹love

  16. Oh this is wonderful. Who could resist? I love thecanteloupe sun! It is impressive how the two sides of the poem stand alone and work so well together. I have been nervous to attempt this. It seems difficult but you aced it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  17. Love that cantaloupe sun and ’till you laugh and say yes.’ I’m thinking of Springsteen’s Secret Garden now.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  18. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Loved the second read… still very much love it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  19. Rall says:

    A very difficult prompt. You did a brilliant job . I hope the answer is a resounding ”yes’ Lovely romantic poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rall 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  20. This was fabulous….2 poems melded into one. You really worked magic here….brilliantly accomplished!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Donna 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  21. I can’t stop grinning at the image of the sun as a cantaloupe… warm and delicious.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  22. Myrna says:

    So nice how the love patiently seduces the beloved with such sweet, convincing words that strive to go on forever.
    Lovely writing Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Myrna 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  23. kanzensakura says:

    Wonderful! The one, two, three poems are beautiful. I love the cantaloupe sun. And at the end, saying yes. Oh my yes!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      😉

  24. Wendy Bourke says:

    You have created a fascinating form … which works beautifully with the contact of this lovely piece. A brilliantly rendered poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️❤️❤️

  25. Wendy Bourke says:

    – oops, sorry, Sanaa … a bit to quick to hit the post button … I meant to say content.

    1. Sanaa says:

      No worries ❤️ Thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  26. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    To me, this reads like a conversation between lovers, although each poem could be a soliloquy, standing on its own. Well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, MMT 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  27. Thotpurge says:

    Love the cantaloupe sun!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  28. Sara McNulty says:

    I am completely blown away by this masterpiece of contrapuntal poetry. Just gorgeous. Love that cantaloupe sun.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  29. dsnake1 says:

    masterful work with the form.
    glad it’s a happy ending. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Cheong 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  30. Oh, you totally aced this form! (One which I myself have not yet attempted.)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

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