Let me through the wall you have secured
around your fragile heart
the bolted door where you hide from the
world outside
let me reach out share your deepest woes,
that pierce your soul
into cold abyss as arms of angst hold you
without acquiescence
feel the warmth of your lips, those haunting
dark, half closed eyes
radiating from the and your face, so obvious in
cantaloupe sun its portrayal of feeling
let me offer you the world, with its joy, its
hidden trail to heaven
my entire self, because nothing else can
satiate this ache and thirst
to love, to cherish until the hour of end, until
you laugh and say yes
forevermore.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Form: Contrapuntal Poetry
Posted on ‘Meeting the Bar’ @ dVerse Pub
posted on ‘Poetry Pantry’ @ Poets United
62 Responses
cantaloupe sun ! This is wonderfully written.
Thank you so much, Jilly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Nice ending with saying yes forevermore.
Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Nicely and smoothly done! It flowed naturally Sanaa!
Hank
Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
No one does love poems like you. This is soooo good.
Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️
I love the contrast of solid wall and bolted door and the fragile heart; the repetition of ‘Let me’, which builds up and combines with the words ‘arms of angst’ to convey a tone of despair’ which is melted by the warmth of lips and the ‘cantaloupe sun’ – a beautiful image, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you ❤️
I think you really nailed the intention of the contrapuntal idea, Sanaa. Well done!
Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Cantaloupe sun… love that.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
A wonderful interpretation. Two become one become three 😉
Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
(and thank you for the lovely prompt)
Saying “yes”, an act of bravery. It has a lot to do with discovering that “hidden trail to heaven.”
Definitely 😉 thanks for stopping by, Amaya ❤️
Oh my…..as always, you have such an amazing way with the romantic! All three….luscious!
Thank you so much, Lillian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
This is so endearing…….all 3 of them!
Thank you so much, Vivian 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
A little Poe, in the ending,….”forevermore, forevermore.” Great job!
Thank you so much, Annell 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
I loved the way you have writtentwo separate poems that both stand alone or can be read together. Brilliantlly done Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so good to see you ❤️
I really like the form of this poem…and its passion!
Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Your “forevermore” quest is spoken in exqusite terms
Happy Sunday Sanaa. Thanks for dropping by my Sunday Standard today
Much❤️love
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Happy Sunday 🙂
Much🌹love
Oh this is wonderful. Who could resist? I love thecanteloupe sun! It is impressive how the two sides of the poem stand alone and work so well together. I have been nervous to attempt this. It seems difficult but you aced it.
Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Love that cantaloupe sun and ’till you laugh and say yes.’ I’m thinking of Springsteen’s Secret Garden now.
Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Loved the second read… still very much love it.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so good to see you ❤️
A very difficult prompt. You did a brilliant job . I hope the answer is a resounding ”yes’ Lovely romantic poem.
Thank you so much, Rall 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
This was fabulous….2 poems melded into one. You really worked magic here….brilliantly accomplished!
Thank you so much, Donna 😀 so good to see you ❤️
I can’t stop grinning at the image of the sun as a cantaloupe… warm and delicious.
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
So nice how the love patiently seduces the beloved with such sweet, convincing words that strive to go on forever.
Lovely writing Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Myrna 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Wonderful! The one, two, three poems are beautiful. I love the cantaloupe sun. And at the end, saying yes. Oh my yes!
Thank you so much, Toni 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Wow!
😉
You have created a fascinating form … which works beautifully with the contact of this lovely piece. A brilliantly rendered poem.
❤️❤️❤️
– oops, sorry, Sanaa … a bit to quick to hit the post button … I meant to say content.
No worries ❤️ Thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
To me, this reads like a conversation between lovers, although each poem could be a soliloquy, standing on its own. Well done!
Thank you so much, MMT 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Love the cantaloupe sun!
Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I am completely blown away by this masterpiece of contrapuntal poetry. Just gorgeous. Love that cantaloupe sun.
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
masterful work with the form.
glad it’s a happy ending. 🙂
Thank you so much, Cheong 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Oh, you totally aced this form! (One which I myself have not yet attempted.)
Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️