Voices (abyssal)

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Voices beckon ‘neath pale moonshine,
past hours of deep slumber and mist.
I gaze as water-lilies caress bold waters,
lauding mere sight with ache and sigh  —
There’s a song that births inside my head,
begs measure with breath o’ starry prairie.

Voices beckon round hour of ruddy morn,
strip doubt o’ cleanse with streaks of light.
I gaze as saucy chaffinch wakes and sings,
surfeit of evermore sweetened things —
There’s a song that births inside my head,
lends pleasure as berries o’ ripe and red.

 

 

Photo credits: marcobusoni – DeviantArt

Posted on Sunday Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads

& posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. I love that the songs birthing inside the speaker are red, like berries… like living blood. It reads natural and surreal.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀

  2. grapeling says:

    a saucy chaffinch! what a cool description ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Michael 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  3. Thotpurge says:

    Saucy chaffinch and songs birthing…wonderful images.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  4. Another luscious and beautiful poem. Long may you entertain these poetic voices!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aw! Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  5. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Love the saucy chaffinch- voices inside are so nice when they’re inked on paper.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤️ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn 🙂

  6. Brendan says:

    The Keatsian sound and meter are aprpopos for this primal encounter, this abyssal Voice — I suppose the well-spring of all poetry, right? We look upon glade waters, something rises, dripping, in our head. For me, the Victorian cast of language makes it a little daunting to feel intimate with this voice, where for me it is loving–motherly or sisterly–a familiar old sound. But I know that place, that sound. Thanks for responding so fully to the challenge.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Brendan 🙂 as ever for inspiring us ❤️

  7. Jae Rose says:

    A suitably entrancing voice from the deep 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  8. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    I’m basking in the prairie’s breath…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, MMT 🙂 good to see you ❤️

  9. So gentle and lyrical, Sanaa! I know those voices that beckon ‘past hours of deep slumber and mist’ and the songs that birth inside the head. As long I can hear them, I know I’m still alive!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. Fireblossom says:

    This is lovely, Sanaa. It made me smile at the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aw! Thank you so much, Shay 😀 so nice to see you! ❤️

  11. Julian says:

    I can’t pick out a best part as I love it all. A most enjoyable piece of poetry.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Julian 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  12. hedgewitch says:

    Birdsong/bird voices are always full of nuance and sauce. Love the end, especially.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤️ thanks for stopping by, Hedgewitch 🙂

  13. Bkmackenzie says:

    Love your use of words as subtle use of rhyme…bkm

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mackenzie 🙂 good to see you ❤️

  14. I especially liked your closing lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀

  15. Kerry O'Connor says:

    There’s a song that births inside my head…
    An excellent repeating line. This poem brings feelings of serenity.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aw!❤️ Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so nice to see you ❤️

  16. gillena says:

    “I gaze as water-lilies caress bold waters,”

    My favourite lines. Luv the classical tone and the message of dare to writers

    Happy Sunday Sanaa

    Much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena ❤️ so glad you liked it 😀

      Happy Sunday ?

      Much love back.. ❤️

  17. Ha, I thought I had commented already. This is lovely, as always, Sanaa. The closing lines made me smile.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry 🙂 the site must be down or something. I have your previous comment too?

  18. says:

    I love the way these lines flow together:

    “past hours of deep slumber and mist.
    I gaze as water-lilies caress bold waters”

    “I gaze as saucy chaffinch wakes and sings” … I can’t wait to hear it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂

  19. Jim says:

    I like the beautiful natural inspiration for the conception of the songs that will be born. Much the same as the composition of one of your poems.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  20. Old Egg says:

    How I love the humanizing of nature in poetry whether it be flowers, birds or even stars in the sky. Absolutely delightful Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so nice to see you ❤️

  21. kaykuala h says:

    There’s a song that births inside my head,
    lends pleasure as berries o’ ripe and red.

    Love the ending Sanaa! It sets a finality to the poem, a punch-line sort of. Doesn’t leave readers wondering!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  22. Wendy Bourke says:

    Eloquent and organic – bursting with life – and yet an enchanted surrealism runs though the piece. A really awesome poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aw! thank you so much, Wendy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  23. ZQ says:

    Always Sweet!
    ZQ

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you 😀 good to see you ZQ ❤️

  24. Elizabeth says:

    I like the sound of this: soft and lending itself to drifting off on the ebb and flow at a shoreline.

    Elizabeth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Elizabeth 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  25. totomai says:

    I find this to be absolutely magical, Sanaa. The imageries are fragile yet it seems they will hold on forever on one’s mind

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Totomai 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  26. Other Mary says:

    I like the way you have used the metaphor of under water as our subconscious, where our creativity comes from.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  27. Wonderful poem! Voices inside me are often songs!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bekkie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  28. I came for the essence of rose and found berries. The red makes me think of birth.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  29. Helen Dehner says:

    Simply beautiful ….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  30. Elle ee says:

    I enjoyed this poem so much. “There’s a song that births inside my head” yes there is and it’s always beautiful 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  31. Mark says:

    I like the sense of longing in this poem, the reaching out of the water’s depths for air, land and bird.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mark 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

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