Under the willow tree

A bouquet of clumsy words go,   
as summer offers thoughts that grow
pensive-sweet, here in august
note as willow sings chorus,
it’s strange how little we live,
like flour that strains through a sieve
a bouquet of clumsy words go,
as summer offers thoughts that grow

 

 

 

 

 

Photo credits: Willow tree over the lake by Michelle Gordon, Unsplash. 

Grace hosts at dVerse where she invites us to try a new poetic form known as
“The Octelle.” Come join us! ❤

Posted for Poetry Form: Octelle @dVerse Poets Pub 

 

 

 

Comments

  1. kittysverses says:

    Ah! Lovely descriptions, Sanaa. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kitty 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  2. Grace says:

    Love the willow tree singing chorus. Gives me the summer mood, pensive sweet, yet filled with thoughts about life (how little we live). I get the hopeful tone for the future.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  3. Yes, bang on for the form. Chaos and turmoil contribute to feeling that life “is like flour that strains through a sieve.” Good job.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh! Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 so glad you liked it! 💄❤️

  4. gillena says:

    “boquet of clumsy words” Nice image

    much💖love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

      Much love back 🥰

  5. Sunra Rainz says:

    What a lovely summer offering of a poem! I love the phrases “bouquet of clumsy words” and “pensive-sweet.” 🙂

    Hope you’re well, Sanaa <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! Thank you so much, my dearest Sunra 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

      Yes, I am well 🙂 Thank you for asking 🌹

  6. I like that flour line with the sieve.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Shay 😀 so glad you liked it! It was a challenging form 💄❤️

  7. I doubt you’ve ever had a “bouquet of clumsy words”!! 😆 You are too prolific, but you capture the melancholic reflection of summer, I know it well!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hahahaha the muse has its days! Thank you so much, Tricia 😀 so glad the poem appealed to you 💄❤️

  8. msjadeli says:

    Beautiful image, Sanaa. Your octelle has a sing-song rhythm to it that makes me think of children at play. It has the feel of summer <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, dear Lisa 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  9. Nitin says:

    it’s strange how little we live,
    like flour that strains through a sieve –

    Very very true. Great lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Nitin 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  10. Lovely Sanaa! My favorite lines are the same as Nitin’s ‘it’s strange how little we live,
    like flour that strains through a sieve’ Yes, we are so accustomed to filtering our words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! Thank you so much, Christine 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  11. gjef2871 says:

    Wow I really love this poem. It’s exactly what it says it is ‘a bouquet of clumsy words’ but at the same time it’s really clever and cool. I like it. G.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gjef 😀 so glad the poem appealed to you 💄❤️

  12. it’s strange how little we live,

    I just love the innocence that this line speaks to me with…

    <3
    David

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, David 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

  13. Selma says:

    pensive-sweet. I must admit, I’m thinking sweetly of autumn already. Thanks for giving us such lovely words today. Beautiful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Selma 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  14. Oh these lines:
    ” it’s strange how little we live,
    like flour that strains through a sieve”
    They really hit home!

  15. Jane Dougherty says:

    Peaceful picture you paint.

  16. Beautifully done, Sanaa.

  17. Mish says:

    Reading the first line aloud only emphasizes its image, as it almost forces a bit slower pace to articulate. Brilliant. This line made me pause….”it’s strange how little we live” and the image of the sieve is so unique.

  18. Punam says:

    This is “pensive-sweet” indeed, Sanaa! Love the reflective tone. ❤️❤️

  19. Amazing, this is so sweet!

  20. It would have meant messing with the form (my specialty) but I think it would also have been really powerfulo with these last two lines:
    a bouquet of clumsy words grow,
    as summer offers thoughts that go

  21. Sara McNulty says:

    I love the chorus!

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