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Midnight again, 
my soul silent
as regret hung like soft mist

upon the earth 
and longing loitered
upon red lips.
I can hear the heartbeat
of dying leaves, of
bewildered wind
that knows not difference

between smoke and sky,
questioning me why you left.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted for Quadrille #63 @ dVerse Pub

and on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads 

Comments

  1. HA says:

    OH, regret hanging like soft mist is such an endearing simile — the images are crystal clear and your words resonant with felt emotions. Splendid as always, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anmol 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  2. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice last line clarifying the silence and regret.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so good to see you ❤️

      1. Mary Hood says:

        Such sadness here. The earth holds it all. Beautiful words that evoke such emotion.

        1. Sanaa says:

          Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  3. De Jackson says:

    “I can hear the heartbeat
    of dying leaves”

    Sigh. I LOVE this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  4. Grace says:

    Can feel the anguished emotions, filled with regrets and confusion. Thanks for joining in Sanaa!!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  5. Pat says:

    as regret hung like soft mist
    upon the earth
    and longing loitered ….

    under a midnight sky and regret, like leaves, – I can almost hear them crisping into dusty silence … and the wind not knowing why ….

    and the ending of regret and wonder –

    this is richly painted and very poignant for the pain – just lovely Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Pat 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  6. I, too, was hooked with /the heartbeat of dying leaves/. Sadness is counterpointed by the lovely admiration for nature.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  7. Oh, Sanaa! Your opening lines set a tone that hangs like soft mist, full of longing and regret. I love the alliteration in:
    ‘…longing loitered
    upon red lips’
    and the sound of the ‘heartbeat of dying leaves’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  8. Jae Rose says:

    Such a lyrical write and you leave us pondering (which is always good)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marco 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  9. Thotpurge says:

    Nicely done Sanaa.. I liked the images of the heartbeat
    of dying leaves and the bewildered wind…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  10. Rommy says:

    I’m taken by the idea of not knowing the difference between smoke and sky. It implies a sadness so profound that one forgets whether they are surrounded by something that can help soothe, or something that could poison them.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  11. I too love the dying leaves, and even more that ‘bewildered wind’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  12. Lillian says:

    You write the most amazingly romantic posts! 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lillian 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  13. Gina says:

    questions going unanswered, this resonated with me Sanaa

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gina 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  14. Janice says:

    Sad and beautiful Sanaa. One of my favourites:
    “bewildered wind
    that knows not difference
    between smoke and sky,”…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Janice 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  15. henna says:

    “I can hear the heartbeat
    of dying leaves”

    Goodness, that’s gorgeous.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Henna 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. Vicki says:

    Sadly most of us feel lost in romance at least once in life, Beautifully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Vicki ❤️

  17. Sanaa, this is such a graceful, sad write. You always find the perfect images as well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. annell4 says:

    You got my attention with the “heart beat of the dying leaves.” What can we say, if we are left without knowing why? Perhaps this is when we just breath, and count our blessings and our abundance, which is great.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Annell ❤️

  19. Xenia Tran says:

    A beautiful write Sanaa, I especially love ‘as regret hung like soft mist upon the earth’ xxx

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Xenia 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  20. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Oh that heartbeat especially… I think I know about nights like that.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. Vivian Zems says:

    Love this… especially the bewildered wind…. finally arriving at that big question

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  22. Ah, this is so poignant. I love the “bewildered wind
    that knows not difference
    between smoke and sky,” who questions you. And the heartbeat of leaves. Beautiful images and word choices.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Victoria 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  23. Bewildered wind….sigh this is so beautiful Sanaa! I love it!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  24. Toni Spencer says:

    The second half of this poem, the heartbeat part is excellent. I would have loved to just read this part of this. So autumnal.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  25. Herotomost says:

    What an awesome picture and an even better piece of writing. This was questioning in all the right ways and the description vivid and emotional. Wow…I really loved this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Corey 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  26. Rall says:

    A painful split with all the confusion and toxicity beautifully expressed.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rall 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  27. “the heartbeat of dying leaves” I love that line. This poem is full of melancholy, pain, but it is written so beautifully it feels like a painting

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  28. Oh, this:
    “my soul silent
    as regret hung like soft mist
    upon the earth”

    and this:

    “I can hear the heartbeat
    of dying leaves”

    What heartbreaking poignancy in it all! I’m undone, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  29. I love this. So much emotion in so few words. I especially love these lines:
    as regret hung like soft mist
    upon the earth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  30. Kerry says:

    I can hear the heartbeat
    of dying leaves…

    Such a strong image and so well placed in the poem. Wonderful work, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

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