
The rough-hewn bits of her exhausted dreams are evident;
but what were they?
To be held?
To be left alone? To have things change?
She has tasted molten honey for a reasonβ
the scent of bigotry is enough to send chills down
anyone’s spine.
It would take time for cold grey to bleed in and delude us
into thinking otherwise;
her lips, still moist continue to defy departing springtime.
Photo credits: Alina Szapocznikow, ‘Undone,’ Pinterest
Day sixteen ~ In the Remains of this Month
Only you could combine altruism and defiance! Magical!
Sultry, not altruism
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The departing of springtime is a sad time, finding that maturity has finished the fun reckless times of growing up. So true, Sanaa.
Some fight it.
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I found your words potent, I especially relate to β the scent of bigotry is enough to send chills down
anyoneβs spine.β indeed it is πππΉ
Thank you so much, Ellecee π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
The illustration you’ve chosen is a stark and in-your-face (no pun intended) one that is, to me, shocking.
And then these powerful lines
“She has tasted molten honey for a reasonβ
the scent of bigotry is enough to send chills down
anyoneβs spine.”
What a powerful piece!
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OOPS….Sanaa…..can you link your post to dVerse please? Seems it’s only linked to/mentions Toads. Think you just forgot. THANKS
Thank you for reminding me, I had indeed forgotten! xo
The lines quoted by Lilian are those that caught me as well.
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Nice last line about the moisture of her lips defying the end of springtime.
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I got a little lost in the middle of the piece, as to focus and point of view. For the loss of springtime is the advent of summer to me. But after a second read, I thought about Spring being the blossoming of the girl, and it became more cohesive.
Thank you so much, Glenn π so glad the poem resonated with you πβ€οΈ
This is a potent indictment; the lines Lillian highlights struck me as well.
Thank you so much, Anna π so good to see you πβ€οΈ
Yes, your poem is very stark…There’s an intentional rawness that feeds into the way I feel today. Bigotry should send a chill down one’s spine…love your ending.
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Great image in your poem.
She has tasted molten honey for a reasonβ
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into thinking otherwise;
her lips, still moist continue
to defy departing springtime.
How we abhor to abandon the greenery of Spring! An agony sustaining for a year, imagine that!
Hank
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How beautifully you wove our words around this image!
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I like the way you have the lips still moist at the end… a sign of what was lost so recently.
Thank you so much, Kerry π so glad you liked it πβ€οΈ
Thatβs an amazing and intriguing opening line, Sanaa, and the questions are enigmatic clues to what the dreams were.
Thank you so much, Kim π so glad the poem resonated with you πβ€οΈ
I especially like the way the questions in this lead us into the heart of the poem’s message. And the vivid image chosen is fully lived-up-to.
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What was versus what you thought it could be versus what is and knowing what somethings will be. The loss of spring’s youthful innocence to first acknowledgement in the early summer heat of adulthood.
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