The remains of a saga unseen

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The rough-hewn bits of her exhausted dreams are evident;
but what were they?
To be held?
To be left alone? To have things change?
She has tasted molten honey for a reasonβ€”
the scent of bigotry is enough to send chills down
anyone’s spine.
It would take time for cold grey to bleed in and delude us
into thinking otherwise;
her lips, still moist continue to defy departing springtime.

 

 

 

Photo credits: Alina Szapocznikow, ‘Undone,’ Pinterest

Day sixteen ~ In the Remains of this Month

Posted for Play It Again @ Real Toads

& Posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Erbiage says:

    Only you could combine altruism and defiance! Magical!

    1. Erbiage says:

      Sultry, not altruism

      1. Sanaa says:

        πŸ™‚

    2. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Eric πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. Jim says:

    The departing of springtime is a sad time, finding that maturity has finished the fun reckless times of growing up. So true, Sanaa.
    Some fight it.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. Ellecee says:

    I found your words potent, I especially relate to β€œ the scent of bigotry is enough to send chills down
    anyone’s spine.” indeed it is πŸ™πŸ‘πŸŒΉ

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ellecee πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. lillian says:

    The illustration you’ve chosen is a stark and in-your-face (no pun intended) one that is, to me, shocking.
    And then these powerful lines
    “She has tasted molten honey for a reasonβ€”
    the scent of bigotry is enough to send chills down
    anyone’s spine.”
    What a powerful piece!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lillian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. Lillian says:

    OOPS….Sanaa…..can you link your post to dVerse please? Seems it’s only linked to/mentions Toads. Think you just forgot. THANKS

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you for reminding me, I had indeed forgotten! xo

  6. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    The lines quoted by Lilian are those that caught me as well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice last line about the moisture of her lips defying the end of springtime.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. I got a little lost in the middle of the piece, as to focus and point of view. For the loss of springtime is the advent of summer to me. But after a second read, I thought about Spring being the blossoming of the girl, and it became more cohesive.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. This is a potent indictment; the lines Lillian highlights struck me as well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anna πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Yes, your poem is very stark…There’s an intentional rawness that feeds into the way I feel today. Bigotry should send a chill down one’s spine…love your ending.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. Dwight Roth says:

    Great image in your poem.
    She has tasted molten honey for a reasonβ€”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. kaykuala h says:

    into thinking otherwise;
    her lips, still moist continue
    to defy departing springtime.

    How we abhor to abandon the greenery of Spring! An agony sustaining for a year, imagine that!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Hank πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. How beautifully you wove our words around this image!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. Kerry says:

    I like the way you have the lips still moist at the end… a sign of what was lost so recently.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  15. That’s an amazing and intriguing opening line, Sanaa, and the questions are enigmatic clues to what the dreams were.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  16. hedgewitch says:

    I especially like the way the questions in this lead us into the heart of the poem’s message. And the vivid image chosen is fully lived-up-to.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hedgewitch πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  17. Raivenne says:

    What was versus what you thought it could be versus what is and knowing what somethings will be. The loss of spring’s youthful innocence to first acknowledgement in the early summer heat of adulthood.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Raivenne πŸ’„β€οΈ

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