The other side of darkness

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White in the shadows, I see your face
lost amid morose musings that yearn
to slip into the maddening brain.

Loneliness washes over me as waves
yet I dare not whisper nor lower my
gaze. I am tired of echoes and sugar-
coated tales.

Oh how is it that my reflection stared
back at me fiery and full of sedulous
grace, I didn’t know what I was doing
nor what was about to take place.

The night although serene did frown,
as I gestured to trees and swaggering
crows; there’s a shift in the way great
wind blows.

You were mine fresh as a budding rose
with folded arms oh unawakened eyes,
which I sought to devour beneath the
trembling sky.

 

Photo credits:Β Pinterest

Shay invites us to write a spooky poem, I chose to play along the theme
of a Doppelganger.

Posted for ‘Fireblossom Friday’ @ Real Toads

and on ‘Open Link Night’ @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. This is very nicely done, Sanaa. The tone of the speaker perfectly conveys both the attraction to and the fear of the doppelganger.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  2. Beautiful piece, Sanaa. I especially like the following lines,

    Oh how is it that my reflection stared
    back at me fiery and full of sedulous
    grace,

    Often the other side of darkness is perceived to be scary. Brilliant write!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  3. Paul John Dear says:

    A very well penned piece which offers up that insight into how attractive and seductive the ‘other’ side can be.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  4. Fireblossom says:

    Wow, you really tried a new angle with this, and it worked beautifully! See, I knew you could do it! The atmosphere is so unusual. I really like this, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww! ❀️ Thank you so much, Shay πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it! ❀️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  5. I love it when you let the dark and sensuous out. So many images and feelings, such an exploration… and the magic is wonderful–I can see/feel the wind being bent by the speaker’s will, the spell taking place under a sky made for it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❀ Thank you so much, Magaly 😊 so glad you enjoyed it!❀

  6. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I love it when you write spooky… a doppelgΓ€nger would be like fearing your own shadow i think… (or maybe it is)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  7. There is a listlessness to your poem, Sanaa, as well as darkness in the shadows and the the maddening brain, and in the tiredness of echoes and sugar-coated tales. And the final stanza is so threatening:

    ‘You were mine fresh as a budding rose
    with folded arms oh unawakened eyes,
    which I sought to devour beneath the
    trembling sky’!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  8. alison says:

    It did sound restless, or wistful. My favourite line was “I am tired of echoes and sugar-
    coated tales.”- maybe this is how I am feeling today too.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Alison πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  9. Frank says:

    Morose musings seem to go with a maddening brain.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Frank ❀️

  10. The dark side is so seductive, and your journey is so sensual–I read it as an erotic encounter. I, too, was hooked by the /fiery sedulous grace/.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  11. Bev says:

    Sounds like looking for love in all the wrong places. “Swaggering crows” … love that!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  12. “There’s a shift in the way great wind blows.” This is a different voice for you, and I really like it. Your closing lines are just right. So well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  13. Oh I love this Sanaa!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  14. Old Egg says:

    So beautifully descriptive Sanaa, and so easy to picture the scene and I loved “You were mine fresh a budding rose…”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  15. Truedessa says:

    I think you’ve put a new twist on this one. I really like the following. I can feel the shift in the wind.

    The night although serene did frown,
    as I gestured to trees and swaggering
    crows; there’s a shift in the way great
    wind blows.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Truedessa πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  16. Maria says:

    Ah, beautiful flow and imagery Sanaa. ❀️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Maria πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  17. Vandana says:

    Ah! what an enchanting piece and the concluding stanza is amazing…want more of this poem….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vandana πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  18. Rommy says:

    Really captures the obsessive madness in a darker love affair. For some reason I thought of vampires but I could not decide if the speaker was a vampire driven mad with blood lust or a vampire’s victim, craving the bite even while knowing it will hurt them. Really cool Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rommy πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  19. Nimue says:

    The poem speaks volumes .. perfect picture you chose!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Nimue 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  20. Exquisite! I loved the abstractness of this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mosk πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  21. Is there such a thing as gentle darkness in someone? This reads this way to me. Lovely..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  22. annell4 says:

    “Gesturing to trees and crows”….perhaps a dream? And then a feast “beneath the trembling sky.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜‰ thanks for stopping by, Annell ❀️

  23. Jane Seymour says:

    “Loneliness washes over me as waves”.. sigh .. this is such a poignant image!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  24. Chris Evans says:

    This is unusually dark coming from you! I love how you depict the seductive side of darkness in your poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chris πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  25. Just Barry says:

    Is it weird that I didn’t find this spooky? I was more captivated and intrigued than anything… I was drawn into your words as Narcissus was drawn into his own reflection. (That probably says more about me than anything else, but still…)

    White in the shadows, I see your face
    lost amid morose musings that yearn
    to slip into the maddening brain.

    Loneliness washes over me as waves
    yet I dare not whisper nor lower my
    gaze. I am tired of echoes and sugar-
    coated tales.

    Exceptional writing here.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

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