Let us go then, you and I (T.S. Eliot)
Senses somewhat blurred for I have let
Thus ruthless passion prey upon us
Though door swings wide I dare not go
We get this feeling there and then
Hence heart unarmed laid bare to you
His eyes they often questioned “and?”
Besides but love what more have I
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Form: The Golden Shovel
Posted on Meeting the Bar @ dVerse Pub
also on the Poetry pantry @ Poets United
Your subtle slant rhyme of “then” and “and” works so well here, Sanaa. Great piece.
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Beautiful. I especially love that last line.
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This has a very “classic” feel to it Sanaa. There is a beauty in your choice of line and your own words expanding on them. Love expressiveness of this.
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Beautifully romantic!
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“Besides but love what more have I” Ohhhh,yes
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I think I should be able to recognize your beautiful classic poetry now–and to think that your inspiration came from Eliot!
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Romance seems to be your forte, Sanaa…it seems to flow effortlessly from you. Beautiful work!
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There seems to be some tension in this love, but sometimes discomfort is easier than the unfamiliar.
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Like people have said, this feels so classic, and yet original all at once. I really liked some of the lines. Great job.
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What a stunningly great last two lines…
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Sanaa, you have conveyed those blurred senses so well! I love the line: ‘Though door swings wide I dare not go’.
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Beautifully done. The last two lines are exquisite and made my mind and my heart immediately jump to what more need I. I always think that’s a wonderful thing when a wrIter can motivate a reader to interact with her or his words.
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This is so romantic. Sigh.
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Thus ruthless passion prey upon us
Though door swings wide I dare not go
There is always the fear of the unknown despite the promise of a great time. One treasures the secure side of life than to take too many risks! Rightly so Sanaa!
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Your choice of Eliot is so cool; a tough wordsmith to work from. I looked at E.E. Cummings, but finally decided to go with L. Cohen, who tops my list. Your piece is romantic, almost Victorian, with touches of classic vibes.
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“Besides but love what more have I?”
Beautiful!
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How long can a flower survive in a sealed jar only fuelled by passion – i think she needs water and air too – a potent piece and illustration
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Reading it again, it felt even better than last time. So skillfully weaved from those words.
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This is a tough form.. perhaps the trick is in picking a line packed with nouns!! I must try it!
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In the heat of impassioned moments, it seems that there can be nothing else. A taste of breathless infinity.
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My, my what a beautiful poem and especially that last line….what do we have but love of each other….those precious connections….without them we would be nothing…empty!
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A very clever write….I especially love your closing lines.
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The hesitation intimated in Line 3 is what makes for the dividing line of dare and caution
Beautifully penned
And thanks for linking to my Sunday Lime today Sanaa
Much love…
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This is a stunning golden shovel. I love the classic feel of this awesome poem.
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Sweetly penned, and wonderful last line.
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Sometimes you must dare to go into the unknown, love should be enough. A soft romantic feel with a bit of doubt layered within the lines.
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To be left with nothing more–I suppose that is a common occurrence when passion is spent too soon. I love the shovel form which I’m learning from you and Mary this week.
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Such a strong sense of yearning, softly revealed,
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Stunning…. it is a song of love! Classic
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Passion often does have a tendency to be ruthless, doesn’t it?
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Love is all, or we hope it will be. Beautiful write!
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Love those ‘and’ questions…. do we really need to put all dots above i immediately?
Challenging lines…
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