The Love Song

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Let us go then, you and I (T.S. Eliot)

Senses somewhat blurred for I have let
Thus ruthless passion prey upon us
Though door swings wide I dare not go
We get this feeling there and then
Hence heart unarmed laid bare to you
His eyes they often questioned “and?”
Besides but love what more have I

 

 

Photo credits: rebloggy.com

Form: The Golden Shovel

Posted on Meeting the Bar @ dVerse Pub

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also on the Poetry pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. Your subtle slant rhyme of “then” and “and” works so well here, Sanaa. Great piece.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello De Jackson,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  2. Beautiful. I especially love that last line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Linda,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  3. This has a very “classic” feel to it Sanaa. There is a beauty in your choice of line and your own words expanding on them. Love expressiveness of this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Walter,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  4. Mary says:

    Beautifully romantic!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  5. debi says:

    “Besides but love what more have I” Ohhhh,yes

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Debi,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  6. I think I should be able to recognize your beautiful classic poetry now–and to think that your inspiration came from Eliot!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  7. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    Romance seems to be your forte, Sanaa…it seems to flow effortlessly from you. Beautiful work!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gayle,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  8. Bryan Ens says:

    There seems to be some tension in this love, but sometimes discomfort is easier than the unfamiliar.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bryan,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  9. Like people have said, this feels so classic, and yet original all at once. I really liked some of the lines. Great job.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Matthew,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  10. Bjorn says:

    What a stunningly great last two lines…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  11. Sanaa, you have conveyed those blurred senses so well! I love the line: ‘Though door swings wide I dare not go’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Kim,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  12. Lillian says:

    Beautifully done. The last two lines are exquisite and made my mind and my heart immediately jump to what more need I. I always think that’s a wonderful thing when a wrIter can motivate a reader to interact with her or his words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Lillian,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  13. Patti says:

    This is so romantic. Sigh.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Patti,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  14. kaykuala h says:

    Thus ruthless passion prey upon us
    Though door swings wide I dare not go

    There is always the fear of the unknown despite the promise of a great time. One treasures the secure side of life than to take too many risks! Rightly so Sanaa!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hank,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead

  15. Your choice of Eliot is so cool; a tough wordsmith to work from. I looked at E.E. Cummings, but finally decided to go with L. Cohen, who tops my list. Your piece is romantic, almost Victorian, with touches of classic vibes.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Glenn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead

  16. Preeti S. says:

    “Besides but love what more have I?”

    Beautiful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Preeti,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  17. Jae Rose says:

    How long can a flower survive in a sealed jar only fuelled by passion – i think she needs water and air too – a potent piece and illustration

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  18. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Reading it again, it felt even better than last time. So skillfully weaved from those words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  19. Thotpurge says:

    This is a tough form.. perhaps the trick is in picking a line packed with nouns!! I must try it!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Thotpurge,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  20. In the heat of impassioned moments, it seems that there can be nothing else. A taste of breathless infinity.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gemma,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  21. My, my what a beautiful poem and especially that last line….what do we have but love of each other….those precious connections….without them we would be nothing…empty!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Donna,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  22. Sherry Marr says:

    A very clever write….I especially love your closing lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  23. gillena says:

    The hesitation intimated in Line 3 is what makes for the dividing line of dare and caution

    Beautifully penned
    And thanks for linking to my Sunday Lime today Sanaa

    Much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  24. dsnake1 says:

    This is a stunning golden shovel. I love the classic feel of this awesome poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Dsnake,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  25. Sweetly penned, and wonderful last line.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 🙂
      xoxo

  26. Truedessa says:

    Sometimes you must dare to go into the unknown, love should be enough. A soft romantic feel with a bit of doubt layered within the lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Truedessa,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  27. Susan says:

    To be left with nothing more–I suppose that is a common occurrence when passion is spent too soon. I love the shovel form which I’m learning from you and Mary this week.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  28. Elizabeth says:

    Such a strong sense of yearning, softly revealed,

    Elizabeth

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Elizabeth,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  29. panchali says:

    Stunning…. it is a song of love! Classic

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Panchali,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  30. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    Passion often does have a tendency to be ruthless, doesn’t it?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello MMT,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  31. Bekkie says:

    Love is all, or we hope it will be. Beautiful write!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bekkie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

  32. humbird says:

    Love those ‘and’ questions…. do we really need to put all dots above i immediately?
    Challenging lines…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Humbird,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

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