In his world there was no place for weakness
or so he said to his lady fair. “Oh! secrets you
say?” she whispered with an apple blossom in
her hair. “Though you lean upon with broken
heart; under thus lawn than skies more clear.
Bless the ends that brought us here; so much
to hope and none to fear.”
Thus held his thoughts their dark career; Lo!
chiseled face so raw and vicious; spoke on the
darkest evening of the year. “Patient my dear,
your tender heart can not bear. Hear so gentle
wind and waters near; making song for lonely
ear.” No sooner had she turned around; heard
pensive laughter, inhuman sound.
In bloom of peach and rose’s bud;
He lusted for her flesh and blood.
Photo credits: ru.dhgate.com
Posted for Midweek Motif @ Poets United
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Aha…nice vampire twist!!!
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Yikes! What a beautiful capture of insidious secrecy, with internal rhyme and all!
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Very cool, Sanaa!
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Oh, my! A dangerous tryst! Well done.
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o my…what a twist!…and i also love the picture 🙂
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Sanaa I like this so much. It’s a great story, so well written. I enjoyed the internal rhyme and the dark vampire ending.
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I really like the phrasing and how it’s penned… one word after another creating a perfect rhythm. Kudos to you for that!
And yes, that twist was delicious. 🙂
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Wow!
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Oh–seductive and creepy–and beautifully written!!
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Fantastic!
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Wow! That ending coupled with the body of the poem was chilling!
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Lovely the way you surprised us at the end
Much love…
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hmm…could be a fatal attraction filled with mystery..might be better to not know his secrets. Very well crafted and dramatic 🙂
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Let’s hope she sees the light and he is frightened away by it! A darker poem from you today Sanaa!
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Wow that took a great turn! well crafted!
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I love all the references to fruit – very sensual – particularly love the soft feel of apple blossoms in her hair 🙂
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In bloom of peach and rose’s bud;
He lusted for her flesh and blood
Obviously she had met her match. Or perhaps a tad too aggressive for comfort!
Hank
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How many women are drawn in thus? (Maybe not to a vampire.)
Your prose is softened sweet and razor sharp.
Hope you are having a delightful week (be safe)
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La Luna
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The final twist is awesome, Sanaa! Really great reading….
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The shocking twist makes it very interesting!
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Unexpected ending…whoa! 😉 Nice write!
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Hmmmm, all is not what it seems! Nice twist t the end, Sanaa.
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A truly magical write – i got swept along
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Read it again today, Vampire or Werewolf?
luv the handwriting image you added
much love…
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PS: Vampire 😉
I really like the form you’ve chosen for this – like a chest holding the secrets of the internal rhymes. And then you open it and release the rhyming couplet as if it were Pandora’s box or a vampire’s coffin.
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The ending lines fill the mind with all sorts of sharp reds and living wants. Love the vividness of it.
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a lovely form, a sweet picture, and then – just like the poor girl I was lured in by sweetness and surprised by the twist at the end.
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There comes a darkness in the beautiful garden…love a dark write!
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Scary guy, Sanaa. Nice reading. She best ditch him fast!!
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This is so rich with meaning. Quite vivid and a surprise twist love it!
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A predator of man… really the scariest is the first line… no place for weakness is a weakness in itself.
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Mysterious and beautifully written. This gave me chills Sanaa! I love it!
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