The Secret

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In his world there was no place for weakness
or so he said to his lady fair. “Oh! secrets you
say?” she whispered with an apple blossom in
herΒ hair. “Though you lean upon with broken
heart; under thus lawn than skies more clear.
Bless the ends that brought us here; so much
to hope and none to fear.”

Thus held his thoughts their dark career; Lo!
chiseled face so rawΒ and vicious; spoke on the
darkest eveningΒ of the year. “Patient my dear,
your tender heart can not bear. Hear so gentle
wind and waters near; making song for lonely
ear.” No sooner had she turned around; heard
pensive laughter, inhuman sound.

In bloom of peach and rose’s bud;
He lusted for her flesh and blood.

 

Photo credits:Β ru.dhgate.com

Posted for Midweek Motif @ Poets United

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Comments

  1. Thotpurge says:

    Aha…nice vampire twist!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Thotpurge,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  2. Susan says:

    Yikes! What a beautiful capture of insidious secrecy, with internal rhyme and all!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  3. Mama Zen says:

    Very cool, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello MZ,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  4. Sherry Marr says:

    Oh, my! A dangerous tryst! Well done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  5. Sumana Roy says:

    o my…what a twist!…and i also love the picture πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sumana,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  6. Myrna says:

    Sanaa I like this so much. It’s a great story, so well written. I enjoyed the internal rhyme and the dark vampire ending.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Myrna,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  7. HA says:

    I really like the phrasing and how it’s penned… one word after another creating a perfect rhythm. Kudos to you for that!

    And yes, that twist was delicious. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Anmol,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Annell,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  8. Oh–seductive and creepy–and beautifully written!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Audrey,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Moskowitz,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  9. Wow! That ending coupled with the body of the poem was chilling!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Carol,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  10. gillena says:

    Lovely the way you surprised us at the end

    Much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  11. Truedessa says:

    hmm…could be a fatal attraction filled with mystery..might be better to not know his secrets. Very well crafted and dramatic πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Truedessa,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  12. Old Egg says:

    Let’s hope she sees the light and he is frightened away by it! A darker poem from you today Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Old Egg,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  13. Luk Lei says:

    Wow that took a great turn! well crafted!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Luk Lei,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  14. Jae Rose says:

    I love all the references to fruit – very sensual – particularly love the soft feel of apple blossoms in her hair πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  15. kaykuala h says:

    In bloom of peach and rose’s bud;
    He lusted for her flesh and blood

    Obviously she had met her match. Or perhaps a tad too aggressive for comfort!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hank,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  16. L. Moon says:

    How many women are drawn in thus? (Maybe not to a vampire.)
    Your prose is softened sweet and razor sharp.
    Hope you are having a delightful week (be safe)

    Much love
    La Luna

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Leslie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  17. panchali says:

    The final twist is awesome, Sanaa! Really great reading….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Panchali,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  18. Amit Agarwal says:

    The shocking twist makes it very interesting!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Amit,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  19. Unexpected ending…whoa! πŸ˜‰ Nice write!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hannah,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  20. Nicholas V. says:

    Hmmmm, all is not what it seems! Nice twist t the end, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Nicholas,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  21. Jae Rose says:

    A truly magical write – i got swept along

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  22. gillena says:

    Read it again today, Vampire or Werewolf?
    luv the handwriting image you added

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

      PS: Vampire πŸ˜‰

  23. I really like the form you’ve chosen for this – like a chest holding the secrets of the internal rhymes. And then you open it and release the rhyming couplet as if it were Pandora’s box or a vampire’s coffin.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❀ Thank you so much, Kim 😊 so glad you enjoyed it!❀

  24. The ending lines fill the mind with all sorts of sharp reds and living wants. Love the vividness of it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀

  25. Candy says:

    a lovely form, a sweet picture, and then – just like the poor girl I was lured in by sweetness and surprised by the twist at the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Candace πŸ™‚ so glad you enjoyed it ❀

  26. Bekkie says:

    There comes a darkness in the beautiful garden…love a dark write!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bekkie πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀

  27. Jim says:

    Scary guy, Sanaa. Nice reading. She best ditch him fast!!
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Jim ❀

  28. Vivian Zems says:

    This is so rich with meaning. Quite vivid and a surprise twist love it!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀

  29. Bjorn says:

    A predator of man… really the scariest is the first line… no place for weakness is a weakness in itself.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn ❀

  30. Mysterious and beautifully written. This gave me chills Sanaa! I love it!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀

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