As the moon does the ocean,
molten silver carrying within unspoken intensity,
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow;
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so.
Like opposites forever compelled to attract,
secret messages traced along corner of lips,
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.
With a reassuring eye every scar is surveyed,
why is it that world frowns upon mere idea of eternity,
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow;
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so.
Yours is the name that haunts the wind and the trees,
surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts,
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.
Let it be known, no other gaze by any definition is sweeter,
I am of the opinion that this could be our destiny,
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow;
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so.
If only you knew, my heart skips a beat nearly every time,
just thinking about life, its tribulations, its eclipse,
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.
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Achingly beautiful write! I love the image paired with the verses, the “mirrored refrain” reverberates the unconditional and unstoppable love.
Thank you so much, Tricia 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Love! Beyond the odds, beyond reason, love!
Without a doubt! Thank you so much, Eric 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Ohhhh Sanaa…..you are absolutely the most romantic writer of all time!!!!
“Yours is the name that haunts the wind and the trees,
surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts,”
Just beautiful words! And I am smitten with their first two lines and the image you’ve used here! WONDERFUL!
Oh gosh! Thank you so much, my dearest Lillian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! 💄❤️
Totally agree with Lillian here.
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This is such a passionate love letter & I love those secret messages. I so admire the refraining lines:
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.
Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
(and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹
I enjoyed the poem, Sanaa. I think it would be even better though without the code letters at the line ends. I found it distracting, as if you’d forgotten to take your template out.
Thank you so much, Jane 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Your refrain lines are lovely declarations ~~ took my breath away.
Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Seems to be that love likes to take us out of our comfort zones. Beautiful declaration to the beloved here. I love the image with the ripples on the water!
Thank you so much, Lisa 🙂 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
“why is it that world frowns upon mere idea of eternity.”
“surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts.”
Thank you so much, Tzvi 🙂 so glad the poem spoke to you 💄❤️
Love the last stanza Sanaa! It beautifully brings the poem to a logical close smoothly taken!
Hank
Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
your refraining lines make my heart smile. the love is brimming here, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Rosema 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
“my heart skips a beat nearly every time”
This feels like the heart of the poem, because the meter throughout is like that, never quite settling into evenness, giving it a sense of expectation, like something wonderful is just around the corner.
Precisely! Thank you so much, Alexandra 😀 for your in depth observation of the theme of the poem 💄❤️
Undaunted love — the best kind.
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Lovely, Sanaa! 😀
Thank you so much, Lucy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
This is so very beautiful, Sanaa. Ah, love!
Thank you so much, Punam 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
This is amazing. Beautiful and wise.
Thank you so much, bigfatcan 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Love this, Sanaa! So compelling! My favourite stanza:
“Yours is the name that haunts the wind and the trees,
surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts,
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.”
Sunra <3
Thank you so much, Sunra 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Beautiful mirrored refrain. Wonderful phrasing in that second line ‘molten silver carrying within unspoken intensity’.
Thank you so much, Marion 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
My heart is skipping beats reading this. Romantic and well written.
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