She being the moon loved truly

Spread the love

As the moon does the ocean,
molten silver carrying within unspoken intensity,
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow;
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so.

Like opposites forever compelled to attract,
secret messages traced along corner of lips,
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.

With a reassuring eye every scar is surveyed,
why is it that world frowns upon mere idea of eternity,
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow;
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so.

Yours is the name that haunts the wind and the trees,
surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts,
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.

Let it be known, no other gaze by any definition is sweeter,
I am of the opinion that this could be our destiny,
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow;
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so.

If only you knew, my heart skips a beat nearly every time,
just thinking about life, its tribulations, its eclipse,
I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.

 

 

 

 

 

Photo credits: Gifmaniacos.es

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known as “Mirrored Refrain.” Come join us! 💝

Posted for Poetry Form: Mirrored Refrain @dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Achingly beautiful write! I love the image paired with the verses, the “mirrored refrain” reverberates the unconditional and unstoppable love.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tricia 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

    2. Eric Erb says:

      Love! Beyond the odds, beyond reason, love!

      1. Sanaa says:

        Without a doubt! Thank you so much, Eric 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  2. Lillian says:

    Ohhhh Sanaa…..you are absolutely the most romantic writer of all time!!!!
    “Yours is the name that haunts the wind and the trees,
    surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts,”
    Just beautiful words! And I am smitten with their first two lines and the image you’ve used here! WONDERFUL!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Oh gosh! Thank you so much, my dearest Lillian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! 💄❤️

      1. Eric Erb says:

        Totally agree with Lillian here.

        1. Sanaa says:

          ❤️❤️❤️

  3. Grace says:

    This is such a passionate love letter & I love those secret messages. I so admire the refraining lines:

    I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
    deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  4. Jane Dougherty says:

    I enjoyed the poem, Sanaa. I think it would be even better though without the code letters at the line ends. I found it distracting, as if you’d forgotten to take your template out.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  5. Helen says:

    Your refrain lines are lovely declarations ~~ took my breath away.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  6. msjadeli says:

    Seems to be that love likes to take us out of our comfort zones. Beautiful declaration to the beloved here. I love the image with the ripples on the water!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa 🙂 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  7. Tzvi Fievel says:

    “why is it that world frowns upon mere idea of eternity.”
    “surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Tzvi 🙂 so glad the poem spoke to you 💄❤️

  8. Love the last stanza Sanaa! It beautifully brings the poem to a logical close smoothly taken!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  9. your refraining lines make my heart smile. the love is brimming here, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosema 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  10. “my heart skips a beat nearly every time”

    This feels like the heart of the poem, because the meter throughout is like that, never quite settling into evenness, giving it a sense of expectation, like something wonderful is just around the corner.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Precisely! Thank you so much, Alexandra 😀 for your in depth observation of the theme of the poem 💄❤️

  11. Ken Gierke says:

    Undaunted love — the best kind.

    1. Sanaa says:

      😉

  12. Lucy says:

    Lovely, Sanaa! 😀

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lucy 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  13. Punam says:

    This is so very beautiful, Sanaa. Ah, love!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Punam 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  14. This is amazing. Beautiful and wise.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, bigfatcan 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  15. Sunra Rainz says:

    Love this, Sanaa! So compelling! My favourite stanza:

    “Yours is the name that haunts the wind and the trees,
    surely such a feeling does not run according to scripts,
    I will love you even if the odds are against me doing so;
    deliberately, knowing the consequences that’ll follow.”

    Sunra <3

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sunra 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  16. Marion Horton says:

    Beautiful mirrored refrain. Wonderful phrasing in that second line ‘molten silver carrying within unspoken intensity’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marion 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  17. Sara McNulty says:

    My heart is skipping beats reading this. Romantic and well written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❤️❤️❤️

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