Samurai

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Not long before he’s caught;
Felt a presence chasing him;
A glimpse before he got;
Alas! the lights went dim.

Taken refuge into a shade,
Gathering breath as he goes;
A sudden duel struck in glade,
Further still, a teardrop flows.

Ashamed for how she fell for lies
Alas! amid a grave of stone,
As love and hope within her dies;
Whispered prayer in muffled tone.

Moonlight creeping over the lawn.
Weeping till the night had gone.

 

Photo Credits: www.deviantart.com

Form: Shakespearean Sonnet

Posted on Sunday Challenge @ Real Toads

& Posted for Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

90 thoughts on “Samurai”

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    May 30, 2015 at 8:35 pm

    Well played with the story here.. though very sad. I think the end for warriors is often sad.

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    1. adashofsunny says:
      May 30, 2015 at 8:41 pm

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  2. De Jackson (WhimsyGizmo) says:
    May 30, 2015 at 8:35 pm

    I love those closing lines, especially – that internal rhyme in creeping/weeping. Excellent.

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    1. adashofsunny says:
      May 30, 2015 at 8:41 pm

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  3. lolamouse says:
    May 30, 2015 at 9:41 pm

    Beautifully written story but so sad.

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      May 30, 2015 at 9:43 pm

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  4. Gail says:
    May 30, 2015 at 10:55 pm

    Nicely done.

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    1. adashofsunny says:
      May 30, 2015 at 11:44 pm

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      1. Gail says:
        May 31, 2015 at 1:11 am

        Thanks. The picture is actually of a stream here that only carries water when there is much rain and the dog is my Ki-Anne, safe and spoiled.

        Have a wonderful weekend.

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          May 31, 2015 at 8:56 am

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  5. Hannah Gosselin says:
    May 30, 2015 at 11:54 pm

    I love the story that evolved from these end rhymes! Vivid!

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:04 am

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  6. Manicddaily says:
    May 31, 2015 at 2:43 am

    Oh dear, feels like an archetypical love story! Thanks, Sanaa. k.

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    1. adashofsunny says:
      May 31, 2015 at 8:57 am

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  7. Isadora Gruye says:
    May 31, 2015 at 3:32 am

    Those last two lines are stunning! Good work!

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      May 31, 2015 at 8:57 am

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  8. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:
    May 31, 2015 at 4:33 am

    Oh, this is like a Shakespearian tragedy!

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      May 31, 2015 at 8:58 am

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  9. Amrit Sinha says:
    May 31, 2015 at 6:47 am

    A Poignant tale … but very well expressed 🙂

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      May 31, 2015 at 8:59 am

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  10. blogoratti says:
    May 31, 2015 at 9:26 am

    Hello, its a beautiful poem and well written too, although sad and filled with pain and hints of regret, and maybe longing. A silent cry for love to linger…

    How are you lately, hope great? Have a nice month ahead and all the best!

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      May 31, 2015 at 9:54 am

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  11. Jae Rose says:
    May 31, 2015 at 10:14 am

    I hope she wipes away the tears and fights back..how hard it is when our hearts and more importantly our trust is broken

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:26 pm

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  12. vandana says:
    May 31, 2015 at 11:28 am

    A warrior’s life is hard indeed.

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:43 pm

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  13. Mary says:
    May 31, 2015 at 11:41 am

    Quite sad when both love and hope die and one is left to weep through the night! You worked the end words well, Sanaa.

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:44 pm

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  14. Kerry O'Connor says:
    May 31, 2015 at 11:50 am

    You have a flair for rhyme so this worked out really well. Great sense of rhythmic flow.

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:45 pm

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  15. Marcoantonio Arellano says:
    May 31, 2015 at 12:08 pm

    Well penned. it is sad when the heart is scorned as a result of a lie.

    Gracias

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:46 pm

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  16. Brother Ollie says:
    May 31, 2015 at 12:30 pm

    A big narrative in this tight little poem!

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:47 pm

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  17. Old Egg says:
    May 31, 2015 at 12:34 pm

    How beautifully you captured the scene with her despair with her lover’s demise.

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      May 31, 2015 at 12:47 pm

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  18. hedgewitch says:
    May 31, 2015 at 12:52 pm

    A sense of running from what can’t be avoided here, and things closing in.

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      May 31, 2015 at 1:48 pm

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  19. Suyash_J says:
    May 31, 2015 at 2:20 pm

    Love how you end it.

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      May 31, 2015 at 4:06 pm

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  20. Sumana Roy says:
    May 31, 2015 at 2:28 pm

    poignant but b e a u t i f u l !!

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      May 31, 2015 at 4:07 pm

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  21. X says:
    May 31, 2015 at 3:31 pm

    Last night I went to the Shakespeare theater and saw Much Ado so the talk of duels and love and tears is a very tangible image in my mind.

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      May 31, 2015 at 4:08 pm

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  22. Leslie Moon says:
    May 31, 2015 at 3:58 pm

    Moonlight alone knows what occurred.
    A sad tale Sanaa – I hope you add to it.
    Hope its been a great weekend 🙂
    xo

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      May 31, 2015 at 4:08 pm

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  23. Sherry Blue Sky says:
    May 31, 2015 at 6:13 pm

    A beautiful sonnet with a fantastic closing couplet. Yay!

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      May 31, 2015 at 8:59 pm

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  24. gillena says:
    May 31, 2015 at 7:47 pm

    Ah yes for every warrior there is a maiden to weep. Dont think this vise versa though

    Have a nice Sunday

    Much love…

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      May 31, 2015 at 9:00 pm

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  25. CC says:
    May 31, 2015 at 8:11 pm

    I like the personification of the moonlight 🙂

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      May 31, 2015 at 9:03 pm

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  26. Donna@Living From Happiness says:
    May 31, 2015 at 8:17 pm

    A sad and beautiful poem.

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      May 31, 2015 at 9:01 pm

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  27. Magyar says:
    May 31, 2015 at 8:51 pm

    __Grand and beautiful verse, Sunny! To use some of your words in this haiku echo, the key… is the spelling of morning’s dew :

    moonlight seeps
    beyond this tearful lawn
    mourning’s dew

    _m

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      May 31, 2015 at 9:02 pm

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  28. Audrey Howitt says:
    May 31, 2015 at 9:45 pm

    A lot of story here! I love the flow and cadences and how you move toward the close–

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      May 31, 2015 at 10:09 pm

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  29. totomai says:
    May 31, 2015 at 10:26 pm

    Some warriors fight with a heavy heart too. they are also humans. a thoughtful piece Sanaa

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      May 31, 2015 at 11:06 pm

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  30. Wendy Bourke says:
    May 31, 2015 at 10:36 pm

    The rhyming couplet at the conclusion of your poem is an indelible close. An awesome write!

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      May 31, 2015 at 11:09 pm

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  31. Jamztoma says:
    May 31, 2015 at 11:01 pm

    Wow, that was the work of a true word scholar! beautiful and very coherent. profoundly riveting!!!

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      May 31, 2015 at 11:15 pm

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  32. Debi says:
    June 1, 2015 at 11:22 am

    Love the last two lines!

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      June 1, 2015 at 11:53 am

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  33. G L Meisner says:
    June 1, 2015 at 11:26 am

    A secret affair caught and broken. The sadness there is almost too much.

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      June 1, 2015 at 11:53 am

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  34. humbird says:
    June 1, 2015 at 3:11 pm

    Sad story, but really feel how you penetrated in this adventurous character….~ Also, I think I’d recognize your poem among others…always in style of your own ~ lovely rhymes.

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      June 1, 2015 at 3:42 pm

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  35. Margaret says:
    June 1, 2015 at 3:41 pm

    …took me back in time. I could hear it and see it in my mind. Well done.

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      June 1, 2015 at 3:43 pm

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  36. Myrna says:
    June 1, 2015 at 3:47 pm

    Lovely poem Sanaa. Made me think how much hope goes into a love affair, but the knight in shinning armor may not really save the girl, she has to save herself.

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      June 1, 2015 at 4:00 pm

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  37. ZQ (R.K. Garon) says:
    June 1, 2015 at 6:48 pm

    Awesome! Well done… no. a wonderfully written piece!
    ZQ

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      June 1, 2015 at 7:32 pm

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  38. Leo says:
    June 1, 2015 at 6:58 pm

    The last two lines, especially, were quite sad, and could picture it. Also, made me try the bout rimes, though had linked in another poem to the pantry 😀 thanks…

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      June 1, 2015 at 7:31 pm

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  39. Kim Nelson says:
    June 1, 2015 at 10:15 pm

    I feel so sorry that she feels shame. Chalk it up to a lesson learned and the opportunity for new beginning.

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      June 1, 2015 at 10:17 pm

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  40. Susan says:
    June 1, 2015 at 11:45 pm

    Good for you! I didn’t even try the end-rhyme poem!

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      June 1, 2015 at 11:50 pm

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  41. grapeling says:
    June 2, 2015 at 7:02 am

    Inspired, Sanaa ~

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      June 2, 2015 at 9:40 am

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  42. Magaly Guerrero says:
    June 2, 2015 at 3:22 pm

    Love the last image… so sharp.

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      June 2, 2015 at 6:02 pm

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  43. Eileen T O'Neill says:
    June 2, 2015 at 5:06 pm

    Sanaa,

    A powerful poem which probably reflects life somewhere on a particular day…Very real in its hold..

    Eileen

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      June 2, 2015 at 6:03 pm

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  44. Stacy Lynn Mar says:
    June 4, 2015 at 5:01 am

    A story beautifully illustrated with words. the last two lines sum it up perfectly.

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      June 4, 2015 at 11:12 am

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