Samurai

Spread the love

Hall_of_Lanterns_by_snapsnapbang

Not long before he’s caught;
Felt a presence chasing him;
A glimpse before he got;
Alas! the lights went dim.

Taken refuge into a shade,
Gathering breath as he goes;
A sudden duel struck in glade,
Further still, a teardrop flows.

Ashamed for how she fell for lies
Alas! amid a grave of stone,
As love and hope within her dies;
Whispered prayer in muffled tone.

Moonlight creeping over the lawn.
Weeping till the night had gone.

 

Photo Credits:Β www.deviantart.com

Form: Shakespearean Sonnet

Posted on Sunday Challenge @ Real Toads

& Posted for Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. Well played with the story here.. though very sad. I think the end for warriors is often sad.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend!

  2. I love those closing lines, especially – that internal rhyme in creeping/weeping. Excellent.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello De Jackson,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend πŸ™‚

  3. lolamouse says:

    Beautifully written story but so sad.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Lolamouse,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend πŸ˜€

  4. Gail says:

    Nicely done.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Gail,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, hope you’re having a nice weekend πŸ™‚
      xoxo

      1. Gail says:

        Thanks. The picture is actually of a stream here that only carries water when there is much rain and the dog is my Ki-Anne, safe and spoiled.

        Have a wonderful weekend.

        1. adashofsunny says:

          Hello Gail,

          Thanks for stopping by, that’s nice to know πŸ˜€
          Hope you’re having a wonderful weekend πŸ™‚
          xoxo

  5. I love the story that evolved from these end rhymes! Vivid!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Hannah,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  6. Manicddaily says:

    Oh dear, feels like an archetypical love story! Thanks, Sanaa. k.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Karin,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  7. Isadora Gruye says:

    Those last two lines are stunning! Good work!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Isadora,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  8. Oh, this is like a Shakespearian tragedy!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  9. Amrit Sinha says:

    A Poignant tale … but very well expressed πŸ™‚

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Amrit,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend! πŸ˜€

  10. blogoratti says:

    Hello, its a beautiful poem and well written too, although sad and filled with pain and hints of regret, and maybe longing. A silent cry for love to linger…

    How are you lately, hope great? Have a nice month ahead and all the best!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Blogoratti,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great month ahead!

  11. Jae Rose says:

    I hope she wipes away the tears and fights back..how hard it is when our hearts and more importantly our trust is broken

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Jae Rose,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  12. vandana says:

    A warrior’s life is hard indeed.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Vandana,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend! πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  13. Mary says:

    Quite sad when both love and hope die and one is left to weep through the night! You worked the end words well, Sanaa.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  14. Kerry O'Connor says:

    You have a flair for rhyme so this worked out really well. Great sense of rhythmic flow.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Kerry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend!
      xoxo

  15. Well penned. it is sad when the heart is scorned as a result of a lie.

    Gracias

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Macroantonio,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend πŸ™‚

  16. Brother Ollie says:

    A big narrative in this tight little poem!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Brother Ollie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend πŸ˜€

  17. Old Egg says:

    How beautifully you captured the scene with her despair with her lover’s demise.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Old Egg,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  18. hedgewitch says:

    A sense of running from what can’t be avoided here, and things closing in.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Hedgewitch,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  19. Suyash_J says:

    Love how you end it.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Suyash,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend!

  20. Sumana Roy says:

    poignant but b e a u t i f u l !!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Sumana,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciate your warm & kind remarks!
      xoxo

  21. X says:

    Last night I went to the Shakespeare theater and saw Much Ado so the talk of duels and love and tears is a very tangible image in my mind.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello X,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend! πŸ˜€

  22. Leslie Moon says:

    Moonlight alone knows what occurred.
    A sad tale Sanaa – I hope you add to it.
    Hope its been a great weekend πŸ™‚
    xo

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Leslie,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  23. A beautiful sonnet with a fantastic closing couplet. Yay!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Sherry,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  24. gillena says:

    Ah yes for every warrior there is a maiden to weep. Dont think this vise versa though

    Have a nice Sunday

    Much love…

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  25. CC says:

    I like the personification of the moonlight πŸ™‚

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello C.C

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  26. A sad and beautiful poem.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Donna,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend! πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  27. Magyar says:

    __Grand and beautiful verse, Sunny! To use some of your words in this haiku echo, the key… is the spelling of morning’s dew :

    moonlight seeps
    beyond this tearful lawn
    mourning’s dew

    _m

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Magyar,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend!

  28. A lot of story here! I love the flow and cadences and how you move toward the close–

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Audrey,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  29. totomai says:

    Some warriors fight with a heavy heart too. they are also humans. a thoughtful piece Sanaa

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Totomai,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a nice weekend!
      xoxo

  30. Wendy Bourke says:

    The rhyming couplet at the conclusion of your poem is an indelible close. An awesome write!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Wendy,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  31. Jamztoma says:

    Wow, that was the work of a true word scholar! beautiful and very coherent. profoundly riveting!!!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello James,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a nice weekend! πŸ™‚

  32. Debi says:

    Love the last two lines!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Debi,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  33. G L Meisner says:

    A secret affair caught and broken. The sadness there is almost too much.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Mr Meisner,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated! Have a great week ahead!

  34. humbird says:

    Sad story, but really feel how you penetrated in this adventurous character….~ Also, I think I’d recognize your poem among others…always in style of your own ~ lovely rhymes.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Humbird,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  35. Margaret says:

    …took me back in time. I could hear it and see it in my mind. Well done.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Margaret,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead!
      xoxo

  36. Myrna says:

    Lovely poem Sanaa. Made me think how much hope goes into a love affair, but the knight in shinning armor may not really save the girl, she has to save herself.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Myrna,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead!
      xoxo

  37. Awesome! Well done… no. a wonderfully written piece!
    ZQ

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Sir,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciate your warm and kind words πŸ™‚

  38. Leo says:

    The last two lines, especially, were quite sad, and could picture it. Also, made me try the bout rimes, though had linked in another poem to the pantry πŸ˜€ thanks…

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Leo,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a great week ahead!

  39. Kim Nelson says:

    I feel so sorry that she feels shame. Chalk it up to a lesson learned and the opportunity for new beginning.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Kim,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead!
      xoxo

  40. Susan says:

    Good for you! I didn’t even try the end-rhyme poem!

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Susan,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      It was an exceptionally difficult challenge πŸ™‚
      Lots of love
      xoxo

  41. grapeling says:

    Inspired, Sanaa ~

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Michael,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciate your warm remarks πŸ™‚

  42. Love the last image… so sharp.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Magaly,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead!
      xoxo

  43. Sanaa,

    A powerful poem which probably reflects life somewhere on a particular day…Very real in its hold..

    Eileen

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Eileen,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ™‚
      xoxo

  44. A story beautifully illustrated with words. the last two lines sum it up perfectly.

    1. adashofsunny says:

      Hello Stacy,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ˜€
      Highly appreciated! Have a great week ahead πŸ™‚
      xoxo

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *