The lights are out;
Loud music playing.
To the rhythm of the beat;
The body thus swaying.
Caught in a,
Trance.
Get up and,
Dance.
Listen up close;
Melodious note.
Spirit so high;
Feeling afloat.
Caught in a,
Trance.
Get up and,
Dance.
The night is young;
Wild heart pounding.
Engrossed in music;
Forgotten all surrounding.
Caught in a,
Trance.
Get up and,
Dance.
The perfect fit;
Moving as one.
Flaming romance;
Had soon begun.
Caught in a,
Trance.
Get up and,
Dance.
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I love that your wording here still carries a pulsing rhythm in the short lines conveys a bass line in the repetition of the caught in a trance stanza! Thanks for sharing this! I’m glad my prompt brought some magic to the page!!!! Viva la
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Music can certainly be en-trancing–your repetition sounds like a pop song. Thanks. k.
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Love the repetition here. Great piece.
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Very neat song and dance–your poem, I mean. It could be set to music, it comes from internal movement and captures it in both verse and refrain. Rhythm divine!
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this complete poem read as a waltz….you took the reader through the motions, complete descriptions.
it even has a rhythm all it’s own, the words just tap dance through the readers mind!
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The repeated lines work really well here.. .Almost like you want to stand up and sing
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There’s a savage purity in this — when it’s time to get down and dance, there’s nothing left to say but Dance. Got me onto the floor.
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Nice! This is a song. I really dig the pace of your lyrics!
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I like the flow of this poem – although it is not free verse, the variation of stanza and refrain create that impression.
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Love the rhythm of this!
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Engrossed in music;
Forgotten all surrounding…. yes, that is good music.
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These are truly words to dance to!
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Love the beat in this…line for line the momentum. 🙂
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This one makes me want to dance. Quite good. You may sync it with the beats and get the floor grooving 😀
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There’s a nice rhythm to this “flaming romance” that you carried over from the song.
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A perfect dance song 😀
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I could feel the bass thumping as I read through this one. Actually had such a good rhythm I wanted to get up and dance. Great job!
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This poem is very much so, your style. A nice running rhyme scheme very much like a song. With your repeated verse like a chorus
Thanks for linking in at Monday WRites
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A very insistent rhythm; who could resist?
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