Portrait of a Woman

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Essence of hope is tinged on sky;
             and I strolled outside just in time
to lounge ‘neath pale fuchsia sun.
              This is the path, which I desire to
enter; from miles foresee a future
             serene, oh’ rapture alone tastes of 
melons and berries.

My words alone taste warm as fire
            though scent may be syrupy sweet.
Dare you scorn, when you defy me;
          my wrath endure as stench of meat.

I’m a woman, darling like a careless
         whisper, golden dream conspicuous
through ash and smoke. To love me 
          is akin to losing sleep, come build a
bridge and clear your path. I, might
         seem mosaic but simpler than math.

Reminiscence sighs ‘neath weeping
          willow tree, when I strolled outside 
in time to blow promises to crescent.
         Embracing a path which has chosen
me at present.

 

 

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Posted for Rommy’s Challenge @ Real Toads

For my prompt “Women are the real architects of Society” on Friday 10th
March at 8:00 am EDT

& Posted on poems written on Prompt Nights 

Posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Rommy says:

    I especially love the bit about rapture tasting of melon and berries – it’s kind of perfect, and brings up lovely visuals and feelings.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  2. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like this phrase: “I, might
    seem mosaic but simpler than math.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, Frank 🙂

  3. Kerry O'Connor says:

    I’m a woman, darling like a careless
    whisper, golden dream conspicuous
    through ash and smoke.

    Such lovely thoughts expressed in this poem, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  4. Margaret says:

    “like a careless
    whisper”

    Really like that comparison!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  5. Thotpurge says:

    rapture alone tastes of
    melons and berries…. like that!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  6. Jane Dougherty says:

    I like this poem, the rhythm, the rhyme and the idiosyncratic word associations.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I especially love how you build up the image by contrasts… women are complex… great take.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  8. gillena says:

    luv the taste of rapture and the temperatures of your words. Nice write Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so good to see you ❤️

      Much love…

  9. A lifetime of studying women still leaves me more fascinated than informed–I mean they whelp the world, they assume the essence of boats, cars, mountains and ships. I, too, like your take on the taste of rapture.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    She sounds like a woman to be reckoned with…best not cross her! You describe her in a most artistic and creative way.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gayle 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  11. Bev says:

    This reminded me somehow of my trip to the grocery today. A husband and wife were choosing a bag of potatoes, she rejected each bag he chose and I heard him mumble under his breath “No use arguing with a woman”! Women ARE complex. Your words are well chosen.

    1. Sanaa says:

      We are definitely complex beings 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Beverly ❤️

  12. lynn says:

    You’ve beautifully captured her elusive essence…a graceful write!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lynn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  13. For me, Sanaa, your poem changes colour, from fuchsia, through melon and berry, to fire, gold and then willow green. Nicely done 😉

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you!❤️

  14. Sanaa this is beautiful….I love the line “My words alone taste warm as fire”….your poetry always is warm and inviting.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  15. Erbiage says:

    I’m sorry, you cannot both write this, and be simpler than math! Lol, a fantastic, evocative write.

    1. Sanaa says:

      LOL! Thank you so much, Eric 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. scott hastie says:

    Lovely write dear Sanaa, which for me skilfully captures what it is to be fluidly and mercurially feminine – an enchanting and seductive piece… Thanks for sharing it… With Best Wishes Scott

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Scott 😀 so good to see you!❤️

  17. Lovely. I really like the form of this piece.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you kindly, Arcadia Maria ❤️

  18. Grace says:

    Warmth of fire and careless whisper – she is some woman, I say !! Just timely for Women’s Day Sanaa ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  19. therisa says:

    Your second last stanza is pure poetic gold, Sanaa, just want to reread and admire your wordsmithing, on it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Therisa 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  20. barbara says:

    Lovely, with the imagery, color, and tastes…the sweet and the strong. I liked this very much. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Barbara 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  21. Sarah Bawden says:

    I really loved the very last line of this. It speaks to my soul during the struggles I am going through at present.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  22. Sara McNulty says:

    I love that this is about a woman. My favorite phrasing in this is:

    ‘I’m a woman, darling like a careless
    whisper, golden dream conspicuous
    through ash and smoke. ‘

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  23. I love the taste of the words, the defiance of the speaker, the fight between the different images… which work more like a dance. So many contradictions balancing each other. It’s yummy.❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  24. Marina Sofia says:

    Have to remark on the aptness of this line ‘I might seem mosaic but simpler than math’, but I also love the numerous allusions to sweet, candy, confectionery and pinkish colours – great theme running through your poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marina 😀 so nice to see you ❤️

  25. Ellecee says:

    I love the strength in this, she is not to be considered for beauty and femininity alone “My words alone taste warm as fire
    though scent may be syrupy sweet.” She has a backbone too 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤️ thanks for stopping by, Linda 😀

  26. Edit says:

    This is so wonderful!
    “I’m a woman, darling like a careless
    whisper, golden dream conspicuous
    through ash and smoke.” Beautiful!❤️
    Have a lovely weekend! 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  27. Xenia says:

    Absolutely gorgeous Sanaa ?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Xenia 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  28. this was a lovely portrait of a woman, everything she is and wanting to be loved for, you have captured the essence of a woman’s soul. my favourite line and one that resonated deep with me – To love me
    is akin to losing sleep, – beautiful and so deep!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Gina 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  29. Old Egg says:

    For all the enticement there is still an undercurrent of fear in this male reader who sees the warning signs but can he resist the danger? I’ll let you know!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  30. Just Barry says:

    This is brilliant! I especially liked:

    I’m a woman, darling like a careless
    whisper, golden dream conspicuous
    through ash and smoke. To love me
    is akin to losing sleep, come build a
    bridge and clear your path. I, might
    seem mosaic but simpler than math.

    That stanza is just so dense and dope, it reads like a hip-hop verse!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  31. Edit says:

    Wonderful poem, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  32. I love your portrait…It is vivid color, life, flavor….gorgeous

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️

  33. A wonderful feast of words!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bekkie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  34. paul scribbles says:

    Powerful and evocative prose in praise of the feminine..paths that choose you are the ones to behold. Walk them in beauty.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  35. Bryan Ens says:

    Oh I’d love to see that pale fuchsia sun!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bryan 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  36. debi says:

    A woman who knows and respects herself. Strong and at the same time delicate. Very nice.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  37. Angela says:

    I love this, Sanaa! I especially love the last stanza. The visualization of wishing to the moon and the idea that the path has chosen her at the moment. Sometimes it feels like just that…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Angela 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  38. Oh, Sanaa, such a beautiful poem in response to a creative, colorful prompt. You inspire me! Loved it. Thanks for sharing!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Stacie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

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