Essence of hope is tinged on sky;
and I strolled outside just in time
to lounge ‘neath pale fuchsia sun.
This is the path, which I desire to
enter; from miles foresee a future
serene, oh’ rapture alone tastes of
melons and berries.
My words alone taste warm as fire
though scent may be syrupy sweet.
Dare you scorn, when you defy me;
my wrath endure as stench of meat.
I’m a woman, darling like a careless
whisper, golden dream conspicuous
through ash and smoke. To love me
is akin to losing sleep, come build a
bridge and clear your path. I, might
seem mosaic but simpler than math.
Reminiscence sighs ‘neath weeping
willow tree, when I strolled outside
in time to blow promises to crescent.
Embracing a path which has chosen
me at present.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Posted for Rommy’s Challenge @ Real Toads
For my prompt “Women are the real architects of Society” on Friday 10th
March at 8:00 am EDT
& Posted on poems written on Prompt Nights
Posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Poets Pub
I especially love the bit about rapture tasting of melon and berries – it’s kind of perfect, and brings up lovely visuals and feelings.
Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I like this phrase: “I, might
seem mosaic but simpler than math.”
Thank you kindly, Frank 🙂
I’m a woman, darling like a careless
whisper, golden dream conspicuous
through ash and smoke.
Such lovely thoughts expressed in this poem, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
“like a careless
whisper”
Really like that comparison!
Thank you so much, Margaret 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
rapture alone tastes of
melons and berries…. like that!
Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I like this poem, the rhythm, the rhyme and the idiosyncratic word associations.
Thank you so much, Jane 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
I especially love how you build up the image by contrasts… women are complex… great take.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
luv the taste of rapture and the temperatures of your words. Nice write Sanaa
much love…
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Much love…
A lifetime of studying women still leaves me more fascinated than informed–I mean they whelp the world, they assume the essence of boats, cars, mountains and ships. I, too, like your take on the taste of rapture.
Thank you so much, Glenn 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
She sounds like a woman to be reckoned with…best not cross her! You describe her in a most artistic and creative way.
Thank you so much, Gayle 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
This reminded me somehow of my trip to the grocery today. A husband and wife were choosing a bag of potatoes, she rejected each bag he chose and I heard him mumble under his breath “No use arguing with a woman”! Women ARE complex. Your words are well chosen.
We are definitely complex beings 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Beverly ❤️
You’ve beautifully captured her elusive essence…a graceful write!
Thank you so much, Lynn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
For me, Sanaa, your poem changes colour, from fuchsia, through melon and berry, to fire, gold and then willow green. Nicely done 😉
Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you!❤️
Sanaa this is beautiful….I love the line “My words alone taste warm as fire”….your poetry always is warm and inviting.
Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I’m sorry, you cannot both write this, and be simpler than math! Lol, a fantastic, evocative write.
LOL! Thank you so much, Eric 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Lovely write dear Sanaa, which for me skilfully captures what it is to be fluidly and mercurially feminine – an enchanting and seductive piece… Thanks for sharing it… With Best Wishes Scott
Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Scott 😀 so good to see you!❤️
Lovely. I really like the form of this piece.
Thank you kindly, Arcadia Maria ❤️
Warmth of fire and careless whisper – she is some woman, I say !! Just timely for Women’s Day Sanaa ~
Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Your second last stanza is pure poetic gold, Sanaa, just want to reread and admire your wordsmithing, on it.
Thank you so much, Therisa 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Lovely, with the imagery, color, and tastes…the sweet and the strong. I liked this very much. 🙂
Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Barbara 😀 so good to see you ❤️
I really loved the very last line of this. It speaks to my soul during the struggles I am going through at present.
Thank you so much, Sarah 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
I love that this is about a woman. My favorite phrasing in this is:
‘I’m a woman, darling like a careless
whisper, golden dream conspicuous
through ash and smoke. ‘
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I love the taste of the words, the defiance of the speaker, the fight between the different images… which work more like a dance. So many contradictions balancing each other. It’s yummy.❤️
Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️
Have to remark on the aptness of this line ‘I might seem mosaic but simpler than math’, but I also love the numerous allusions to sweet, candy, confectionery and pinkish colours – great theme running through your poem.
Thank you so much, Marina 😀 so nice to see you ❤️
I love the strength in this, she is not to be considered for beauty and femininity alone “My words alone taste warm as fire
though scent may be syrupy sweet.” She has a backbone too 🙂
Definitely ❤️ thanks for stopping by, Linda 😀
This is so wonderful!
“I’m a woman, darling like a careless
whisper, golden dream conspicuous
through ash and smoke.” Beautiful!❤️
Have a lovely weekend! 🙂
Thank you so much 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Absolutely gorgeous Sanaa ?
Thank you so much, Xenia 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
this was a lovely portrait of a woman, everything she is and wanting to be loved for, you have captured the essence of a woman’s soul. my favourite line and one that resonated deep with me – To love me
is akin to losing sleep, – beautiful and so deep!
Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Gina 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️
For all the enticement there is still an undercurrent of fear in this male reader who sees the warning signs but can he resist the danger? I’ll let you know!
Thank you so much, Robin 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
This is brilliant! I especially liked:
I’m a woman, darling like a careless
whisper, golden dream conspicuous
through ash and smoke. To love me
is akin to losing sleep, come build a
bridge and clear your path. I, might
seem mosaic but simpler than math.
That stanza is just so dense and dope, it reads like a hip-hop verse!
Thank you so much, Barry 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Wonderful poem, Sanaa!
Thank you so much 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
I love your portrait…It is vivid color, life, flavor….gorgeous
Aww!❤️ Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️
A wonderful feast of words!
Thank you so much, Bekkie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Powerful and evocative prose in praise of the feminine..paths that choose you are the ones to behold. Walk them in beauty.
Thank you so much, Paul 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Oh I’d love to see that pale fuchsia sun!
Thank you so much, Bryan 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
A woman who knows and respects herself. Strong and at the same time delicate. Very nice.
Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I love this, Sanaa! I especially love the last stanza. The visualization of wishing to the moon and the idea that the path has chosen her at the moment. Sometimes it feels like just that…
Thank you so much, Angela 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Oh, Sanaa, such a beautiful poem in response to a creative, colorful prompt. You inspire me! Loved it. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you so much, Stacie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️