Once in a while
sun falls on sugar maple trees
Once in a while
comes soft prayer upon her lips
carried aloft on languid breeze
when poet truly loves and sees
Once in a while
You rarely smile
sometimes it’s hard to understand
You rarely smile
in autumn cold and shortened days
I sought to trace on shifting sand
with hope held in far-stretching hand
You rarely smile
Once in a while
glimpse ardor in his earnest eyes
Once in a while
is maple lit by harvest moon
autumn is tears and wanton sighs
as I write beneath azure skies
Once in a while
You rarely smile
but delight in november rain
You rarely smile
at discreet tongue and wistful odes
burn with sacchariferous pain
as hand in hand we tread again
You rarely smile
Photo credits: Pinterest
Form: Rondelet
Posted for ‘Sunday Mini-Challenge’ @ Real Toads
and posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United
56 Responses
I LOVE what you did with the form, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I just knew some one would go into multiples. Well Done Sanaa
much love…
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so good to see you ❤️
much love…
And we knew it would be Sanaa! She dun like da short poems.
Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Shay 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️
Wow this is breathtaking Sanaa! You did the form several times perfectly. Just beautiful!!
Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
You really went the extra mile with this. Good flow!
Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Oh this is simply gorgeous – lush and longing and beautiful!
Thank you so much, Pearl 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Wow, What a lovely poem Sanaa, thanks for sharing it with us.
Thank you so much, John 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Yes an interesting form that I must try soon!
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Rajani ❤️
I hope he smiles soon…
Enjoyed your words Sanaa.
Anna :o]
Thank you so much, Anna 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
WOW, Sanaa! I could only manage one. This is wonderful and sad.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Fabulous form & content. So pleasant to read.
Thank you so much, Sumana 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
I’m laughing (quite joyously) because when I finished reading, I let out a huge sigh of acknowledgement. Once in a while, poetry makes us do physical things… and that is a great reason to laugh (with living joy).
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Impressive… you capture the melancholy of the season well….
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I wonder who could bring forth a smile from those unsmiling lips.
😉
The repeated line, in counterpoint, makes this poem so poignant.
Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Well, it made me smile. Love the maple lit by moon and the whole wistful mood.
Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Okay Sanaa… this is just gorgeous! I was right in referring to you as overachiever 🙂
The consistent rhymes throughout this longer piece make your poem read like a song. Which is entirely appropriate for these old French forms. I really want to hear this sung to music. !!!!!
Also… I have a new challenge for you. Try writing a roundel, which is a longer version in the same family as the rondelet. Here is the article from the Garden when we tackled this one: http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2011/08/burned-tongues-and-unfamiliar-waters.html Try it!!
xoxox to you!
Oh gosh! ❤️ Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! ❤️
(The form is absolutely exquisite. I wrote a poem last year 🙂 )
Oh this is wonderful…I love how you carried this form on and on brilliantly!
Thank you so much, Donna 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Oh, this is so beautiful. You worked brilliantly with the form. I so struggle with rhyme. It has me sitting frozen at the computer when I try.
Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Re-reading this as a series of rondelets, I am even more impressed. The repeated lines make it a thing of cohesion and beauty. Well done, kiddo!
Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 I enjoyed writing them!❤️
Gorgeous and you got it right every time!
Thank you so much, Namratha 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Sometimes a person can show their delight by just being there….not necessarily smiling. I like the form of this poem, Sanaa, and also the repetitions.
Thank you so much, Mary 😊 so glad you liked it ❤
Interesting form. You did very well and made it effective.
Thank you so much, ZQ 😊 so good to see you ❤
Wow, I had trouble just coming up with seven lines. Well done, you!
Thank you so much, Other Mary 😊 so glad you liked it ❤
The repetition in this piece is intriguing and compelling. Wonderful work!
Thank you so much, Wendy 😊 so glad you enjoyed it ❤
Using multiples of the rondolet form keeping the same theme works well. Very lyrical. Very creative.
Definitely 😊 thanks for stopping by, Cressida ❤
Absolutely gorgeous, Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Sara 😊 so glad you liked it ❤
The rare smile is often cherished the most!
Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Annell ❤