Of autumn and longing

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Once in a while
sun falls on sugar maple trees
Once in a while
comes soft prayer upon her lips
carried aloft on languid breeze
when poet truly loves and sees
Once in a while

You rarely smile
Β  sometimes it’s hard to understand
You rarely smile
in autumn cold andΒ shortened days
I sought to trace on shifting sand
with hope held in far-stretching hand
You rarely smile

Once in a while
glimpse ardor in his earnest eyes
Once in a while
is maple lit by harvest moon
autumn is tears and wanton sighs
as I write beneath azure skies
Once in a while

You rarely smile
but delight in november rain
You rarely smile
at discreet tongue and wistful odes
burn withΒ sacchariferous pain
as hand in hand we tread again
You rarely smile

 

Photo credits:Β Pinterest

Form: Rondelet

Posted for ‘Sunday Mini-Challenge’ @ Real Toads

and posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. Kerry says:

    I LOVE what you did with the form, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  2. gillena says:

    I just knew some one would go into multiples. Well Done Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

      much love…

    2. Fireblossom says:

      And we knew it would be Sanaa! She dun like da short poems.

      1. Sanaa says:

        Aww gosh!❀️ Thank you so much, Shay πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it!❀️

  3. Wow this is breathtaking Sanaa! You did the form several times perfectly. Just beautiful!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  4. Vivian Zems says:

    You really went the extra mile with this. Good flow!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  5. Pearl says:

    Oh this is simply gorgeous – lush and longing and beautiful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Pearl πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  6. Wow, What a lovely poem Sanaa, thanks for sharing it with us.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, John πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  7. Thotpurge says:

    Yes an interesting form that I must try soon!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Rajani ❀️

  8. Anna :o] says:

    I hope he smiles soon…
    Enjoyed your words Sanaa.
    Anna :o]

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anna πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  9. WOW, Sanaa! I could only manage one. This is wonderful and sad.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  10. Sumana Roy says:

    Fabulous form & content. So pleasant to read.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sumana πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  11. I’m laughing (quite joyously) because when I finished reading, I let out a huge sigh of acknowledgement. Once in a while, poetry makes us do physical things… and that is a great reason to laugh (with living joy).

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  12. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Impressive… you capture the melancholy of the season well….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  13. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    I wonder who could bring forth a smile from those unsmiling lips.

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ˜‰

  14. The repeated line, in counterpoint, makes this poem so poignant.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  15. Well, it made me smile. Love the maple lit by moon and the whole wistful mood.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  16. Marian says:

    Okay Sanaa… this is just gorgeous! I was right in referring to you as overachiever πŸ™‚

    The consistent rhymes throughout this longer piece make your poem read like a song. Which is entirely appropriate for these old French forms. I really want to hear this sung to music. !!!!!

    Also… I have a new challenge for you. Try writing a roundel, which is a longer version in the same family as the rondelet. Here is the article from the Garden when we tackled this one: http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2011/08/burned-tongues-and-unfamiliar-waters.html Try it!!

    xoxox to you!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Oh gosh! ❀️ Thank you so much, Marian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it! ❀️

      (The form is absolutely exquisite. I wrote a poem last year πŸ™‚ )

  17. Oh this is wonderful…I love how you carried this form on and on brilliantly!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Donna πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  18. Oh, this is so beautiful. You worked brilliantly with the form. I so struggle with rhyme. It has me sitting frozen at the computer when I try.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  19. Re-reading this as a series of rondelets, I am even more impressed. The repeated lines make it a thing of cohesion and beauty. Well done, kiddo!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❀️ Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ I enjoyed writing them!❀️

  20. Namratha says:

    Gorgeous and you got it right every time!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Namratha πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  21. Mary says:

    Sometimes a person can show their delight by just being there….not necessarily smiling. I like the form of this poem, Sanaa, and also the repetitions.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  22. ZQ says:

    Interesting form. You did very well and made it effective.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, ZQ 😊 so good to see you ❀

  23. Other Mary says:

    Wow, I had trouble just coming up with seven lines. Well done, you!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Other Mary 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  24. Wendy Bourke says:

    The repetition in this piece is intriguing and compelling. Wonderful work!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy 😊 so glad you enjoyed it ❀

  25. Cressida says:

    Using multiples of the rondolet form keeping the same theme works well. Very lyrical. Very creative.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 😊 thanks for stopping by, Cressida ❀

  26. Sara McNulty says:

    Absolutely gorgeous, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  27. annell4 says:

    The rare smile is often cherished the most!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜€ thanks for stopping by, Annell ❀

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