Memoirs of a Burgeoning Poet

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Do you ever consider what it might be like?
Barefoot, hovering in spaces
between silences
which erase themselves by morningβ€”
I taste an emotion inexplicable,
swirling pink
amidst a bed of brambles and unfamiliar leaves;
the thorns
have a thing or two
to teach.

 

 

 

Photo Credits: Pink beverage by Alex Loup, Unsplash

Posted for Quadrille #108 @dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Lovely words Sanaa, and your reading was wonderful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. S M Connor says:

    Lovely to hear you reading, Sanaa. I like the sudden reminder of the thorns at the end. They do have something to teach us, I guess.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. I love the title, the direct address and question of the opening line, Sanaa, which hooked me immediately. But my favourite lines are:
    β€˜Barefoot, hovering in spaces
    between silences
    which erase themselves by morning’.
    The image you chose has me hankering after blackberry fool!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Jane Dougherty says:

    Very delicate, tripping carefully between the thorns. I like this one!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. This one is a knockout, powerful yet tender; inspiring. As poets we do search through the silence between lines, and I say,”Damn the thorns–full words ahead!”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Absolutely! Full words ahead! Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. msjadeli says:

    Yes, they do. Wonderful to hear you read your poem, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Lucy says:

    Such beautiful and wonderful words here. It’s very delicate and careful like a slow stride on a lone path; it is concise, it is deliberate and I love that feeling I got here when first reading it. This is fantastic. Excellent take on the prompt.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lucy πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. The idea of being barefoot among the brambles, whatever we conceive the brambles to be, really caught my imagination in this poem. Lovely, Saana.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jo-Anne πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. I’ve been there, but wearing long sleeves, jeans and gloves in mother’s blackberry patch behind the barn! Thanks for the memories.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. erbiage says:

    oh they sure do! they sure do. but the berries teach too.

    and if you eat them all in the field, there won’t be enough for a pie…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Eric πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  11. Words on a screen; words in one’s ear. No matter; either way, great words. Well done Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ron πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. gillena says:

    Lovely beyond words, Sanaa

    MuchπŸ‡love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

      MuchπŸ’πŸ“love

  13. kate says:

    lovely to hear your voice Sanaa, this says so much!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kate πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. I like this. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  15. Dwight Roth says:

    Beautiful images and emotions swirling in this poem. From dreams to thorns … we all have a lot to learn!
    Dwight

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  16. lynn__ says:

    Fabulous word-smithing, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lynn πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  17. Christine says:

    Whatever those brambles may be, they do hurt!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Absolutely! Thanks for stopping by, Christine πŸ’„β€οΈ

  18. Peter says:

    ‘the thorns / have a thing or two to teach’ is a great concluding line. Reminds me of being stabbed twice and again by the same thorn – and thinking it wouldn’t dare strike again. Ha.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Peter πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  19. Ken Gierke says:

    There’s a lesson in every moment, and this captures that well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ken πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  20. Bill says:

    Lovely poem, well written and read.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  21. Vivian Zems says:

    I love the idea of a silence that erases itself!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  22. Sara McNulty says:

    “hovering in spaces between silences”

    Brilliant work, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  23. oooooh. this is so beautiful and deep, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosamarie πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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