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Just when she considered it futile to stay;
The white owl lone in the belfry sits.
You say I love not; cause I do not play
This game can make one lose their wits.
But try love just once to see how it fits;
I await your consent for a plautine comedy.

So soon after letter her woe to elation flits;
Knowing not love laced with odious tragedy.
That death would choose with wondering eye;
With scorn so pompous it mocked the smart.
With grief she heard him shout and cry;
Oh, swear that never was false of heart.

With trembling lips she uttered a moan;
Bent low upon a grave of emerald stone.

 

 

Photo credits: favim.com

Form: Sonnet

Posted for Meeting the Bar @ dVerse Pub

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Posted on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads

& on Monday Writes @ My Blog – Verses

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Comments

  1. Love lost, emotions going down hard, where the cemetery trumps the honeymoon cottage; so sad, yet a clever use of the prompt words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Glenn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  2. ShirleyB says:

    Eloquent use of the given words, Sanaa. Beautifully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Shirley,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  3. Candy says:

    Oh how mournful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Candy,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  4. Mary says:

    Ah, I knew you would be one who would really make this challenge dance! There is so much to be said about love and loss.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Mary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  5. I love the imagery you bring in…rich with the white owl opening and green emerald closing!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hannah,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  6. Grace says:

    That ending couplet is so tragic, yet wonderful done to tell the tale of lost love~

    Enjoyed this one Sanaa ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Grace,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  7. Anna :o] says:

    Love is a wild mix of emotions, of sadness and joy.
    Anna :o]

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Anna,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  8. Amazing invention. I don’t want to discourage you from poetry – far from it; I love to see your adventures in this realm – but I suggest you would also do very well at fiction. (Perhaps this is not a new idea to you?)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Rosemary,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

      PS: That’s a great idea πŸ™‚

  9. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    Beautifully done, Sanaa. Love seems to bring us as much tragedy as it does joy.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gayle,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  10. Victoria says:

    I like where you took this, Sanaa, and given the swings of emotion in love the words fit.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  11. Bjorn says:

    So sad when it ends like at a grave… There is not really any way to turn back.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bjorn,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  12. Bravo for a courageous and emotional bouts-rimes.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Vivienne,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  13. Using the owl as symbol here is significant. I think they’re amazing birds and maybe don’t deserve the connotations humans attach to them. Well written and very sad.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Petru,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  14. You’ve done such a great job at portraying the grief that drowns the soul when love is lost (to death or to the bad judgement of another). The words are loud with hurt and tears.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Magaly,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  15. This is a sad game of love, indeed. That last line is perfect.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Linda,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  16. You’ve woven the words flawlessly, Sanaa! I’ve enjoyed the flow of this poem. Thank you for sharing it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Walter,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  17. But try love just once to see how it fits;
    I await your consent for a plautine comedy.

    If only one can be given a chance. In love pleadings are expected in many instances!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Hank,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  18. lillian says:

    I love this poem and the photo you’ve chosen to accompany it. “With scorn so pompous it mocked the smart.” This is one of my favorite lines….and the final couplet is especially beautiful!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Lillian,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  19. radio head says:

    Jeez, Sanaa. Every poem of yours I read is better than the last. Your talent is exploding!

    “The white owl lone in the belfry sits.
    You say I love not; cause I do not play
    This game can make one lose their wits.” … I love this. White owls are SO gorgeous and magical. I wish I had one. πŸ™‚ Better yet, I wish I were one!

    Insanely good ending, sweetie:
    “With trembling lips she uttered a moan;
    Bent low upon a grave of emerald stone.”

    I really love this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello radiohead

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  20. gillena says:

    oh this is so sad, yet so sweetly written, a most beautiful sonnet Sanaa, thanks for sharing at Monday Writes today

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Gillena,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  21. Bryan Ens says:

    The story of love and loss is well told in this piece.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Bryan,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  22. Sara McNulty says:

    This is a rollercoaster love story. Beautiful sonnet, with a perfect ending.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Sara,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, lots of love πŸ˜€
      xoxo

  23. Green.. slab.. now..
    iN concrete ‘bove..
    SpRing FloWeRs..
    root out oF
    memory
    wHole..
    Love
    SinGs
    a sweet
    refRain..
    Love’s eYes
    feeL no death Of LiFe..:)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Hello Katie,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it πŸ™‚
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

  24. Thotpurge says:

    Try love to see how it fits.. though I suppose it is love that will try you in the end!! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜€ thanks for stopping by, Rajani ❀️

  25. I can’t believe I haven’t read this one before or commented on it, Sanaa. I’m sure I posted on OLN that day. Never mind, I can do it now! You’ve captured the pain of lost love in this poem and I love the metaphor of the lone owl in the belfry – the ‘ow’ sound is evocative of pain, as is the word ‘woe’ in a later line. How true, the game of love can make one lose their wits.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  26. Kerry says:

    I love the colours – the white owl, the emerald stone.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  27. gillena says:

    Reading again your sonnet today and again enjoying your craft

    Happy Tuesday to you

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

      Happy Tuesday to you too

      much love…

  28. The loss is thick in this one, the sadness in those trembling lips, the tone of the whole poem… such grief.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  29. Vivian Zems says:

    Beautiful words you used to create these sad haunting images. Bravo!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  30. Bjorn says:

    The tragedy of a love affair has the beauty that only words can bring… Romeo and Juliet taught us that.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜€ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn ❀️

  31. A tragic tale, so well told.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  32. Love, it can be so tragic. Your poem is so visual, subtle visions of purity and perhaps the green of jealousy that love can be at peace in death while life must relive its passing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

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