Loitering at Dusk

Dusk, it’s said, is a quiet type of chaos
one that seeps into the flesh, achingly sweet
with moments of what could almost be pathos,
I stop and savor, can almost hear its beat—
the sky blushes and leaps forward and across,
I sought to follow, journey through its dark heat,
I care not for despair, for shadows and loss,
for they will soon withdraw with opposing feet.
And now hues melt in waters, come, let them be,
I’ve drunk from its cup, it’s more cheerful than tea;
what delectable charm it has put on me?

 

 

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Grace hosts at dVerse and invites us to try a new poetic form known
as “The Eleventh Power.”
Come join us! ❤️

Posted for Poetry Form: The Eleventh Power @dVerse Poets Pub

 

22 thoughts on “Loitering at Dusk

  1. Grace says:

    Love the sweet, charming tone, and yes, the mood is cheerful despite the shadows and loss. I will drink from its cup too. Hats off to following the poetic form as you made this look effortless Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt)

  2. Linda Lee Lyberg says:

    Stunning and as always, deftly done.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  3. Jane Dougherty says:

    You managed to keep a rhythm going with this. Difficult with eleven syllables! Well done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  4. ain says:

    Sanaa….this one…this one must read aloud by someone. I might have said it before, but this was a joy to read, for its musky, toying cadence, style (loads) and playfulness, while managing to attract those who enjoy high culture etched in poetry.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh! Thank you so much, Ain 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  5. Lauren says:

    This was wonderful to read. Thank you for sharing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lauren 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

  6. msjadeli says:

    I can see you there, walking along with these thoughts. I know you pass shady areas but you’re focused on the bright areas. Beautiful poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lisa 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  7. This is a great form for you, and I love this poem. I’ve been struggling with it. I get too caught up in counting syllables and lose all sense.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Xan 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  8. Kerfe says:

    You’ve engaged all of our senses with your words. I especially like the hues melting in waters.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerfe 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  9. Punam says:

    Let’s all drink from this cup! Such a beautiful and exquisite write, Sanaa. 💖💖

    1. Sanaa says:

      Cheers! Thank you so much, Punam 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  10. Paul Cannon says:

    I so love the freedom this speaks of and into, and love the movement.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  11. anotherKate says:

    This is so lovely! And so seamlessly crafted.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh! Thank you so much, Kate 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

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