Late November

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Read this one slowly;              
tranquil on the water scene,    
reeds and pond bulrushes,
feelings washed— the black sky  
sweeping down echoes what is left.

 

 

 

Photo credits: Marta Bevacqua, Drifting down to the ground

Grace hosts at dVerse and invites us to try a new poetic form
known as “The Wayra.” Come join us! 💝

Posted for Poetry Form: Wayra @dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I like the ending a lot… the end with those echoes being what is left… just like November… I think we had the same perspective in our poems.

    1. Sanaa says:

      We most certainly did! Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  2. Grace says:

    I read this slowly and felt the emotional ebbing underneath. That black sky with echoes of what is left is heavy with symbolism.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  3. That echo resonates, Sanaa! So much feeling in this. (Of course.) 😀❤️

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Merril 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  4. Dark and delicious, winter as a wench, her tresses a trap, her embrace lethal, and November is a hostess, seducing us with a smile that hides the fangs to come.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! Winter’s embrace is undoubtedly lethal 💄❤️

  5. calmkate says:

    a gentle journey into the obliteration of winter … nicely done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kate 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  6. Mary Hood says:

    I love the last line…and I read it slowly.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  7. Ain Starlingsson says:

    Leads up to the powerful ending that hoes deeper after the first read — very powerful indeed..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ain 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  8. The black sky sweeping down…Perfect imagery, SR.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ron 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  9. Dora says:

    Sanaa,
    I read it slowly and again and again. Just too good, the Ophelia-like voice and despond.
    pax,
    dora

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dora 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  10. I really like the way the opening line sets the stage for the mystery to come.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Alicia 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  11. The last line was so poignant Sanaa. Beautifully done ☺️💕

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Christine 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

  12. Jane Dougherty says:

    The poem seems to pivot (for me) on the word ‘black’. I enjoyed this one.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  13. read this second time and the effect you made from the first to the last lines are just breathtaking. a great nod to the form, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemarie 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  14. Marion Horton says:

    Felt a slow sinking into the winter ahead – so beautifully written.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marion 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

  15. I like the instructional opening line – a quirky nod to the mood. Creates pace, in a short piece. Also, I love the idea of echos sweeping down. Wonderful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Darius 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️

  16. Punam says:

    Love the stillness of the opening lines and then the dark sky sweeping down! 💞💞

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Punam 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️

  17. Kerfe says:

    I like especially the image of the black sky sweeping the water.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerfe 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️

  18. Gillena Cox says:

    Tha end image draws us in to all the feelings expressed before.

    Much💛love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

      Much love back ..

  19. Helen says:

    What a great opening line … I could feel my heart rate slowing!!!! Cheers, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen 😀 so glad you enjoyed it! Cheers 💄❤️

  20. Jim Feeney says:

    Excellent use of the form, Sanaa, haunting and mysterious..JIM

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