Life, it’s said is as though a paper white,
in which the heart is full,
where duskier lips await the long night–
to prove it’s beautiful.
And fate, is described to be softly round,
oh, I wish to run, slide–
have my thoughts attain significant ground–
to be sharp and lynx-eyed,
I laugh, for life is a perfect storm too!
I wish to express most
ardently—to blossom and burn in blue
lest I become a ghost.
Oh life! With its dark and delicious heat,
says we can have it all–
drown despair into sea, now isn’t that sweet?
I trust; but rain must fall.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Laura is our lovely hostess at dVerse tonight, where she invites us to write
by borrowing end rhymes from a published poem.
I chose to employ a syllabic alternate rhyme pattern poem of 10/6 in reply
to Full-Blown by Marion Strobel 💘
Posted for MTB: Four-line alternate rhyme scheme @dVerse Pub
I enjoyed your reply to Marion Strobel, Sanaa! Your use of punctuation is very effective, as are the following lines:
‘…, I wish to run, slide–
have my thoughts attain significant ground–
to be sharp and lynx-eyed’.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Sanaa you did wonders with Strobel’s rhymes- the syllabic count gave a different sound but so too the theme of this poem – Life, Fate and the poet’s wishes pushing against it so sensuously
“where duskier lips await the long night–
to prove it’s beautiful. “
Awww gosh! Thank you so much, Laura 😍 so glad you liked it! 💄❤️
(and thank you for the lovely prompt) 🌹
Wonderful philosophy to know that, despite rain falling, we *can* have it all. Very enjoyable read, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Lisa 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
“drown despair into sea, now isn’t that sweet?
I trust; but rain must fall.”
Were we to experience only happiness. Maybe still there would be tears, for what is a human without a tear.
Much💖love
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad the poem and its imagery appealed to you 💄❤️
A beautiful write, Sanaa. You created very interesting contrasts with the end rhymes of Strobel. Love it. ❤️❤️
Thank you so much, Punam 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Amazing and so beautiful! Btw I’ve chosen the same poem for the end rhymes too.
Thank you so much, Jay 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
I love that ending. The poem works really well – the rhyming doesn’t show through, if you know what I mean!
Thank you so much, Sarah 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
I really like the idea of lynx-eyed thoughts.
Thank you so much, Kerfe 😀 so glad you liked it! 💄❤️