His Scent
Sanaa -
June 16, 2020
Earlier PoemsPoetry

Now that I have breathed in you,
my senses
no longer respond to any other sound or scent;
blatant berries complain,
blushing furiously outside—I am not sure
what it is about you that beguiles
only that
there is distinct drumming inside my temples.

 

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted for Quadrille Night #106 @ dVerse Poets Pub

and on Writers’ Pantry @ Poets and Storytellers United

68 Responses

  1. Frank Hubeny says:
    June 16, 2020 at 5:24 am

    I like those complaining berries “blushing furiously” outside.

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  2. msjadeli says:
    June 16, 2020 at 5:58 am

    Good description of obsession!

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  3. Glenn Buttkus says:
    June 16, 2020 at 6:07 am

    Being “in lust” can be all encompassing, overpowering, even inexorable. Hormones explode and intellect is beat back like a bad dog.

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  4. Mish says:
    June 16, 2020 at 6:08 am

    The passion is palpable!

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  5. Linda Lee Lyberg says:
    June 16, 2020 at 6:17 am

    Your passion is so expertly wrought in these few lines Sanaa.

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  6. Dykstra-Brown says:
    June 16, 2020 at 6:35 am

    I love the double meaning of “breathed in you.”

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  7. Revived Writer says:
    June 16, 2020 at 8:42 am

    Beautiful and passionate!

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  8. Dwight L. Roth says:
    June 16, 2020 at 9:40 am

    Very nicely done! Love the photo that fits so well with your poem.

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  9. Kerfe says:
    June 16, 2020 at 9:42 am

    Love can be intense.

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  10. gillena says:
    June 16, 2020 at 10:45 am

    Nicely done Sanaa, sounds like a hopless obsession, passionate and romantic
    I am #17 on the linky😊
    Much💖love

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  11. Ron. Lavalette says:
    June 16, 2020 at 11:22 am

    heartbeat headshot. Yes.

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  12. Jane Dougherty says:
    June 16, 2020 at 3:24 pm

    The brevity of the form suits the sentiments. To have expanded the idea would have spoiled the effect.

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  13. kate says:
    June 16, 2020 at 3:59 pm

    delightfully executed … a brief taste of romance and passion !

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  14. Kim M. Russell says:
    June 16, 2020 at 5:53 pm

    You’ve captured the kind of passion that is all consuming, Sanaa! I like the ambiguity of ‘there is distinct drumming inside my temples’ – could be nerves but I think it’s a temple of adoration.

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  15. Bjorn Rudberg says:
    June 17, 2020 at 3:41 am

    Once the drum starts beating like that you have to give in to passion.

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  16. barbara says:
    June 17, 2020 at 4:42 am

    When you find the just right ‘one’, all others fall away and your heart beats just for them. Beautiful poem! 🙂

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  17. Vivian Zems says:
    June 17, 2020 at 6:41 am

    That is either love or lust…who knows? Lovely write

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  18. Jo-Anne Teal says:
    June 17, 2020 at 9:23 am

    Blushing, berries, beguilement – I agree with Mish’s comment. The passion is palpable! Loved that you included a moment of colour as it brought the image to life.

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  19. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:
    June 21, 2020 at 7:25 am

    Deliciously romantic! I agree that the brevity of this piece works perfectly.

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  20. Thotpurge says:
    June 21, 2020 at 12:45 pm

    apt image of blushing berries.

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  21. Old Egg says:
    June 21, 2020 at 2:59 pm

    Herer was I thinking the berries couldn’t see yet they blushed sensing what you were doing. What a delightful poem Sanaa.

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  22. vandana says:
    June 21, 2020 at 3:23 pm

    The scent of love !

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  23. dsnake1 says:
    June 21, 2020 at 4:40 pm

    so passion can turn one into quivering jello. 😁
    love this short poem!

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  24. gillena says:
    June 21, 2020 at 5:08 pm

    Happy Sunday Sanaa

    much love…

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  25. Chrissa says:
    June 21, 2020 at 9:03 pm

    Love the way the verse echoes that stark image and the sense of being overwhelmed.

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  26. Joel (@Stranded Tree) says:
    June 21, 2020 at 9:24 pm

    An extension of the “breath of life” of giving into someone along with someone being a part of you as the heartbeat “drumming” on one’s temples.

    The scent can last a lifetime, can it not?

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  27. Bev Crawford says:
    June 21, 2020 at 11:38 pm

    There’s no explaining instant attraction and the flush f first love! Beautifully crafted poem!bev

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  28. Helen says:
    June 21, 2020 at 11:58 pm

    Breathing ‘inside’ another is provocative and wonderfully life affirming.

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  29. Colleen LOOSELEAFNOTES says:
    June 22, 2020 at 12:25 am

    Scent is a big and hormonal part of attraction! You described that kind of intoxication well.

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  30. Magaly Guerrero says:
    June 22, 2020 at 12:44 am

    Some scents (and the people attached to them) once experienced stay with us, don’t they? And their existence seems to reshape everything that follows.

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  31. Namratha Varadharajan says:
    June 22, 2020 at 12:57 am

    Enchanting words Sanaa. Loved how impactful that is in so few words

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  32. Magical Mystical Teacher says:
    June 22, 2020 at 1:47 am

    After all that bathing you’re still not sure? Hmm…

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  33. Audrey M Howitt says:
    June 22, 2020 at 4:23 am

    I love the bushing berries! Chemistry may not be everything, but it sure helps!

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  34. Humblekind Poet says:
    June 22, 2020 at 8:54 pm

    Yes, i agree with others about obsession. Great write!

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