Now that I have breathed in you,
my senses
no longer respond to any other sound or scent;
blatant berries complain,
blushing furiously outside—I am not sure
what it is about you that beguiles
only that
there is distinct drumming inside my temples.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Posted for Quadrille Night #106 @ dVerse Poets Pub
and on Writers’ Pantry @ Poets and Storytellers United
I like those complaining berries “blushing furiously” outside.
Thank you so much, Frank 🙂 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Good description of obsession!
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Being “in lust” can be all encompassing, overpowering, even inexorable. Hormones explode and intellect is beat back like a bad dog.
Thank you so much, Glenn 🙂 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
The passion is palpable!
Thank you so much, Mish 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Your passion is so expertly wrought in these few lines Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Linda 😍 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
I love the double meaning of “breathed in you.”
Thank you so much, Judy 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Beautiful and passionate!
Thank you so much, Jenna 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Very nicely done! Love the photo that fits so well with your poem.
Thank you so much, Dwight 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Love can be intense.
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Nicely done Sanaa, sounds like a hopless obsession, passionate and romantic
I am #17 on the linky😊
Much💖love
Thank you so much, Gillena 🙂 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Much love …
heartbeat headshot. Yes.
Thank you so much, Ron 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
The brevity of the form suits the sentiments. To have expanded the idea would have spoiled the effect.
Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
delightfully executed … a brief taste of romance and passion !
Thank you so much, Kate 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
You’ve captured the kind of passion that is all consuming, Sanaa! I like the ambiguity of ‘there is distinct drumming inside my temples’ – could be nerves but I think it’s a temple of adoration.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Once the drum starts beating like that you have to give in to passion.
Absolutely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Bjorn 💄❤️
When you find the just right ‘one’, all others fall away and your heart beats just for them. Beautiful poem! 🙂
Thank you so much, Barbara 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
That is either love or lust…who knows? Lovely write
Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Blushing, berries, beguilement – I agree with Mish’s comment. The passion is palpable! Loved that you included a moment of colour as it brought the image to life.
Thank you so much, Jo-Anne 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Deliciously romantic! I agree that the brevity of this piece works perfectly.
Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
apt image of blushing berries.
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Herer was I thinking the berries couldn’t see yet they blushed sensing what you were doing. What a delightful poem Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Robin 🙂 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
The scent of love !
Definitely 😉 thanks for stopping by, Vandana 💄❤️
so passion can turn one into quivering jello. 😁
love this short poem!
Thank you so much, Lee San 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Happy Sunday Sanaa
much love…
Happy Sunday, Gillena 🙂
Much love …
Love the way the verse echoes that stark image and the sense of being overwhelmed.
Thank you so much, Chrissa 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
An extension of the “breath of life” of giving into someone along with someone being a part of you as the heartbeat “drumming” on one’s temples.
The scent can last a lifetime, can it not?
Absolutely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Joel 💄❤️
There’s no explaining instant attraction and the flush f first love! Beautifully crafted poem!bev
Thank you so much, Beverly 🙂 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Breathing ‘inside’ another is provocative and wonderfully life affirming.
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Scent is a big and hormonal part of attraction! You described that kind of intoxication well.
Thank you so much, Colleen 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Some scents (and the people attached to them) once experienced stay with us, don’t they? And their existence seems to reshape everything that follows.
Thank you so much, Magaly 🙂 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Enchanting words Sanaa. Loved how impactful that is in so few words
Thank you so much, Namratha 🙂 so good to see you 💄❤️
After all that bathing you’re still not sure? Hmm…
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I love the bushing berries! Chemistry may not be everything, but it sure helps!
Thank you so much, Audrey 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Yes, i agree with others about obsession. Great write!
Thank you so much, Humblekind Poet 🙂 so glad you liked it 💄❤️