His Scent

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Now that I have breathed in you,
my senses
no longer respond to any other sound or scent;
blatant berries complain,
blushing furiously outsideβ€”I am not sure
what it is about you that beguiles

only that
there is distinct drumming inside my temples.

 

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted for Quadrille Night #106 @ dVerse Poets Pub

and on Writers’ Pantry @ Poets and Storytellers United

Comments

  1. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like those complaining berries “blushing furiously” outside.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. msjadeli says:

    Good description of obsession!

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ˜‰

  3. Being “in lust” can be all encompassing, overpowering, even inexorable. Hormones explode and intellect is beat back like a bad dog.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. Mish says:

    The passion is palpable!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mish πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. Your passion is so expertly wrought in these few lines Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda 😍 so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. I love the double meaning of “breathed in you.”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Judy πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Beautiful and passionate!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jenna πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. Very nicely done! Love the photo that fits so well with your poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. Kerfe says:

    Love can be intense.

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ˜‰

  10. gillena says:

    Nicely done Sanaa, sounds like a hopless obsession, passionate and romantic
    I am #17 on the linky😊
    MuchπŸ’–love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

      Much love …

  11. heartbeat headshot. Yes.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ron πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Jane Dougherty says:

    The brevity of the form suits the sentiments. To have expanded the idea would have spoiled the effect.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. kate says:

    delightfully executed … a brief taste of romance and passion !

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kate πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. You’ve captured the kind of passion that is all consuming, Sanaa! I like the ambiguity of β€˜there is distinct drumming inside my temples’ – could be nerves but I think it’s a temple of adoration.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  15. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Once the drum starts beating like that you have to give in to passion.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Absolutely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn πŸ’„β€οΈ

  16. barbara says:

    When you find the just right ‘one’, all others fall away and your heart beats just for them. Beautiful poem! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barbara πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  17. Vivian Zems says:

    That is either love or lust…who knows? Lovely write

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  18. Jo-Anne Teal says:

    Blushing, berries, beguilement – I agree with Mish’s comment. The passion is palpable! Loved that you included a moment of colour as it brought the image to life.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jo-Anne πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  19. Deliciously romantic! I agree that the brevity of this piece works perfectly.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  20. Thotpurge says:

    apt image of blushing berries.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  21. Old Egg says:

    Herer was I thinking the berries couldn’t see yet they blushed sensing what you were doing. What a delightful poem Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robin πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  22. vandana says:

    The scent of love !

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜‰ thanks for stopping by, Vandana πŸ’„β€οΈ

  23. dsnake1 says:

    so passion can turn one into quivering jello. 😁
    love this short poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lee San πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  24. gillena says:

    Happy Sunday Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Happy Sunday, Gillena πŸ™‚

      Much love …

  25. Chrissa says:

    Love the way the verse echoes that stark image and the sense of being overwhelmed.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chrissa πŸ™‚ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  26. An extension of the “breath of life” of giving into someone along with someone being a part of you as the heartbeat “drumming” on one’s temples.

    The scent can last a lifetime, can it not?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Absolutely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Joel πŸ’„β€οΈ

  27. Bev Crawford says:

    There’s no explaining instant attraction and the flush f first love! Beautifully crafted poem!bev

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  28. Helen says:

    Breathing ‘inside’ another is provocative and wonderfully life affirming.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  29. Scent is a big and hormonal part of attraction! You described that kind of intoxication well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  30. Some scents (and the people attached to them) once experienced stay with us, don’t they? And their existence seems to reshape everything that follows.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  31. Enchanting words Sanaa. Loved how impactful that is in so few words

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Namratha πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  32. After all that bathing you’re still not sure? Hmm…

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ˜›

  33. I love the bushing berries! Chemistry may not be everything, but it sure helps!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Audrey πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  34. Yes, i agree with others about obsession. Great write!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Humblekind Poet πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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