It’s a dangerous fruit;
scarlet in its ambidexterity and artfulness,
itching for something more than just the dubious existence
of concentric circles
reified as verbal constructs—here words rain over heads
stroking limbs
and rodents burrow their way into surreptitious sand;
do you see where I am going with this?
Like spiders who poise upon their prey on webs,
if I steal your innocence
I will do my best to replace it with something beautiful.
I am responsible for crafting your experience with me,
the landscape may feel as though it’s shifting underneath,
calloused fingertips tracing along smooth,
slightly unassuming contour;
they navigate the whispers of yearning, unsweetened
taste of the ocean—
sin does not nourish me nor carnality
duplicate the feeling of one having met its match,
dark like a true beginning;
I am Hades desiring you in the Underworld. I don’t compromise.
Photo credits: Angela Faustina “pomegranate,” XXI, 2015
Skylover Wordlist: Scarlet, Concentric, Rodent, Surreptitious, Spider,Reify, Poised 💝
Posted for Open Link Night #285 @ dVerse Poets Pub
I love how you started with the fruit which to me felt like the serpent in paradise… and I assume Hades is just another face of the snake… i love darkness and desire.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Eloquently told. I especially liked “if I steal your innocence
I will do my best to replace it with something beautiful.”
Thank you so much, Ron 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
I love the strong narrative voice of this poem, Sanaa, and the way you take the driver’s seat with the lines:
‘if I steal your innocence
I will do my best to replace it with something beautiful.
I am responsible for crafting your experience with me,’
Then the fantastic ending line:
‘I am Hades desiring you in the Underworld. I don’t compromise.’
I love it!
Thank you so much, Ingrid 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
I love that you wrote from the point of view of Hades, Sanaa, and that the scarlet fruit lived up to its colour with its ‘ambidexterity and artfulness’. My favourite phrase is the ‘dubious existence of concentric circles’ – we do seem to be going round in circles currently – and my favourite lines are:
‘sin does not nourish me nor carnality
duplicate the feeling of one having met its match,
dark like a true beginning;
I am Hades desiring you in the Underworld. I don’t compromise.’
I don’t doubt it!
Awww gosh! Thank you so much, my dearest Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
Sanaa, just like the pomegranate, there are so many twists and turns in this poem. It’s luscious and beautiful, like the juicy red fruit.
Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Coincidence: I’d just sat down with a Pomegranate, clicked this open and BLAMMO! Total freak out! I would have enjoyed the fruit no matter what I was reading, but THIS magnified the experience by about a million. Great work Sanaa!
Thank you soo much, Ron 😀 you are always so generous with your praise. I am glad you enjoyed it! 💄❤️
You are woman, and you roar just fine. What I liked about this was the directness and strength and honesty, with out a whiff of being a victim. And the darkness was delicious and very erotic.
Thank you soo much, Glenn 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️ As always your appreciation and support shines through in your comments. It means a lot to me. Thank you!!
You set the stage well with its fruit of‘ambidexterity and artfulness’. No wonder the journey follows the path of Hades
Skillful crafting.
Happy Thursday
Much💜love
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so good to see you 💄❤️
Much love back …
Sanaa! Wow! This might be my favorite poem of yours. You got me with the first two lines, and then carried me through. “I don’t compromise.” ❤️
Thank you so much, my dearest Merril 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
I like the idea, to “navigate the whispers of yearning” Juicy but in the most refreshing way, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Lisa 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
“itching for something more than just the dubious existence
of concentric circles
reified as verbal constructs”
Aren’t we all! I like the sinister tone here, Sanaa, and the word web you weave!
JIM
Thank you so much, Jim 🙂 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
Oh Sanaa this was an exciting poem! The use of the cherry was perfect for someone about to maybe lose their innocence to the devil and his slick words of excuse. Breathtaking! 🥰
Thank you so much, Christine 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
“dark like a true beginning” made me smile! The poem was delicious and stirred the senses and mind. 🔥
Thank you so much, Tricia 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️
Sanaa, this is something beyond clever.
You know, when I read your poems, I wonder – does she speak like this? Because I just love your word choices – I wonder if hearing you speak is like listening to music.
-David
Thank you so much, David 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️
this is bold zany and sensual … love your use of words … a fascinating bowl of fruit!
❤️❤️❤️
WOW! <3
Thank you so much, Jenna 😀 so glad you enjoyed it 💄❤️
I am echoing the lines that several others were drawn to…
“‘if I steal your innocence
I will do my best to replace it with something beautiful.”
Thanks for sharing, Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Alicia 😀 so glad you liked it 💄❤️