Don’t Tell The World You’re Waiting

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Clean hands undulate an unsightly place,
as beautiful night beholds a shapely thing
in order that elegant group makes long study.

While a gorgeous home feels plain at times,
a drab day bursts before an unkempt world
even though dazzling job makes stocky people.

Fancy coffee feels as though a magnificent thing,
as long as
glamorous life slays long problems
so that bald facts arise shortly after a year.

 

 

Photo credits: Hummingbird Bakery, Alien Ted, Flickr

Posted on Exquisite Corpse Solitaire @ Real Toads

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Comments

  1. Fancy coffee (and all sorts of coffee) is a magnificent thing, indeed.

    P.S. You were not supposed to break the groups, leaving them unbroken is seeing what comes up is part of the fun. But… since this one seems to be more difficult to play with than I thought it would be, I shan’t say a thing. Oops! I said it.

    Thank you so much for playing (and for coffee!).

    1. Sanaa says:

      (Oops! Line breaks are kinda habitual for me) Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt) 🌹

      1. I love the look and feel of the poem after the omission of the line breaks. The first two lines are particularly powerful this way, one can’t help wondering about those unsightly places and shapely things. And the thought of a glamorous life slaying problems made me laugh aloud.

        Yum!

        1. Sanaa says:

          ❀️❀️❀️❀️

  2. Mary says:

    Ha, I think I would settle for that ‘gorgeous home’ even if it was a bit plain! Smiles. What a fun way to write poetry as I mentioned to Magaly.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  3. Oh, I so adore this! It makes a wonderful kind of nonsensical sense.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww gosh! ❀️ Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it! ❀️

  4. Lori says:

    On a drab day those fancy coffees really are divine. Sometimes it’s the little things.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜€ thanks for stopping by, Lori ❀️

  5. Rommy says:

    A gorgeous home feeling plain makes me think of people who are so busy keeping up with the Joneses (or worse, the Kardashians) that they don’t see how they’ve given up their sense of beauty to the whims of someone else.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rommy πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you ❀️

  6. Jae Rose says:

    Wonderful poem so full of life

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  7. Wow, yours actually makes sense. Lol. A fun exercise, and you did well with it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  8. Thotpurge says:

    a drab day bursts before an unkempt world… all very sad and moody this feels….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Rajani ❀️

  9. Old Egg says:

    I too liked how you made some sense of this form Sanaa. Seeing the rules I was glad that I avoided it this time as it looked as though you were all torturing yourselves!

    1. Sanaa says:

      (Yes, it was rather difficult! But I am glad I did it!) Thank you so much, Robin πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  10. scott hastie says:

    I think the struggle with this structure has brought out more ambition in your work here, Sanaa – liking the juxtapositions here…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Scott πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  11. Chrissa says:

    This is a dance of a poem! Love the title and the way the contrasts slink through the lines. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chrissa πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  12. gillena says:

    “as beautiful night beholds a shapely thing”
    Luv this line for its promise. Moon, romance, and the aesthetic of poetry, as words shape dreams and fantasies.
    Happy Sunday. Thanks for dropping by my sumie Sunday today Sanaa

    Muchβ€πŸ•Šβ€love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

      Much🌹🌻🌷love

  13. Helen says:

    Love the way you were able to string the words together! Brava.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Helen πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  14. Susan says:

    I long for bald facts over fancy coffee!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜€ thanks for stopping by, Susan ❀️

  15. Time to partake in it all!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  16. Margaret says:

    Interesting images even though a bit jumbled… this was a hard prompt for me to do.

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ™‚

  17. Wendy Bourke says:

    Love it! What a fun – and very cool – way, for writer’s to explore perspective and interpretation. And yes, it does make a strange sort of sense of the nonsensical.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  18. kaykuala h says:

    as long as glamorous life slays long problems
    so that bald facts arise shortly after a year.

    One is not short of being impacted by and from any direction that causes sorrow. It is consequential after a time that makes it an item to be addressed more fairly later. One is normally allowed the luxury of repentance at a later stage when circumstances are less heated

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Hank ❀️

  19. Ella Wilson says:

    The play on bitter and sweet so the bald view can be seen…..is vivid and real~
    Well Done!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ella πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  20. Kerry says:

    Wow! I am amazed how well this poem worked out. Such intriguing combinations.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  21. Sara McNulty says:

    Loved these, Sanaa. That last line was my favorite. Splendid work!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  22. Sameera Chaudhary says:

    ‘Fancy coffee feels as though a magnificent thing,
    as long asΒ glamorous life slays long problems’

    Wowww!! Love the way you worked out the word combinations here πŸ’™πŸ’™

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sameera πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  23. Jane Seymour says:

    On a drab day those fancy coffees really are a boost for the soul!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Most definitely πŸ˜‰ thanks for stopping by, Jane ❀️

  24. Chris Evans says:

    What a fun way to write poetry, Sanaa. I think the struggle with this structure truly brought out the best in you!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chris πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

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