Chaste Moon ~ Part one: Lost between the intricate mesh

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Cream-colored, the sky sheds remnants of what the moon endured
let the clouds cry
their tears, a boon for the fiery ground belowβ€”
the breath of the green hills slowed one night
as trees with falling leaves escape from distaste,
what have they done to us?
It crushes into soft red lips, devouring what is left of piety
how we start is only part of what we eventually doβ€”
fragrant
the daffodils witness rhetorical lies.
I listen to whispers of coming decades,
watch as pollen drips into the abyss of death’s dark dreams;
what have they done to us?

 

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

A Skylover Wordlist: Fragrant, ground,
listen, cream, escape πŸ’

Posted for the Writers’ Pantry @ Poets and Storytellers United

Comments

  1. Rommy says:

    Humans are so horribly short-sighted sometimes.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Rommy πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. What indeed? A heart-rending cry!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

    2. It is the repetition of the question (“What have they done to us? “) that gives power and poignancy to this poem.

  3. Thotpurge says:

    Some lovely images there, Sanaa. What the moon endured is very vivid indeed!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  4. The opening lines of this poem are so beautiful, Sanaa, especially β€˜the sky sheds remnants of what the moon endured’, and β€˜the breath of the green hills slowed one night’ makes me sad. The final lines are ominous.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. Old Egg says:

    What have we done to ourselves, in fact? Sadly we accept the little gains yet are blind the damage our greed can cause both at home and elswhere on Earth.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Absolutely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Robin πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. Beautiful words for a frightening end. I sometimes think we’re the only wild animals on the planet.
    keyudos

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anthony πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. “What have they done to us?” This is a burning question not only for Mother Earth to lament but humankind pause, look around and ask ourselves the same question. A sad and thought-provoking piece, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Khaya πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. Ron. says:

    Simultaneously timely and timeless. Clearly, though, we’re running out of time. Fine work, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ron πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    What have they done to us… what a powerful ending. I often wonder too.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. gillena says:

    A strange dystopian tale as only you can tell it poetess
    Happy Sunday

    (βœΏβ— β€Ώβ— )
    much love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

      Much love …

  11. Cressida says:

    Ominous and prescient…. all is not well in the garden.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Cressida πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. Chrissa says:

    This left the taste of sadness in my thoughts, something broken in the night. Beautiful but uneasy images.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chrissa πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  13. Vivian Zems says:

    A powerful and sad tale indeed. The refrain works so well to echo the cry of despair.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  14. Bev says:

    Marvelous opening lines, somber closing ones.

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  15. We, as a specie, are terrible at looking ahead… or at listening to the cries of all the things we share this planet with. It’s a terrible trait. One that keeps on killing, without stopping to offer explanation.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  16. ZQ says:

    Intriguing picture…a great backdrop for this piece.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Zq πŸ™‚ so good to see you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  17. The whispers may tell us something that we need to know. This seems filled with uncertainty with “death’s dark dreams” nearby.
    Words to fill the mind with thoughts and an evocative picture to add to the dreams.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Joel πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  18. Jim says:

    A catastrophic event of unknown source, poet and readers left in dazed amazement.
    Nice write, Sanaa.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ™‚ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  19. thought provoking

    1. Sanaa says:

      ❀️❀️❀️

  20. Oh, I see you have pollen and lies too. Whether fireflies or daffodils, we are telling the same story from where we stand. Keep telling it!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Absolutely πŸ˜€ thanks for stopping by, Colleen πŸ’„β€οΈ

  21. Wendy Bourke says:

    A beautiful imaged piece … melodious to read aloud.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Wendy πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  22. Margaret says:

    …the witness of the daffodils (loved that!)

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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