Between the crescent moon
and satin sheets
a heated flush is spreading
that makes my heart
taste storm
while city is asleep.
Do you ever wonder
how deep
and decadent it gets
when your scent
as wild as box-berries
writes lines
across my skin–
Photo credits: Pinterest
Posted for ‘Quadrille# 62’ @dVerse Pub
and on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads
52 Responses
Excellent use of the word, Sanaa! And I LOVE the idea of being able to “taste storm.”
Thank you so much, De 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
(and thank you for the lovely prompt)
Sanaa, your magic has made even the word box romantic! I love the lines:
‘a heated flush is spreading
that makes my heart
taste storm’ – wow!
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
So very clever, Sanaa. We usually say “listen to your heart” but here you used “smell and taste the Heart. Fits perfectly. Thank you for posting.
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Thank you so much, Jim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
An accomplished poem – I loved every word
Thank you so much, Jae 😀 so good to see you ❤️
There is nothing quite as gripping as the scent and feel of a loved one. What a beautiful poem you have created here.
Thank you so much, Robin 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
OOH, the flow of the poem is reminiscent of the gentle touch of a lover. The scent writing lines on the skin is such an evocative feeling — the smell, the ardor, the intimacy all have such a pathos like quality to them with the end in sight. Almost reminded me of the word “Viraha”. And that took me to Faiz.
Sublimely done.
Oh gosh!❤️ Thank you soo much, Anmol 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️
I also liked the idea of a heart tasting storm.
Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Geez, Sanaa. This might be my favorite of all your poems.
Seriously, this is why short poetry exists — instant impact.
Thank you so much, Shawna 😀 so good to see you ❤️
you have made something deliciously desirous out of this prompt
Thank you so much, Laura 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Oh, wow! One of your most sensual and delicious pieces yet! My own skin is tingling. 🙂
Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Wow! This is delicious! I especially love the final question… wild as box-berries… What a gorgeous image.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
I like the idea of scent writing lines on someone’s skin.
Thank you so much, Frank 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
There are whole lives and worlds happening in those first five lines. The sensuality is touchable.
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so good to see you ❤️
WOW- You packed a punch in those 44 words Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
The last three lines are killer
Thank you so much, Toni 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
This is an utter delight to read Sanaa! Just lovely! Sigh…..
Awww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Carrie 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️
….and thank you for the sweet words over at my blog You are so sweet Sanaa!
❤️❤️❤️
when your scent
as wild as box-berries
writes lines
across my skin–
A male scent is an all overpowering phenomena to the innocent sweet young things
Hank
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Hank ❤️
Goodness! This is gorgeously sensual, Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Kylie 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Those first five lines are superb and describe the feeling of passion perfectly!
Thank you so much, Chris 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Sensual and passionate write….
Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I found this quite sensual. Nice quadrille.
Thank you so much, Arcadia Maria 😀 so good to see you ❤️
“makes my heart taste storm” – Wow! This is a delicious poem.
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Deep yes, passionate yes. But why decadent? This is beautiful. I like the pull of the moon, she is in a tide with her love. You have wrapped all the senses together in a unified swell. Now I need to go, I really need to go… got to take care of something, you’ve thrown the whole schedule off by the way, I sincerely thank you for that. Blushing ☺️
Thank you so much, Lona 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
This is wonderfully sensuous, Sanaa! I love the lines:
‘a heated flush is spreading that makes my heart taste storm’… 💙
Thank you so much, Priya 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Simultaneously evocative and erotic, and so beautifully done!
Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️