This is how it’s going to be
Sanaa -
October 5, 2020
Earlier PoemsPoetry

Between the strokes of dawn
October sighs,
graceful boughs with prettiest of charcoal sketches
as feeling grows—
I would open a vein for you;
if it meant to shield you from the hypocrisies of the world,
fidelity dark amber is a blanket of sorts.

 

 

Photo credits: Heartache by Jen Duran

Merril is our hostess today at dVerse and the word is “Blanket.” Come join us! ❤️

Posted for Quadrille #113 @ dVerse Poets Pub

50 Responses

  1. Laura Bloomsbury says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:10 am

    visceral and very powerful last line Sanaa

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  2. Bjorn Rudberg says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:23 am

    Oh, what a strong poem… showing how passion is very close to death… the dark theme of love is often forgotten for the more flowery parts.

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  3. Kim M. Russell says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:27 am

    I love the dark passion in this poem, Sanaa! October does sigh, and what a lovely image of ‘graceful boughs with prettiest of charcoal sketches’.

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  4. Jane Dougherty says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:35 am

    This sounds very dramatic and romantic.

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  5. peter says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:40 am

    Lot’s of interesting contrasts here – ‘prettiest skies’ with ‘I’d open a vein for you’ – fidelity / hypocrisy – 44 words is so short – but packed with ideas here.

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  6. msjadeli says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:44 am

    Sanaa really love those first two lines and the emotional intensity of your poem <3

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  7. Linda Lee Lyberg says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:51 am

    Such powerful words Sanaa.

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  8. Merril D Smith says:
    October 6, 2020 at 3:52 am

    Love as a blanket and shield. Beautiful and intense!

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    • Sanaa says:
      October 6, 2020 at 5:37 am

      Thank you so much, Merril 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you 💄❤️

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt)

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  9. Sarah Connor says:
    October 6, 2020 at 4:40 am

    There’s a sad energy to this love affair, Sanaa.

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  10. gillena says:
    October 6, 2020 at 5:12 am

    Creatively dark. wow
    Happy Monday Sanaa

    Much💖love

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  11. Toni H Spencer says:
    October 6, 2020 at 5:38 am

    Very passionate. I would have opened a vein for Brad. That is true love.

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  12. Grace says:
    October 6, 2020 at 5:47 am

    Such a lovely sketch of charcoal specially with the ending line. Love can move us to the deep edges of life.

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  13. Raivenne says:
    October 6, 2020 at 5:50 am

    “as feeling grows—
    I would open a vein for you;”

    God, do I feel those lines. Excellent.

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  14. Ken Gierke says:
    October 6, 2020 at 6:21 am

    This line:
    “if it meant to shield you from the hypocrisies of the world”

    So intimate.

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  15. Ron. says:
    October 6, 2020 at 6:23 am

    Powerful, powerful piece, Sanaa. Not a wasted breath here (you know I admire brevity, right?) nor a less-than-stellar image. And all of that excellence accompanied by some outstanding artwork. My evening is complete. Thanks.

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  16. Dora says:
    October 6, 2020 at 7:44 am

    The words are as visceral as the painting, more so as they offer comfort and protection from the world.

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  17. Hank Kaykuala says:
    October 6, 2020 at 7:53 am

    to shield you from the hypocrisies of the world,
    fidelity dark amber is a blanket of sorts.

    The rights of darkness to protect unwanted hues that may be embarrassing to be revealed. It works that way, yes and a great poem, Sanaa!

    Hank

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  18. Christine says:
    October 6, 2020 at 8:31 am

    Beautiful poem. Is that your drawing?

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  19. Arcadia Maria says:
    October 6, 2020 at 8:37 am

    Nicely done.

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  20. finely spun says:
    October 6, 2020 at 11:34 am

    so intriguing. you would open your vein. nicely paired with this exquisite art.

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  21. Ingrid says:
    October 6, 2020 at 2:41 pm

    I love your words and the striking image you’ve used. You’ve obviously written this for someone you care deeply about. Fidelity is certainly a blanket of sorts and I love the words you’ve chosen to describe it: ‘dark amber.’

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  22. Kerfe says:
    October 6, 2020 at 9:27 pm

    Dark and yet comforting.

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  23. Judy Dykstra Brown says:
    October 6, 2020 at 10:10 pm

    A powerful poem, and illustration, Sanaa..

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  24. Paul Cannon says:
    October 6, 2020 at 11:06 pm

    “I would open a vein for you” such is th epower of your love and compassion, something very deep.

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  25. calmkate says:
    October 8, 2020 at 5:33 am

    love the imagery in this, we often put blankets or layers on those we love for protection … you captured this well!

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  26. Sara McNulty says:
    October 9, 2020 at 8:45 am

    Pulsing with passion. Love the artwork as well.

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