Untitled (of love and buried thoughts)

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I gaze upon calm and insouciant blue
that seems to embrace a crimson lake,
urging my heart not tremble at sound
for fear oh breath may dream dismiss.

Have you ever wondered what it’s like
to be me steeped in shades of autumn,
care to advise as to why my heart into
your web of lies descends.

Love, if I could persuade day and night
would impede hours so as to make you
stay, can’t bear to waste sweet moment
knowing our world is soon to end.

Have you ever wondered what it’s like
to be me baffled by your changing face,
care to advise as to why my soul defies
in order to make amends.

Love, if I could shuffle light and dark
would empower hope lest you should
stray, can’t bear oh thought of waking
to a world where sorrow cannot name 
its friend.

I gaze upon calm and insouciant blue
that seems to embrace a crimson lake,
urging my heart not tremble at sound
for fear oh breath may dream dismiss.

 

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Posted for ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

& Posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Pub

Comments

  1. kaykuala h says:

    care to advise as to why my soul defies
    in order to make amends

    Love can cause confusing trends in the mind that defy any sane explanation. Rightly so Sanaa. It makes it more interesting, though!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤ thanks for stopping by, Hank 😊

  2. Old Egg says:

    Even if love doesn’t hurt us it certainly troubles us at times as that yearning takes control and fear of a rebuff seems possible. There is so much yearning in this poem Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤ thanks for stopping by, Robin 😊

  3. Kerry says:

    The third stanza particularly caught my breath. The narrative voice is quite remarkable, loving, yet strong.

    can’t bear oh thought of waking
    to a world where sorrow cannot name
    its friend.

    Amen.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😊 so glad you liked it ❤

  4. The contrast of blue and the crimson lake paint an intriguing picture.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen 😊 so glad you liked it ❤

  5. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    The burden of life is heavy if love is evasive… well penned.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn 😊 so good to see you ❤

  6. Julian says:

    So many times (unluckily) love may decend into a web of lies……..
    Love, if I could shuffle light and dark
    would empower hope lest you should
    stray, can’t bear oh thought of waking
    to a world where sorrow cannot name
    its friend………………………………The use of repeating the first stanza to finish with…….Love it

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Julian 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  7. I had to read this aloud, particularly to hear the phrases: ‘insouciant blue’; ‘steeped in shades of autumn’; and ‘if I could shuffle light and dark’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  8. paul scribbles says:

    Love. It’s a dance.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ❤️ thanks for stopping by, Paul 🙂

  9. Manicddaily says:

    I agree –there is a great deal of passionate yearning here–the heartfelt qualities palpable. Thanks. k.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Karin 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  10. Can’t help but feel the lake carries a certain amount of reflection. Even the structure of this poem has an ebb and flow.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Martin 🙂 so good to see you ❤️

  11. This is my latest favorite by you, Sanaa. Especially the penultimate stanza. I would love a world where sorrow dies of loneliness.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  12. Xenia says:

    A beautiful write Sanaa, I love your voice in this :o) xxx

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Xenia 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  13. Sanaa, this poem of yours is gold and super incredible.

    Your words become your voice that rings louder and beautifully.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Awww!❤️ Thank you so much, Charlie 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️

  14. Love lost, love gone bad like blackened bananas, like milk left out too long–yet your poem has elegance, sweetness & sorrow in equal measures. Yup, love is a dance, and a journey, and both a panacea & pariah.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Glenn 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  15. Alwi Shatry says:

    Wonderful sentiments, delicately expressed. A dance with fate beautifully penned.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Alwi 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  16. Jilly says:

    The voice of this is so strong and clear! Bravo!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jilly 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  17. Amaya says:

    “where sorrow cannot name its friend” is such a compelling line, Sanaa. And the repetition worked well here, as if you’re going back to that dreamy place in order to capture it forever.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Amaya 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️

  18. I love the return at the end to the beginning of this poem. Many times it doesn’t work to do that, but it’s perfect here.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sarah 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

  19. Did I miss this the first time around? I think it might have been when I was off-line. I love the colours, the ‘insouciant blue’ and the ‘crimson lake’, which have got me longing for autumn, my favourite season, when I can be ‘steeped in shades of autumn’. But your shades of autumn are sadly the end of something, not the beginning, and I can feel your sorrow throughout the poem, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  20. annell4 says:

    A beautifully written poem.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️

  21. Frank says:

    Fear of a dream being dismissed can be powerful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Frank ❤️

  22. Imelda says:

    Beautifully written as always. 🙂

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Imelda 😀 so good to see you ❤️

  23. Jane Seymour says:

    “Love, if I could persuade day and night….” this stanza is unbelievably beautiful and stands all on its own!💖

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane 😀 so glad you liked it ❤

  24. Chris Evans says:

    The repetition works really well and adds to the magic and allure of the poem. Beautifully rendered.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Chris 😀 so good to see you ❤

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