Until the end of time

Spread the love

Akin to unrehearsed play
come and loosen with bare hands
as tide wears dove-colored sands
oust inhibitions astray.

I circle in mute phrases
feel doubts and unease burning
is there chance – our returning
I pine through empty stages.

With lips that deny distance
come whisper to restless soul
as ardor claims full control
in lyrical persistence.

Love, I have done this before
mourning as paired souls are threshed
on warm night in Budapest
stars strewn across grassy floor.

I yearn for ache – powerful
one that taints heavens above
recounting sad tale of love
through valleys sweet – flowerful

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Form: TanagaΒ Β 

Posted on Sunday Mini-Challenge @ Real Toads

& Posted on the Poetry Pantry @ Poets United

Comments

  1. beautiful,sensual with words that give the sense of feeling… enjoyed it very much

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Robert πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  2. Bekkie says:

    This Saturday has few offerings yet I’m not used to being the first. Lol! I loved the line, “stars strewn across grassy floor.” I see them glittering there at my feet.

    Love is so overpowering in it’s “all.” You captured that “ache” well, Sanaa! I enjoyed this prompt. Hugs!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bekkie πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  3. “With lips that deny distance” I totally love what this line implies, what it says about words and communication in general. Just yummy.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  4. Bjorn says:

    Such a lyrical tale of longing … do we ever appreciate love as much as afterwards?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  5. kaykuala says:

    With lips that deny distance
    come whisper to restless soul
    as ardor claims full control
    in lyrical persistence.

    Aptly describing the tenacity of love, Sanaa! Lovely shot from a young heart!

    Hank

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Hank πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  6. Kerry O'Connor says:

    Such a passionate piece. I especially adore the second to last tanaga but all work together very well.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  7. Thotpurge says:

    circle in mute phrases.. like that!!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  8. Old Egg says:

    That ache for love is quite obsessive isn’t it? Unless you have felt that yearning that hurt you don’t realise what love is all about. How well you have captured this Sanaa. I say this as an oldie with memories still niggling at me so many, many years after.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Robin ❀️

  9. Wow, Sanaa, you went the distance with this one! I could only manage one Tanaga but you’ve built a whole poem out of them. I especially love:
    ‘I circle in mute phrases
    feel doubts and unease burning
    is there chance – our returning
    I pine through empty stages’.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  10. Jae Rose says:

    A beautifully romantic poem

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jae πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  11. Mary says:

    You have really captured the yearning, the ache, the depth of what love is. I like the word ‘flowerful’ at the conclusion!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  12. How often we lament about lost loves…beautiful!

    ‘I circle in mute phrases
    feel doubts and unease burning
    is there chance – our returning
    I pine through empty stages.’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Donna πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  13. Rommy says:

    Long distance love affairs can be pretty tough. But if lovers are determined enough, sometimes things work out.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Rommy ❀️

  14. That yearning and ache…so powerfully captured by you.
    Indeed, love has the power to make heavens answer.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Neeraj πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  15. scott hastie says:

    Like the honesty in this Sanaa – in essence -the sweetness on going yearnings that for a brave, ambitious and romantic heart are always worth what they cost us…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Scott πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  16. Marian says:

    Ah, wonderful, Sanaa! Overachiever! πŸ™‚
    I love how you ended this sultry poem on the word “flowerful,” and in a strictly rhyming verse nonetheless. Really good.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  17. Sherri B. says:

    This is lovely, filled with so many profound phrases – I can’t pick a favorite! Lovely write.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!❀️ Thank you so much, Sherri πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it!❀️

  18. dsnake1 says:

    a sensual poem, Sanaa.
    loved the rhyming scheme, the cadence flows along like a dance. a real delight to read. πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Cheong πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  19. Julian says:

    A did enjoy reading your piece of well crafted writing with its continuous syllable count of seven per line along with the continuity or rhyme. You always please my mind with your poetry.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Julian πŸ™‚ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  20. Such romance, I love the reference to a warm night in Budapest, “stars strewn across grassy floor.” I love the dove-colored sand” also.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  21. Yes, “through valleys sweet.” Love this.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  22. gillena says:

    Passionate and sensuous, Luv how you meld the tangible and intangible in this one.
    Thanks for dropping by my Sunday Standard today Sanaa

    much love…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  23. A spell. I love the power of the last word: flowerful.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  24. Truedessa says:

    I love this form and the rhymes – one can feel the passion, but also there is a sense of loss – perhaps, time and distance. My favorite is verse 3, but I do love the image of the stars at the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Truedessa πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  25. Goodness, this is beautiful, and you managed a form so exquisitely that I struggled so with.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susie πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  26. Gorgeously sensual. You rocked this form! And how I love your rhyming, particularly “flowerful”.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  27. Jim says:

    Beautiful thoughts, Sanaa. I once felt “we” were there,and had the rug pulled out from under. This Second one has lasted 45 years, a good sign.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  28. Margaret says:

    Very clever – such passion expressed in a structured rhyming scheme – NOT easy to do but you certainly succeeded!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  29. I love your title and the whole poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

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