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Sanaa -
May 6, 2019
Earlier PoemsPoetry

Poem inspired by the title of Robert Burns poetic masterpiece, “Up in the morning early.”

Up in the morning early
where does your mind go,
how far
are you willing to wander in the bustle of day,
where waves of sepulchral dreams
await
recalling words of May;
and if I stay
would you hold me as darkening hills unfold?

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted on ‘Quadrille #79’ @ dVerse Pub

And on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads 

58 Responses

  1. De Jackson says:
    May 7, 2019 at 4:26 am

    I love this ominous, beautiful line, especially:
    “would you hold me as darkening hills unfold”

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    • Sanaa says:
      May 8, 2019 at 12:10 am

      Thank you so much, De 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt) 🌹

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  2. gillena says:
    May 7, 2019 at 5:37 am

    Delightful always i luv when the poet poses a question
    Thanks for linking to Monday WRites today

    Much💚love

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  3. lynn__ says:
    May 7, 2019 at 5:59 am

    Lovely, winsome, and a bit mysterious…per your usual, Sanaa!

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  4. Arcadia Maria says:
    May 7, 2019 at 7:56 am

    Beautiful words.

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  5. Grace says:
    May 7, 2019 at 8:06 am

    Lovely thoughts and indeed the title says it all.

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  6. Frank Hubeny says:
    May 7, 2019 at 8:14 am

    Nice last line about those darkening hills.

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  7. Dr. Crystal Grimes says:
    May 7, 2019 at 8:15 am

    Great questions in this poem, and I like the inspiration. Thanks for sharing!

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  8. Beverly Crawford says:
    May 7, 2019 at 8:17 am

    Well, at 85, no more hustle in my days and no one to hold me as darkening hills unfold. Sure had fun reading about it, though!

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  9. Dwight L. Roth says:
    May 7, 2019 at 8:57 am

    For better and for worse… some will stay some will go… Very nicely done

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  10. calmkate says:
    May 7, 2019 at 6:29 pm

    a nice take on Burns … nicely phrased question!

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  11. Ron. Lavalette says:
    May 7, 2019 at 9:05 pm

    Nice write. Interestingly, my Toads poem, today, answers your question.

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  12. Linda Lee Lyberg says:
    May 7, 2019 at 9:50 pm

    Beautiful and mysterious Sanaa.

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  13. Kerry says:
    May 7, 2019 at 10:03 pm

    This is a wonderful aubade for May.

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  14. Rommy says:
    May 7, 2019 at 10:29 pm

    I like the way this piece seems to hold its breath and wait, teetering on the edge of both bright and dark. A heart that beats as strongly in the dark as in the light is a beautiful and rare find.

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  15. Colleen@ LOOSELEAFNOTES says:
    May 7, 2019 at 10:44 pm

    I think in the morning we have some choice but then as the day goes our mind is lost, at least true for me. The darkening hills. I see them.

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  16. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:
    May 7, 2019 at 11:42 pm

    Lovely. And its brevity and open-endedness are perfect.

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  17. Sherry Blue Sky says:
    May 8, 2019 at 12:59 am

    Beautiful. I love the question in the closing lines.

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  18. annell4 says:
    May 8, 2019 at 1:44 am

    A wonderful poem, my favorite today!!!

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  19. Toni Hayes Spencer says:
    May 8, 2019 at 2:19 am

    A wonderful poem. I like the question at the end so much.

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  20. Bjorn Rudberg says:
    May 8, 2019 at 2:28 am

    Oh, if you have someone to hold on to, every challenge of darkness is possible to overcome.

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  21. Kim M. Russell says:
    May 8, 2019 at 2:33 am

    You’ve transformed ‘up’ into a romantic word, Sanaa, with your sprinkle of magic. I love the ‘waves of sepulchral dreams’ and the promise – or is it threat – of the unfolding darkening hills.

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  22. Barbara MacKenzie says:
    May 8, 2019 at 3:45 am

    and if I stay
    would you hold me as darkening hills unfold?

    love your ending…questions and images fill my mind…bkm

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  23. Jim says:
    May 8, 2019 at 5:08 am

    I like that, Sanaa, holding her until the hills unfold.. That is a long lasting hold, an invitation or proposition for a long, long relationship. Plenty of irregular rhyme also, regular end and internal.
    ..

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  24. Frank J. Tassone says:
    May 8, 2019 at 8:16 am

    Brilliant! I love this line especially:

    “where waves of sepulchral dreams…”

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  25. Thotpurge says:
    May 8, 2019 at 9:52 am

    Nice closing line!

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  26. Magaly Guerrero says:
    May 9, 2019 at 7:12 am

    That final question runs deep, all the way to where the roots of “I’ll stay” or “I’ll walk away forever” grow.

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  27. robtkistner says:
    May 9, 2019 at 8:15 am

    This beautiful Sanaa! The closing line is exquisite…

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  28. Marian says:
    May 11, 2019 at 9:22 pm

    How far are you willing to wander? That is a great question.

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  29. Sara McNulty says:
    May 19, 2019 at 7:49 am

    Just enough hint of mystery in this one. Beautiful language.

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