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Poem inspired by the title of Robert Burns poetic masterpiece, “Up in the morning early.”

Up in the morning early
where does your mind go,
how far
are you willing to wander
in the bustle of day,
where waves of sepulchral dreams
await
recalling words of May;
and if I stay
would you hold me as darkening hills unfold?

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted on ‘Quadrille #79’ @ dVerse Pub

And on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toadsย 

Comments

  1. De Jackson says:

    I love this ominous, beautiful line, especially:
    “would you hold me as darkening hills unfold”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt) ๐ŸŒน

  2. gillena says:

    Delightful always i luv when the poet poses a question
    Thanks for linking to Monday WRites today

    Much๐Ÿ’šlove

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

      Much๐ŸŒป๐ŸŒน๐ŸŒทlove

  3. lynn__ says:

    Lovely, winsome, and a bit mysterious…per your usual, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Lynn ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  4. Beautiful words.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Arcadia Maria ๐Ÿ˜€ so good to see you โค๏ธ

  5. Grace says:

    Lovely thoughts and indeed the title says it all.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  6. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice last line about those darkening hills.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank ๐Ÿ˜€ so good to see you โค๏ธ

  7. Great questions in this poem, and I like the inspiration. Thanks for sharing!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dr. Crystal ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  8. Well, at 85, no more hustle in my days and no one to hold me as darkening hills unfold. Sure had fun reading about it, though!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Beverly ๐Ÿ™‚ so good to see you โค๏ธ

  9. For better and for worse… some will stay some will go… Very nicely done

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  10. calmkate says:

    a nice take on Burns … nicely phrased question!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kate ๐Ÿ˜€ so good to see you โค๏ธ

  11. Nice write. Interestingly, my Toads poem, today, answers your question.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Ron ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  12. Beautiful and mysterious Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Linda ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  13. Kerry says:

    This is a wonderful aubade for May.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  14. Rommy says:

    I like the way this piece seems to hold its breath and wait, teetering on the edge of both bright and dark. A heart that beats as strongly in the dark as in the light is a beautiful and rare find.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rommy ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you โค๏ธ

  15. I think in the morning we have some choice but then as the day goes our mind is lost, at least true for me. The darkening hills. I see them.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ๐Ÿ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Colleen โค๏ธ

  16. Lovely. And its brevity and open-endedness are perfect.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rosemary ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  17. Beautiful. I love the question in the closing lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  18. annell4 says:

    A wonderful poem, my favorite today!!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell ๐Ÿ˜€ so good to see you โค๏ธ

  19. A wonderful poem. I like the question at the end so much.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  20. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Oh, if you have someone to hold on to, every challenge of darkness is possible to overcome.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely ๐Ÿ˜€ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn โค๏ธ

  21. Youโ€™ve transformed โ€˜upโ€™ into a romantic word, Sanaa, with your sprinkle of magic. I love the โ€˜waves of sepulchral dreamsโ€™ and the promise – or is it threat – of the unfolding darkening hills.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  22. and if I stay
    would you hold me as darkening hills unfold?

    love your ending…questions and images fill my mind…bkm

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barbara ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  23. Jim says:

    I like that, Sanaa, holding her until the hills unfold.. That is a long lasting hold, an invitation or proposition for a long, long relationship. Plenty of irregular rhyme also, regular end and internal.
    ..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jim ๐Ÿ˜€ so good to see you โค๏ธ

  24. Brilliant! I love this line especially:

    “where waves of sepulchral dreams…”

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  25. Thotpurge says:

    Nice closing line!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  26. That final question runs deep, all the way to where the roots of “I’ll stay” or “I’ll walk away forever” grow.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you โค๏ธ

  27. robtkistner says:

    This beautiful Sanaa! The closing line is exquisite…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rob ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

  28. Marian says:

    How far are you willing to wander? That is a great question.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Marian ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you liked it โค๏ธ

  29. Sara McNulty says:

    Just enough hint of mystery in this one. Beautiful language.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara ๐Ÿ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it โค๏ธ

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