Poem inspired by the title of Robert Burns poetic masterpiece, “Up in the morning early.”
Up in the morning early
where does your mind go,
how far
are you willing to wander in the bustle of day,
where waves of sepulchral dreams
await
recalling words of May;
and if I stay
would you hold me as darkening hills unfold?
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Posted on ‘Quadrille #79’ @ dVerse Pub
And on Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads
I love this ominous, beautiful line, especially:
“would you hold me as darkening hills unfold”
Thank you so much, De 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
(and thank you for the lovely prompt) 🌹
Delightful always i luv when the poet poses a question
Thanks for linking to Monday WRites today
Much💚love
Thank you so much, Gillena 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Much🌻🌹🌷love
Lovely, winsome, and a bit mysterious…per your usual, Sanaa!
Thank you so much, Lynn 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Beautiful words.
Thank you so much, Arcadia Maria 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Lovely thoughts and indeed the title says it all.
Thank you so much, Grace 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Nice last line about those darkening hills.
Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Great questions in this poem, and I like the inspiration. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you so much, Dr. Crystal 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Well, at 85, no more hustle in my days and no one to hold me as darkening hills unfold. Sure had fun reading about it, though!
Thank you so much, Beverly 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
For better and for worse… some will stay some will go… Very nicely done
Thank you so much, Dwight 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
a nice take on Burns … nicely phrased question!
Thank you so much, Kate 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Nice write. Interestingly, my Toads poem, today, answers your question.
Thank you so much, Ron 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Beautiful and mysterious Sanaa.
Thank you so much, Linda 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
This is a wonderful aubade for May.
Thank you so much, Kerry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I like the way this piece seems to hold its breath and wait, teetering on the edge of both bright and dark. A heart that beats as strongly in the dark as in the light is a beautiful and rare find.
Thank you so much, Rommy 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️
I think in the morning we have some choice but then as the day goes our mind is lost, at least true for me. The darkening hills. I see them.
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Colleen ❤️
Lovely. And its brevity and open-endedness are perfect.
Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Beautiful. I love the question in the closing lines.
Thank you so much, Sherry 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
A wonderful poem, my favorite today!!!
Thank you so much, Annell 😀 so good to see you ❤️
A wonderful poem. I like the question at the end so much.
Thank you so much, Toni 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Oh, if you have someone to hold on to, every challenge of darkness is possible to overcome.
Definitely 😀 thanks for stopping by, Bjorn ❤️
You’ve transformed ‘up’ into a romantic word, Sanaa, with your sprinkle of magic. I love the ‘waves of sepulchral dreams’ and the promise – or is it threat – of the unfolding darkening hills.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
and if I stay
would you hold me as darkening hills unfold?
love your ending…questions and images fill my mind…bkm
Thank you so much, Barbara 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I like that, Sanaa, holding her until the hills unfold.. That is a long lasting hold, an invitation or proposition for a long, long relationship. Plenty of irregular rhyme also, regular end and internal.
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Thank you so much, Jim 😀 so good to see you ❤️
Brilliant! I love this line especially:
“where waves of sepulchral dreams…”
Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Nice closing line!
Thank you so much, Rajani 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
That final question runs deep, all the way to where the roots of “I’ll stay” or “I’ll walk away forever” grow.
Thank you so much, Magaly 😀 so glad the poem resonated with you ❤️
This beautiful Sanaa! The closing line is exquisite…
Thank you so much, Rob 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
How far are you willing to wander? That is a great question.
Thank you so much, Marian 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Just enough hint of mystery in this one. Beautiful language.
Thank you so much, Sara 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️