October morning
is wistful and reticent as feeling
one after the other threads
through fire and frost,
and dialogue takes several turns
from passionate
to apathetic in a span of few minutes.
Careful
would you have entered
into heated discussion
could you foresee
how fragile and unassuming my heart?
There is silence
as starling grieves
should you doubt my intentions
the alchemy of desire near hour
of twilight.
I find this aspect
to be somewhat exhausting
when you think of me as a stranger
though I am familiar with your mind,
your body and soul,
it’s not in my nature to despair
your memory
a pond edged with swirling leaves.
Love is fallacious
a prayer unheard that circles the rumbling sky
and though I am certain
your chaos is a threat to my calm
and ordinary life,
I cannot hope to unlearn your existence.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Word List: twilight, frost, aspect, october.
Posted for Get Listed: October Edition @ Real Toads
also Posted on Open Link Night @ dVerse Poets Pub
Wow, beautiful and intense. The final stanza gave me goosebumps.
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You certainly used more than 150 words! A lovely poem. I like how the conversation goes from intense to apathetic, sort of like the year winding down to the end.
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PS: It’s 144 words.
That final line made for an excellent turn… so true… you cannot rip someone from your memory without harm…
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Nice last line and thought that love is a prayer unheard.
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Oh! The fallacy of love creates this scenario of hurt and bewilderment and you define and describe it with a certain pathos and tenderness. I love how your poems look at the relationships from up close — there is strength in this recognition with such clarity.
I loved this bit in particular: “it’s not in my nature to despair /your memory/a pond edged with swirling leaves.” <3
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So sad this is turning out to be. I specially admire this part:
it’s not in my nature to despair
your memory
a pond edged with swirling leaves.
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Lovely, Sanaa. You personalize October so wonderfully in the first stanza alone:
October morning
is wistful and reticent as feeling
one after the other threads
through fire and frost,
and dialogue takes several turns
from passionate
to apathetic in a span of few minutes.
Beautiful!
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“from passionate
to apathetic in a span of few minutes.”
These lines set the ominous mood so well, Sanaa. There is a sense of vague unease in them, as if nothing or no one can be trusted, and all is rapidly ephemeral. I also like the artwork. It seems I usually like the art you choose to accompany your pieces:)
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Loved it all, but especially the third stanza.
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These are the lines that resonated with me,
“and though I am certain
your chaos is a threat to my calm
and ordinary life,
I cannot hope to unlearn your existence.”
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Beautiful, Sanna, the second stanza is especially touching to me….”carefull” …”my unassuming heart”…”alchemy of desire near hour
of twilight.”
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Beautifully done, Sanaa! You’ve captured the wistfulness of an October morning and the fragility of relationships.. I particularly love ‘the alchemy of desire near hour / of twilight’ and ‘your memory /
a pond edged with swirling leaves’.
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I too love that last stanza…..and that last line! Love, love it.
Pat
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your chaos is a threat to my calm
and ordinary life,
I cannot hope to unlearn your existence.
How very sad when it does not run that smooth. Perhaps love is meant to be with all the ups and downs to make it more interesting.
Hank
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Beautiful ,Sanaa .You can unlearn their existence…it takes a while.
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A beautifully intense poem- love it 😍
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beautiful and deeply stirring poem, ‘I cannot hope to unlearn your existence’ poignant phrase.
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Oh the complications of love – so beautifully expressed – and then ending -superb.
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To “unlearn” someone we (once loved) love is a great line. Beautiful in its sadness.
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“Love is fallacious a prayer unheard that circles the rumbling sky.” Is a correct description. Sanaa. Hopefully though, it will turn into a close liflong friendship that we also call love.
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such beautiful imagery through out the poem, and this is my favourite
your memory
a pond edged with swirling leaves
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Such a tender poem for me now. Memory is a knife of disruption pricking the hurt of loss and change. Ironic and powerful title in that the final turn shows that remembrance can not be unlearned in something that counts as love, but hurts in the loss to ever again be tasted sweet. Or perhaps the final turn shows the imprisonment of desire and obsession, she knows she cannot be free. So many personal layered ways to read this, but for me it is sharply tender just now. Thanks a lot 💜
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Beautiful! This puts me in the mind of the quote “Conflict is growth trying to happen” by Harville ❤️
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‘There is silence
as starling grieves
should you doubt my intentions
the alchemy of desire near hour
of twilight.’
My goodness this is intense!
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Love is fallacious/a prayer unheard that circles the rumbling sky… such gorgeous phrasing here, Sanaa! 😍
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