The Dark Night of Soul
Sanaa -
February 13, 2018
Earlier PoemsPoetry

Beyond your words there lies a dark
world, daring me step into the mists
and dreams. I am glued to confusion,
a dubious murmur of red alchemy,
the devilry of your kiss as outside an
uncertain sky bathed in pale October
light bears witness.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted for ‘Quadrille #50′ @ dVerse Pub

and on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

60 Responses

  1. De Jackson says:
    February 13, 2018 at 5:55 am

    MAN, this wants to be the title of a whole ‘nother poem:
    “a dubious murmur of red alchemy”

    And maybe even a novel. Wonderful.

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  2. lillian says:
    February 13, 2018 at 6:13 am

    ooooh…..loving especially those last three lines!

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  3. Vivian Zems says:
    February 13, 2018 at 6:43 am

    The uncertainty of the main character about this dubious person….you describe it so well. I like how the only witness – the sky- is also uncertain.

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  4. Debi says:
    February 13, 2018 at 7:07 am

    I am glued to confusion,
    a dubious murmur of red alchemy, ……. you so have a way with descriptive words.

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  5. Frank says:
    February 13, 2018 at 9:00 am

    I like the reference to a dark world and light bearing witness.

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  6. Walter Marks says:
    February 13, 2018 at 9:26 am

    It does indeed sound like the beginning of a novel; of mystery and intrigue. What to expect next? Very moving

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  7. Jo-Anne Teal says:
    February 13, 2018 at 9:40 am

    I too liked the phrase “glued to confusion”. Your descriptions are marvelous.

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  8. Mary says:
    February 13, 2018 at 10:18 am

    Such temptation and reserve!

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  9. Truedessa says:
    February 13, 2018 at 11:10 am

    There is definitely something darker lurking, crossing into another realm. Beware of the devil’s kiss. The reader can feel the tension.

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  10. kaykuala h says:
    February 13, 2018 at 1:19 pm

    Beyond your words there lies a dark
    world, daring me step into the mists
    and dreams.

    There certainly is a challenge after the murmurings of words! Great word-craft Sanaa!

    Hank

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  11. Bjorn Rudberg says:
    February 13, 2018 at 1:24 pm

    That red alchemy is wonderful.

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  12. Kim M. Russell says:
    February 13, 2018 at 4:21 pm

    Just beautiful, Sanaa! I love the lines:
    ‘a dubious murmur of red alchemy’
    and
    ‘the devilry of your kiss as outside an
    uncertain sky bathed in pale October’.

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  13. Old Egg says:
    February 13, 2018 at 7:16 pm

    Glad to see you were entranced by the devilry of his kiss! How beautifully you wrote this Sanaa, but let me know if you need rescuing.

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  14. Thotpurge says:
    February 13, 2018 at 7:50 pm

    glued to confusion is a great image!

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  15. Amaya says:
    February 13, 2018 at 7:52 pm

    The dark night of the soul can be quite the seducer, can’t it?

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  16. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:
    February 13, 2018 at 8:38 pm

    I thought you and Robin would be bound to post the most romantic poems (each in your own unique styles) this Valentine’s Day week. And indeed this is romantic – but it also surprises and intrigues with the darkness and uncertainty. Yes, “red alchemy” is wonderfully striking; I also like “the devilry of your kiss”.

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  17. Rall says:
    February 13, 2018 at 11:07 pm

    The devil’s a good kisser and he loves gals who write poetry 🙂

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  18. Laura Bloomsbury says:
    February 14, 2018 at 12:07 am

    you painted the lyrical on thick and colourful here Sanaa – “a dubious murmur of red alchemy,
    the devilry of your kiss “

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  19. gillena says:
    February 14, 2018 at 2:11 am

    Your love persona is dark and ingriguing. Be he human be he not thats a puzzle read i to your words

    Have a good Tuesday Sanaa

    Much💚love

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  20. Paul says:
    February 14, 2018 at 2:21 am

    My turn to sigh…and to say WoW

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  21. Candy says:
    February 14, 2018 at 3:24 am

    “the devilry of your kiss” – now that’s pure romance

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  22. Magaly Guerrero says:
    February 14, 2018 at 6:16 am

    Words reveal much, but sometimes they hide even more. One can only hope that the whisper in the dark is just a gift waiting to be shared with only the right person.

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  23. Frank J. Tassone says:
    February 14, 2018 at 9:43 am

    Deep, Sanaa! Deep! I love your combination of these compelling lines with that haunting image!

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  24. Kerry says:
    February 15, 2018 at 12:26 am

    For a short poem, you have a wonderful selection of words contained within.

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  25. D.Avery says:
    February 15, 2018 at 10:23 am

    That was indubitably done well. The whole read was like creeping through an old abandoned house wondering at its mysteries

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  26. Jim says:
    February 15, 2018 at 10:52 am

    Beware, “the devilry of your kiss as outside an
    uncertain sky bathed in pale October
    light bears witness.”
    I should certainly say it does. This was a fun little read, Sanaa. But we should take our doubts seriously as it seems you writer is doing.
    ..

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  27. Susie Clevenger says:
    February 15, 2018 at 11:20 am

    There can be so much confusion in a kiss. ..Beautiful piece!

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  28. Mary NL (Cactus Haiku) says:
    February 16, 2018 at 3:50 pm

    love this. this line especially, ” I am glued to confusion, ” .. .

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  29. Annell Livingston says:
    February 25, 2018 at 11:21 pm

    Nicely done!

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