Beyond your words there lies a dark
world, daring me step into the mists
and dreams. I am glued to confusion,
a dubious murmur of red alchemy,
the devilry of your kiss as outside an
uncertain sky bathed in pale October
light bears witness.
Photo credits: Pinterest
Posted for ‘Quadrille #50′ @ dVerse Pub
and on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads
MAN, this wants to be the title of a whole ‘nother poem:
“a dubious murmur of red alchemy”
And maybe even a novel. Wonderful.
Awww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, De 😀 so glad you liked it!❤️
ooooh…..loving especially those last three lines!
Thank you so much, Lillian 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
The uncertainty of the main character about this dubious person….you describe it so well. I like how the only witness – the sky- is also uncertain.
Thank you so much, Vivian 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
I am glued to confusion,
a dubious murmur of red alchemy, ……. you so have a way with descriptive words.
Thank you so much, Debi 😀 so good to see you ❤️
I’m glad I read this again. The first time my eyes missed “the devilry of your kiss ” now I understand more your confusion but what a delicious debate.
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I like the reference to a dark world and light bearing witness.
Thank you so much, Frank 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
It does indeed sound like the beginning of a novel; of mystery and intrigue. What to expect next? Very moving
Thank you so much, Walter 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
I too liked the phrase “glued to confusion”. Your descriptions are marvelous.
Thank you so much, Joanne 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Such temptation and reserve!
Thank you so much, Mary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
There is definitely something darker lurking, crossing into another realm. Beware of the devil’s kiss. The reader can feel the tension.
Thank you so much, Truedessa 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Beyond your words there lies a dark
world, daring me step into the mists
and dreams.
There certainly is a challenge after the murmurings of words! Great word-craft Sanaa!
Hank
Thank you so much, Hank 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
That red alchemy is wonderful.
Thank you so much, Bjorn 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Just beautiful, Sanaa! I love the lines:
‘a dubious murmur of red alchemy’
and
‘the devilry of your kiss as outside an
uncertain sky bathed in pale October’.
Thank you so much, Kim 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Glad to see you were entranced by the devilry of his kiss! How beautifully you wrote this Sanaa, but let me know if you need rescuing.
Thank you so much, Robin 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
glued to confusion is a great image!
Thank you so much, Rajani 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
The dark night of the soul can be quite the seducer, can’t it?
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Amaya ❤️
I thought you and Robin would be bound to post the most romantic poems (each in your own unique styles) this Valentine’s Day week. And indeed this is romantic – but it also surprises and intrigues with the darkness and uncertainty. Yes, “red alchemy” is wonderfully striking; I also like “the devilry of your kiss”.
Aww gosh!❤️ Thank you so much, Rosemary 😀 so glad you enjoyed it!❤️
The devil’s a good kisser and he loves gals who write poetry 🙂
😉
you painted the lyrical on thick and colourful here Sanaa – “a dubious murmur of red alchemy,
the devilry of your kiss “
Thank you so much, Laura 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
Your love persona is dark and ingriguing. Be he human be he not thats a puzzle read i to your words
Have a good Tuesday Sanaa
Much💚love
Thank you so much, Gillena 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
My turn to sigh…and to say WoW
Thank you so much, Paul 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
“the devilry of your kiss” – now that’s pure romance
Thank you so much, Candace 🙂 so good to see you ❤️
Words reveal much, but sometimes they hide even more. One can only hope that the whisper in the dark is just a gift waiting to be shared with only the right person.
Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Magaly ❤️
Deep, Sanaa! Deep! I love your combination of these compelling lines with that haunting image!
Thank you so much, Frank 😀 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
For a short poem, you have a wonderful selection of words contained within.
Thank you so much, Kerry 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
That was indubitably done well. The whole read was like creeping through an old abandoned house wondering at its mysteries
Thank you so much, D. Avery 🙂 so glad you enjoyed it ❤️
Beware, “the devilry of your kiss as outside an
uncertain sky bathed in pale October
light bears witness.”
I should certainly say it does. This was a fun little read, Sanaa. But we should take our doubts seriously as it seems you writer is doing.
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Definitely 🙂 thanks for stopping by, Jim ❤️
There can be so much confusion in a kiss. ..Beautiful piece!
Thank you so much, Susie 😀 so glad you liked it ❤️
love this. this line especially, ” I am glued to confusion, ” .. .
Thank you so much, Mary 🙂 so glad you liked it ❤️
Nicely done!
Thank you so much, Annell 🙂 so good to see you ❤️